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Arcelia


A 25 year old aspiring fanfiction writer, cosplayer and partner of Cerulean Voice

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On the morning of the annual Summer Sun Celebration, Princess Celestia takes a day off to enjoy the sunrise.

Set just before the events of the series premiere.

Artwork by Alumx

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 20 )

You paint a very good picture. There's just the right amount of detail, not too much, not too little. Celestia's thoughts are rather nice. She knows this day hinges on a lot of happenstance, yet has faith in her student.

All in all, a very good job. I look forward to more from you~:twilightsmile:

A nice read about Celestia's day. Have an upvote.

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Thank you very much for your feedback. I honestly wasn't expecting any, but it definitely feels good. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and I'm also glad that you found there was just the right amount of detail.

I hope to have more stories soon. :heart:

Simple, short, and sweet. Celestia's voice was well done.

I was honestly expecting the peace to be shattered by Nightmare Moon showing up, which may have ended up ruining story's tone and purpose. But seeing as her return is merely glanced upon, and in a way that fits in the tone, this is a very nice story. Certainly something I'll read again next time I'm unwinding. :heart:

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Thank you. :pinkiesmile:
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I'm glad you thought so. I have written her in a couple of stories before so I am rather familiar with her character. :twilightsheepish:
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Thank you, I'm glad you find the story calming and I hope you enjoy just as much as you did the first time. Your feedback is appreciated. :raritywink:

Sweet, short story that answers my question of what Celestia was doing in the Season 1 Premiere. :trollestia:

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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'm glad it answer your question. :heart:

This was an okay story

I didn't think that the image in the beginning of the story was needed since we see that as the coverart of the story when we first view it.

Loved reading Celestia inner thoughts of the events on the final moments before Luna's return.

It could have been better if you added Celestia having worrying second thoughts like as shown in Celestial Advice

The descriptions of the surroundings were great at conveying the mood.

This is a very good one-shot.

Hooray! A new story from you! :3

I really enjoyed the picture you painted with this story. I have kind of a soft spot for anything with Celestia as the focus, but especially for stories that delve into her thoughts and emotions, which I think you did very nicely here. I have a very similar image of Celestia in my head to the one you put forward in this, so it made me a happy camper to read it. X3

I liked your descriptions of everything, and I think you did a wonderful job setting up a certain tone and emotion for the story -- something I value above most other things in writing.

I'm super excited to see you posting stories again, and can't wait for the next one! I agree that you do a great job with these more emotional pieces, and I look forward to your more complex works. :3

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Hi Mix, thank you for feedback. You are the first person to give any sort of constructive criticism so totes to you. I'm sorry you felt as though the first few hundred words were unnecessary but I personally felt that expanding on the story a little more would help give us time to get more emotionally connected with our character. As opposed to jumping right in with her thoughts right off the bat. Thanks for your feedback and I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you. :yay:

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I'm glad you're excited, Daft. It certainly is a welcome return to be getting feedback from you. I'm so glad you liked the story and I really appreciate your comment. I look forward to seeing more of your excellent responses in the future, I'm as excited as you are for the stories that I hope to publish in the future. :heart:

An affa nice wee mood piece. It sets its scene nicely, feels very genuine to Celestia, and creates a sedate, relaxed tone... with just a hint of foreboding for the day's events. A few wee tense hiccups here and there ('The princess simply lets out a giggle' - drop the s at the end 'lets' to make it consistently past-tense), but otherwise, a very good piece of work. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you, Carabas for your feedback. It surprises me that you took the time to read one of my stories but it feels my heart with overwhelming joy anyway. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate your comment, sorry about the little hiccup there. I will be sure to fix that soon. :heart:

I just love little character pieces like this, they don't have to be long stories, they just give us great little insights in the character in question. And this fic was absolutely beautiful in doing that.

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Thank you so much. Your feedback is so important to me and I appreciate every word. I'm really glad you like enjoyed the story and I also really enjoy writing little character pieces. But lately, I've felt like I need to be working on bigger, more complex stories. After all, I am eighteen and it should only make sense that I strive to do something much greater. But thanks again and I look forward to hearing from you again soon.:heart:

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Well, I wish you the best of luck and I hope you succeed in your endeavors.

A nice bit of light reading, hitting the note it aims for quite well.
In need of a proofreader as there's a fair amount of hiccups, but nothing too annoying.
Nice job, have an upvote.

Happy 1 year anniversary!

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