I don't like the whole consent conversation. You can't just ORDER someone to consent, or it's not genuine. And Twilight should KNOW this.
It would be better, from a storytelling perspective, a "Twilight being in character" perspective, and a "not being rapey" one, if she talked it through and Tsunderplane gave consent willingly.
... Otherwise I'm really enjoying the story so far. Keep it up!
9369675 Still, I think it would be a lot less uncomfortable if it were slightly changed.
Especially the whole "I order you to consent, and I'm a princess" bit. Like if you just skipped that part, and went straight to "what would get you to say yes?" And then also dropped the "oh well I guess you're EVIL then" part. You wouldn't even have to alter the scene significantly.
9369936 Yeah, I second this. Unless Twilight was having one of her manic moments in the wake of several hours of attempted coaxing, I don't see her ordering Planny to consent, then resorting to blackmailing her. She can get passionate, but as Princess of Friendship, she should know better than to sexually assault people.
Princess Twilight took out a fresh page of notes. Unlike all her previous notes, she spoke this one aloud as she wrote it: “Subject shows tendencies toward dishonesty and an inability to keep her word. Subject's status as a benign creature is called into question...” At that, she looked up over the rim of her clipboard at Tsunderplane, waiting for a response.
Moar!
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Tomorrow. ^.^
I don't like the whole consent conversation. You can't just ORDER someone to consent, or it's not genuine. And Twilight should KNOW this.
It would be better, from a storytelling perspective, a "Twilight being in character" perspective, and a "not being rapey" one, if she talked it through and Tsunderplane gave consent willingly.
... Otherwise I'm really enjoying the story so far. Keep it up!
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Oh, I dunno. Twilight be a little rapey sometimes, especially for science.
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Still, I think it would be a lot less uncomfortable if it were slightly changed.
Especially the whole "I order you to consent, and I'm a princess" bit. Like if you just skipped that part, and went straight to "what would get you to say yes?" And then also dropped the "oh well I guess you're EVIL then" part. You wouldn't even have to alter the scene significantly.
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Yeah, I second this. Unless Twilight was having one of her manic moments in the wake of several hours of attempted coaxing, I don't see her ordering Planny to consent, then resorting to blackmailing her. She can get passionate, but as Princess of Friendship, she should know better than to sexually assault people.
And the one that goes BING!
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But only when there’s stuff.
Tossed aside like a sack of potatoes! 😆
Why is she abusing her power
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Eh, abuse of power can be fun sometimes. ^.^