A Flash of Realisation

Set in the EK Verse.

Flash Sentry is visiting his family for the weekend but then learns about reactions to the Journal of Friendship.

Now he goes to set the crowd straight.

As well, as this three certain ponies are in the area and watch the Royal Guard.

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edrodriguez

edrodriguez #1 · Aug 13th, 2017 · 1 · ·

I am still giving this a like as well as adding it to my favourite list but u made some mistakes that u need to change like, "No one in prefect" unless if I'm misunderstanding that but I'm pretty shore that it is suppose to be " No pony is perfect".

Magi Tail Welkin

Magi Tail Welkin #2 · Aug 13th, 2017 · 1 · ·

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Thanks, maybe you can PM me the other mistakes?

edrodriguez

edrodriguez #3 · Aug 13th, 2017 · 1 · ·

"but I bet she’s starting to get stick of all this adoration", it is suppose to be sick not stick.
"the fulfilment of its propose" the second word is spelled like this "fulfillment". U left out 1 "l".
"How can I respect someone who doesn’t agree with me" unless if your writing an EQG fimfic, it is suppose to be somepony not someone. Lastly and in my opinion u don't have to change this but u don't need a dash (-) whenever u use words like somepony, everypony, etc... And thats it, at least to my nowledge of the fimfic which is a good fic in my opinion and i cant wait to read more of your stories in the future. Keep up the good work.

Godslittleprincess

Godslittleprincess #4 · Aug 13th, 2017 · 1 · ·

This is great. By the way, I could be wrong, but I thought I saw a bit of C.S. Lewis in Flash's argument. Goodness me, I half-expected that crowd to tear him apart, bake him into a pie, and eat him, considering his status in the fandom. Thankfully, that's not what we got.