It's a fresh start for Starlight. New city, new school, new job, new everything. If only she could find new purpose as well.
Created for the 2019 Jinglemas event as a gift for NaiadSagaIotaOar.
I hope I did them justice.
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It's a fresh start for Starlight. New city, new school, new job, new everything. If only she could find new purpose as well.
Created for the 2019 Jinglemas event as a gift for NaiadSagaIotaOar.
I hope I did them justice.
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Thanks so much for writing this! Apologies for not commenting earlier, I read through part of this yesterday but got distracted and couldn't finish and wanted to read through the whole thing so I could comment on lots of things about it I'm glad to hear I made someone watch Rainbow Rocks, to me that's to this day one of the highlights of the FiM generation of MLP. And, erm. I hope you enjoyed the later Aria-containing EqG bits more than I did.
This is a really nice opening! Or sort of close to opening I guess. Whatever. But I like how it takes that sort of disillusionment with the status quo that defined Equestria Starlight in her first appearances and transfers it to a new environment. But then in the human world there's not a concrete symbol of that status quo stamped on everyone, so of course it follows that this Starlight feels a little aimless by comparison. Great stuff!
This is a profane travesty of a sentiment >:B got a good giggle out of it tho :D
I'm not seeing quite as many, like, single bits that stood out to me once Aria comes into the scene, but I really like what you did with her. She's nice and introspective--and maaaybe opens up a little more easily than I'd have liked, but I think I can let that slide given the context. And I love how her perceptiveness is highlighted; I've always liked to picture her as being a bit trapped in Adagio's shadow, which would naturally mean she does a lot of kind of watching from the sidelines, and that translates so well to her picking up a lot of things from people without interacting much.
Overall, really nice stuff! I'll admit I was ready to be let down since I've read so many Aria stories that missed the mark, but this was lovely Thanks again for writing it, and I really hope you enjoyed your own gift too
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I'm glad you liked it!
I agree that Aria opened up too quickly. My original outline had a couple more bits with her in that conversation, but I felt they made the scene drag a bit. Overall, I think I did as well as I could've considering I this is my first EqG story and just first human MLP story in general.
I'm happy I managed to do a decent job with Aria. I watched Rainbow Rocks and a couple other shorts on a Sunday while taking notes, and then read a couple of Aria fics to get a good grasp on her character. Loved your Sunset/Aria fics, by the way..
Anyway, yeah. I'm glad you liked it. This was a great experience, and I'll be sure to try again next year.
This was a nice story. You did a good job at incorporating the Equestria Girls dimension version of Starlight, and both she and Aria were handled well. And nice that this got you to watch Rainbow Rocks, haha.
I don't feel like Aria was too fast to open. She's too easily lost in Adagio's shadow as a less-charismatic sidekick. Without Adagio taking the spotlight or Sonata to joke on, she had time for herself and I liked what I saw. There is a nice bit of personality there.
A set of irritating customers to illustrate the frustration is rather... trope-y, but it's just a background, the main focus is chemistry between the characters, and that was good.
I re-read this on a whim and I'm glad I did, what a delightful read this was! Hope you write more Aria someday!