• Published 13th Sep 2017
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The Misadventures of Sketchy Clouds - Pinkie Clouds

Born May 13th, 2003, ANMM. Talent of two. This is the story of a pegasus named Sketchy Clouds.

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Prologue - A Foal Was Born

Glassy Amber moaned in pain, her husband, Bally Hoops, next to her. He was holding her hoof, giving reassuring words to his wife.

Beads of sweat were rolling down Amber's face. She sighed heavily and glanced at her loving special somepony. He gave a reassuring look and nodded.

"Honey, you can do this. It's only the third child. The girls will love her," he reassured.

"Yes, maybe. But, what if she, she's a earth pony or something!" Amber exclaimed.

Bally raised an eyebrow at the statement. "That's so bad because why? If she's an earth pony you don't have to teach her magic. And if she is a pegasus you have me." He gave a light peck on his wife. "Besides, the doctor said she's a unicorn."

Amber nodded and sighed again. She suddenly shouted in pain and mumbled something about a contraction.

It was 4:50 A.M in late Spring, and the two ponies were in the Ponyville hospital, giving birth. They have only been there for a few hours, for their foal was approaching its due date.

Amber had to take off from her glasses shop that she worked at for a few days, as of the pain that her foal was causing became unbearable.

"We are going to have to have a talk about kicking when you come out, missy," Amber stated as she poked her bulging stomach.

The stallion in the room rolled his eyes and chuckled. Sure, he loved Amber with his whole heart, but sometimes she could say the weirdest things.

The pregnant mare rolled her eyes as well, and placed a light kiss upon Bally's muzzle. The pegasus stallion copied the kiss, and kissed her on the lips as well.

He broke their light, short kiss at the sound of a magical aura channeling. The two ponies both turned their heads at the door to see a green aura surrounding it.

Their doctor - Doctor Crosshead - was revealed behind the wooden door. He gave a small smile and waved hello. "Okay, Amber. How are you doing?"

Amber grunted as she levitated a rag to her face and wiped the sweat off. She sighed and gave a weak smile. "As good as I'm gonna be, I guess. The contractions are getting closer, I think its coming."

Bally's eyes widened, and he gained a frantic gaze. "Oh my Celestia! Its almost here!" He paused for a second when a sudden realization hit him. "I'm gonna be a father of three fillies..."

Amber was about to give a warm smile when a sudden pain appeared in her stomach, stopping her from doing so.

She grunted in pain, while the doctor called in a nurse. They began to make sure everything was okay.

"I think its coming..... THE FOAL IS COMING, EVERYPONY! GET INTO PLACES!" The nurse exclaimed after she finshed her examination.

Amber was about to freak out when Bally squeezed her hoof, causing her to turn her head towards him. He mouthed the words "you are going to be fine" and she calmed a bit down.

The doctor soon was next to her, along with the nurse. "Okay, miss. Just push the foal out." Amber did as told, almost crying while doing it.

She continued pushing, and soon enough the head can out. The body pushed through, and all that was left was the legs.

"Almost there, sweetie! One more push and that should do!" The nurse encouraged.

Sure enough, the foal came out, and the doctors and nurses took it. Amber relaxed and groaned in pain, falling into her hospital bed.

Amber awoke from her nap - one that she was gifted with by her tiredness - to a knock at the door.

She wearily rubbed her tired eyes and looked around. Her husband, Bally Hoops, was fast asleep for whatever reason.

"Come," she yawned. "In". Amber managed to say.

The door was slowly opened by the nurse that helped her with the foal. She had a loving smile upon her lips, and had a white blanket in her arms.

Upon seeing the bundle, which she assumed was her foal, Amber nudged Bally with her horn. He lazily awoke with a startled gaze.

"Wha? Where am I?" He said, dazed. Bally flipped his head around, confirming that he was in a hospital room. Once sure, he turned his gaze to the nurse.

"I believe this belongs to you," the mare said kindly. "Congratulations, it's a girl!"

Amber's eyes filled with tears as the nurse put her filly in her arms. Bally stood next to his wife, mutely admiring his filly.

"She's beautiful..." Amber breathed heavenly.

Bally didn't show that he heard her, and only continued to stare at his bundle of joy. He carefully stroked the filly's cheek, which she responded to by squirming a bit.

The filly had a cyan coat - a light blue - that practically glowed. Her mane was long for a filly, and was a semi dark shade of purple that had golden ends, appearing to have been dipped in mane dye.

The part that made Bally smile with glee was what was adorned upon his filly's back. She had a small pair of pegasi wings.

"She has your wings, Bally," Amber stated.

"She has your mane," he said back.

That was partly true. The color wasn't the same, but even though the filly was just born, her mane was very long for her age and extremely thick. Far thicker than normal adult ponies.

"Indeed. I hope my hair stylistic won't have a problem with having two of myself to trim." Amber joked tiredly.

"The girls are gonna love her."

"My little star, she'll have a bright future. I can feel it."

Basket Coco laid upon the floor, playing with her action figures. "Zoom! You'll never catch me, Darth Vader! I am the greatest Jedi in all of Equestria!"

