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StormLuna


Not all Alicorns are female and not all Alicorns are royalty. Some are working class ponies that the masses can relate with.

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This story is a sequel to Terror in Equestria 7: Battle for Control of the World


A thousand years have passed since the Dark Goddess Twilight Sparkle reclaimed the world as her own but when an ancient sect of ponies are discovered deep in the Everfree Forest, Twilight's reign could be brought to an end.

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I am looking forward to the end of this one and I do hope there will be a ninth with an epic villain since Twilight has been restored to good.

Oh and nice pic for the story, it matches my avatar!

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I'm glad you like this one so far and just to let you know, there will be a ninth one with a truly epic villain, an incredibly dark one!

She paused for a couple of seconds before continuing, (")Tell you what, fix yourself something too and join me for lunch."

There's an apostrophe missing before "Tell".

Two days had passed since [Celestia] notified her army about what she discovered in the archives.

Shouldn't this be Dark Goddess Twilight?

White Magick said, "Those who have been brainwashed must be free, they can't be like a dog chained to a tree, they deserve their own free will, not to be stuck with the bill, their minds shall belong to them and them alone."

King White says he's gonna free them.....

his horn began to glow white and he said, "From another to me, that is where your allegiance will now be, you thought your old commander loved you like pie when all they wanted was for you to die. With me all shall be great, there shall be no hate."

Then he does THE EXACT OPPOSITE of what he just said. I mean COME ON! King "Whitey Tighty" here is a hypocrite.

This is how ponies screw-up, by not telling other powerful ponies about ancient evils that could destroy the world.
Thanks laurfa!
YOU FUCKED OVER EQUISTRIA!

I have a question that's concerning, what're the names of King White's forces? Are they nomadic pladdins? Ancient Guardians of Shang Gu Rai? Are they Optimistic Lords or Peace Keepers?

Ok, that's cool.... But question...
WHERE DID ALL THE BAD juju go!?

Twilight replied, "Yes, you and *General Green Death need to get ready. I will likely send you along with some farmers down there within a month."

why is there a star before general?

I don't think theres supposed to be an apostrophe. I think our mean opening qotation mark I don't know how to spell it either

Two days had passed since (Twilight) notified her army about what she discovered in the archives and after a hearty breakfast, she headed down to the base to notify them that the day to go take care of that sect of ponies had arrived.

you put Celestia instead of Twilight.

Yeah, because she just banished Celestia to the void.

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Thanks for pointing out the errors and regarding the star in front of General, I have no idea why I put it there. It has been so long since I wrote this. Anyway, the star is gone and the error involving Twilight has been fixed.

uh, according to TIE Rise of the Dark Queen, Twilight wrote those spells, not White Magick.

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Here is the thing, Twilight had no idea that those spells already existed at that time so naturally it is going to be stated that she wrote them. I wasn't going to go giving away the arrival of an ancient sect much further down the road in the very beginning of the series.

I wanna know what would happen f twilight was not defeated. like i said, im addicted to her being corrupted. there should be an Alternate for this

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If Twilight were not defeated, everypony would be paying her tribute and Celestia's life would be miserable.

you mean since she'd be in the void for the rest of her life?

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Either that or there are worse things for her, trust me, Twilight can get pretty bad.

So basically White Majick can use reforming spells

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Yes but his are much stronger than your normal spell. While his spells are very strong, some ponies prefer other methods of wiping out their enemies.

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