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Rainbow challenges Applejack to a dating competition. The rules: Rainbow picks a time and a place, then Applejack picks a time and a place, and whoever’s date is the best wins. Simple.

Applejack thinks that’s a dumb idea, but goes along with it. Rainbow means well, at least most of the time. It could be fun.

...Right?


Written for the AppleDash group's AppleDash Contest #5, with the prompt "Second Chances".

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Comments ( 19 )

This was a nice, little story of fluff to wake up to at the start of one's day. The story holds a lesson of compromise when showing one's authenticity to their beloved. The piece delves into the heart of some of the qualities about the beginnings of a relationship. The show towards adapting to meet their beloved's expectations in a romantic partner was well executed here.

While I felt there could have been more done in the final act to further enhance Rainbow's emotional distress over the realization of her errors, I posit that it was still adequately resolved her underlying internal struggle, giving an 'authentic' feel to the resolution of the story.

Thank you for considering me to be part of your writing process for this piece. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it :>

Hmm. What do you mean that her emotional distress could've been enhanced? Would you mind giving me an example?

I actually read a fuckin story on this site all the way through

Oh hot deng, well I'm honoured it was one of mine then :o

ok that was really friggin' sweet :twilightsmile:

A nice cute story for a relaxed warm day. T'was moving and inspiring to read. You certainly nailed Rainbow down, and I like that. The thought processes and actions by both parties were very real, and I love seeing that in any type of story :twilightsmile:

Cheers!

You did good, Front, you did good. I was somehow expecting the story to not end on such a sweet note, rather AJ and RD just being friends again, and I'm both satisfied and a bit disappointed by that.

Satisfied because, obviously, having an opening for their realtionship to work is heartwarming. Not everything is resolved, but they have a chance, and I didn't find any clue pointing in the other direction.

A bit disappointed because I feel like you've touched a very interesting, and somehow, deep aspect of relationships, but instead you chose to resolve it in a nice way. By that, I mean one can find another attractive, but when it comes down to actually spend time together, they may find themselves too different. You usually create a picture of what you want the other to be, and when they don't live up to your expectations, it is how huge the gap is between your fantasy and the reality that will make you decide if you want to keep things going on, or rather end them where they are.

That being said, the whole story is strongly delivered. The premise, while sounding a bit silly and, why not, far-fetched, still makes sense. I was waiting to see how you could sell that, and I must say you sold it well to me. The rest follows the same pattern, until the conclusion where I've nitpicked.

Great story, and good luck for the contest.

Edit: And now, I've just seen one of the rule for the contest:

- Applejack and Rainbow Dash must be a couple by the end of your fic.

So, let's say my point still stands, though the fundations are less stable, now.

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I'm glad it came across as real. Thanks :)

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I think I do see your point, though. If I'm going to go for a "real" story, I should really try to emulate a real relationship. Real relationships are like what you say, where each person has sort of a fantasy expectation of what the other person will be like, and that it might not match reality, and exactly as you say - do we plow forward or abandon ship?

I think it's an interesting path to explore. In my mind, that seems like the natural way to go - and I think if I had the time and the interest, I might want to explore that, but yeah, as far as this story goes, all I wanted to do was explore the beginning of a relationship, and a hopeful ending that doesn't guarantee a happy ending.

Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it, Fenton :) If you like it, as a speaker of the language of love, then it must be a really good romance story :O

Just saw that this was featured, Front. Congrats!

You've just got to tell us how the next date goes!

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Thanks, OB :>

As far as another chapter (I'll CC 8392120 too), probably not. This story is kind of complete right now as is, so I'll probably leave it :twilightblush:

Hey! This isn't a farcical comedy, this is an adorable romance! Shenanigans I say!

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oops, bamboozled again :o

:heart:

That was so sweet. :yay:

Dating... One of the toughest things to overcome.

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