"Haha! Great job, Luke! Chewie! C'mon! I need somepony to drive the Millennium Falcon!"

Curly Emerald gritted her teeth and cover her ears with her hooves. "Coco! Can you play with your Galactic toys somewhere else? I'm trying to read the Canterlot Chronicles!"

"It's Star Wars, get it right! Now get your egghead books and your flank somewhere else if you don't want to hear me!" Coco exclaimed.

Emerald gritted her teeth and let out a grunt, before grabbing her magazine and standing up. Just before she was going to stomp out of the room, a noise coming from the door caught her attention.

The rattling of the doorknob went out for another moment, before the door creaked and opened. There stood Bally Hoops and a tired Glassy Amber with a filly in her hooves.

"Mommy! Daddy!" The fillies stopped fighting and ran over to their parents, Emerald jumping on her dad.

"Girls! How have you been? Did grandma do a good job?" Bally asked, setting his unicorn filly down.

"Yeah! She let us have ice cream every night!" Coco exclaimed.

Amber moved forward and nuzzled her fillies lovingly. "I missed you girls. Do you want to meet your new baby sister?"

The two sisters excitedly nodded, Emerald practically bouncing out of her skin. Amber went onto the rocking chair in the living room, next to Coco's skewed action figures.

"Meet your little sisters, my stars," Amber said once everypony was settled.

She removed the blanket from the newborn filly's face, revealing the cyan coat once again. The two fillies's faces lit up in amazement, staring in awe at their sister.

"She's so tiny!" Coco exclaimed.

"She's so adorable!" Emerald gushed. "What's her name?"

Amber and Bally gave each other a look and smiled. "Her name is....."

She paused for dramatic affect.

"Sketchy Clouds."

Author's Note:

Rest of the chapters shall be in Sketchy's point of view.

The featured OC family:

Glassy Amber, Bally Hoops, Curly Emerald, Basket Coco, and Sketchy Clouds

-Sketchy Clouds

-Pinkie Pie

Comments ( 17 )

You're not a bad artist, I'll give you that...

I'll be straightforward and honest with you. Now take this comment with a little grain of salt and no offense, remember constructive criticism. While OC's are nice and fun to have around when it comes to character development, Ya gotta keep it at a steady pace. Don't rush into things and don't do it too slow. You could cleverly integrate bits and pieces of background information into your story as I do, but other than that good job! You've nailed just about everything. You've taken this story to heart by the looks of things and it's attracted my attention with stunning artwork and a good short description, long description, however... It's not too shabby, nor is it something that Stephen King would write. I recommend you get an editor because the long description had a big error in it that stuck out like a sore thumb.

Dash and me, now it's supposed to be Dash and me. Why? because grammar says so.

You don't need a comma before Dash, and. Because the and is already a conjunction.

I also noticed towards the end, at the ellipsis (...) you used 4 dots instead of 3. (....) thanks for triggering my OCD and also there's no need to exaggerate an ellipsis if that's what you're trying to do.

Still, great story, gonna give you thumbs up so you get motivated to do even better.

Ok, here we go, mistakes in the prologue.

"Yes, maybe. But, what if she, she's a earth pony or something!" Amber exclaimed.

AN Earth Pony. If you're gonna use an article for words that start with a vowel, it's always An Apple or An irritable grammar mistake.

Bally raised an eyebrow at the statement. "That's so bad because why? If she's an earth pony you don't have to teach her magic. And if she is a pegasus you have me." He gave a light peck on his wife. "Besides, the doctor said she's a unicorn."

"If speech is going to be followed by a sentence use a comma," DaveDotExe commented, as he looked for more grammar errors. "Also take this example with a bit of salt."

Amber awoke from her nap - one that she was gifted with by her tiredness - to a knock at the door.

you don't have to do the -hyphens in between text- just use a comma for sub-clauses.

There are more mistakes in this chapter than I can fit in one comment so bear with me. But still Liked the prologue don't know much about this Glassy Amber other than she works at a Glass shop and a bit of rushed character development at the description that did aid with the story so sacrifices I guess. Still great chapter, and remember to take every comment I comment with a grain of salt. or 2 grains,

Sorry if I bored you with this ranting and lecturing. 😆

Ok thanks. And just a little something, all the OCS are based off of my real life. So Glassy Amber is my mother, etc. And she works at a glasses shoppe. Also, I tried to find an editer, but to no avail.

I'll be willing to edit your story if you want

It's good, but the story's long description is supposed to feel like a blurb on the back of a book or DVD cover, not a plot synopsis of the first major story segment.

You’ve done to have twice.

”you are going to be fine”

”You are going to be fine,”

the head can out

the head came out

she yawned. “In”.

she yawned. “In.”

Where am I?” He said.

Where am I?” he said.

By the way awesome story I will like it, favourite and track it. I will save the yay for you. Yay :yay:

You're very much welcome, Pinkie. :twilightsmile::rainbowdetermined2::pinkiehappy:

So, how are you doing?

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