This is a Slice-Of-Life AU, centered around a Princess Luna who was unable to accept Celestia's apology and instead has chosen to flee from her sister and the six ponies that returned her to her original form. This story will follow Luna's adventures, as she tries to adjust to an Equestria that is very different from the place she called home 1,000 years ago. It will also follow the Mane Six and Celestia as they try to locate the lost princess while keeping the citizens of Equestria from panicking.
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An interesting idea for sure. I look forward to reading this and seeing what you come up with.
The premise sounds interesting, but honestly i think you should have just started at the point where Nightmare is hit with the Rainbow kept going from there.
This promises to be a great read. I would hire/conscript/recruit a spelling/grammar editor, though.
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I agree, Definitely has great potential.
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Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked the story thus far.
How would you recommend I go about acquiring an editor? Sorry, I'm rather new to this site and while I've posted content to other sites in the past I've never really utilized another person to check over my work.
This concept has so much potential. Don't make me regret tracking this.
She thought that her sister was going to send her to the moon again. So it's all a misunderstanding
I like the idea *Put it in traking folder* it's something I've not seem anyone in this site do before.
I'm waiting for the next chapter.
I REALLY want to see where this goes.
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Sorry, not the person you wanted to reply, but too bad. You can ask around on different groups forums and I'm pretty sure I heard of a group specifically centered around people wanting editors a while back, so yeah, group forums to the rescue
Piece of art!
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No worries, to be honest, the fact that you took the time to answer my question and offer me advice was very kind and greatly appreciated.
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more please
Very interesting premise. Excitedly awaiting the coming chapters.
More please!
I like this idea. Definitely liked and tracking.
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Wow...this is great. Keep going!!!
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Sorry, I know it has been awhile X3
There was an unexpected move and then I couldn't decide on what I wanted to do with the next couple of chapters I had 3 versions of this and the next two chapters. I kept rewriting them, I eventually realized I needed to just commit and keep moving forward :3
Dropped everything when I saw this had updated.
hmm
Celestia should not worry about Luna, she is with Trixie what could possibly go wrong.
Words can not convey how exited I am with where this story is going.
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Indeed, how could anything ever go wrong with the great and powerful Trixie involved? o u o
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I'm so glad to hear you're enjoying the story so far ^ v ^
Nice
Another GREAT AND POWERFUL chapter!
I can't help but notice that at the beginning of the chapter it is narrated in third person and after the third paragraph it is in first person.
If Trixie visits Ponyville with Luna. Will the Mane 6 notice her? or will things go diferently? I don't know
Keep up with the good work! I'll wait patiently for the release of the next chapter.
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(Sorry if its a pain to read my comment, english is not my first language
probably should be: I said as I rose to my hooves, hoping to make a clean exit. ? and some other changes regarding first and third person shifts, a mistake I do every time I write something for a story
Also, I would add a space between this two dialogues:
This sums up my only major problem with this fic.
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Oooh good catch! You and several others pointed this out! I will go ahead and fix them before the next upload o 3 o
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That is some colorful text o ^ o
Good catch! I shall fix this before the next update o u o
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https://stuff.thingies.site/rainbow.html
I don't remember who made it, I sure didn't.
Aww. Everyone is always so mean to Trixie. :( But still a good chapter. I'm interested to see where it goes
The premise got me interested and for now the story hasn't dissapointed me. It seem promising.
I'm starting to like this Luna, she seemed so vulnerable after the events of Nightmare Moon, but I was wrong. She's clever and appears to have some tricks on her sleeves as seen on the latest chapter.
Good stuff, I like it! Goin' on my "cool shit" folder. Skrr Skrr!
That moment where a story you enjoy updates, and leaves you gibbering on floor for a couple of minutes.
I came running to read this story as soon as I logged back in and saw it was updated. Want to see waat happens next so bad!!
That really was a surprise for me
I didn't expect that.
Maybe it's whatever that Luna had done with Trixie, I think they detected it.
We have to wait and see...
If that charm doesn't sound like setting up a patsy, I don't know what it is.
C'mon! That cliffhanger is too much...
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You have asked and I have answered ;D
I'm so thankful this isn't basically a clip show of S1 alternate reality.
Keep it up, I'm really liking this
I'm really liking the concept from the description of this fanfic, I'm going to read it right after grabbing some food/sodas.
Azerath metrion zinthos
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I see what you did there
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Glad you like the premise so far!
I hope you enjoy the story once you get into reading it :3
This chapter simular in concept to "That Which Sleep". And I like it.
That's pretty adorable scene at that ending, those are good value to live by for sure.
Eh, it's kinda like Trixie is being forced to make a choice...
Isn't there already a female pony called Fresh Coat in canon? I think she is that unicorn with the cap backwards in the episode "Spice up your life" when they redecorate the restraunt.
Certainly some commendable virtues to live by.
I adore it when a venerable side is shown by a character, makes them feel more down to earth.