The Visitor

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The Visitor

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As Luna prepares to conduct her nightly duties, she receives a surprise visitor.

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JackRipper

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JackRipper #1 · Jul 26th, 2017 · · ·

Interesting, might as well throw it on the shelf.

beefkebab

beefkebab #2 · Jul 26th, 2017 · · ·

Complete? What the hell, man? I want to know who visited Luna

Night Spinner

Night Spinner #3 · Jul 26th, 2017 · · ·

I half expected it to turn out to be chrysalis until they entered the dreamscape.

Alondro

Alondro #4 · Jul 26th, 2017 · · ·

Well, if they didn’t sleep through such a wonderful night, maybe they wouldn’t be having such nightmares, I mused to myself as I got up.

Loony, ya gotta realize ponies can't stay up 24/7. Twilight did that once for a few days... she ended up going through time and creating a bootstrap paradox as a result. Ya don't want more of that. Trust me on this one.

Alondro

Alondro #5 · Jul 26th, 2017 · · ·

8324239 One would think Chrysalis... but with Chrysalis out for vengeance, why would she exhibit the emotions she did? Why would she fail to utilize the opportunity to take the revenge she promised when last we saw her? And why would her appearance remain Celestia in the dream realm, where as far as we know Chrysalis has zero experience and would have no idea how to disguise herself in a mental form?

My problem with this story is... there is no possible answer. It's completely open-ended. There's nary a hint of what's really going on.

As such, it feels like a story fragment... perhaps the prologue of a story introducing what will become the central conflict.

Bronzedragon