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YoshiFawful64


Just a geek who likes to read a good fanfic once in a while (by which I mean all the time). I also occasionally attempt to write things.

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"This is a story about an old enchantment, and it's not one that I tell to a lot of ponies. That's partly because the magic in question would be really easy to exploit in the wrong hooves, and partly because, well… because I discovered that for myself, and I'm none too proud of the pony I was back then.

"In short, this is a story about one of the biggest mistakes I've ever made."


Entry for AppleDash Contest #5, Second Chances.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 6 )

AWWWW! This is so well written and such a good plot. You've earned a follow!

Nice. Great capture of Rainbow's personality and the way she confesses is pretty spot on to previous confessions in canon.

Have a like and an upvote!

Nice, and very well written! Rainbow's awkwardness in trying to save and/or sidetrack the conversation each time she used Second Chance was hilarious, even though (like Applejack) I don't really approve of her doing so. And RD and AJ's child being named Misty Fields was a nice touch c:

-FA

I am loving this so far, it is super cute and very well written, the concept is cool also it reminds me a bit of life is strange

I loooved this fanfic, it was a quick and fun read with adorable romance and its definitely one of my favorite recent appledash fics, you did great and that ending was just adorable and had the right message <3

This, admittedly, made me question RDs timing. Like, a lot. Time rewinds ONE measly second. If you talk with someone and rewind ONE second, right back in the middle of your sentence or even a single word... won't that be heard? A little stutter. An awkward pause. A following word spoken to fast. The speed the whole sentence was spoken in broken by this rewind. Maybe those breaks in speech are almost not noticeable. But then again - maybe AJ didn't get worried for RD because they bumped into each other time and again, but because her subconscious kept telling her via gut feeling that something was off.

which, by the way, has made for some hilarious parent-teacher meetings

I need that. Doesn't have to be long, but I'm grinning just thinking about the possibilities...!

Thank you. :twilightsmile:

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