Here's some friendly grammar correction!

I’d get revenge on the dragon’s first

Dragons. No apostrophe.

Ugh… I need a bath immediately before this odor because permanent.

Becomes > because.

...Also, where's that .gif from?

Another great chapter. Bewildered Chrysalis is an entertaining Chrysalis.

One correction

> my tail had been shorten as well,

shortened

I'm waking up
To ash and dust
I wipe my brow
And I sweat my rust
Breathing in
The chemicals

I'm breaking in
Shaping up
Checking out
All the prison buzz
This is in
The apocalypse

I don't normally like first person stories...

And this one is no exception...

Because I honestly love this story so far!

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Never trust whiskey when it comes to editing.

And I believe the gif is from the movie Tangled.

How the bloody fuck did I forget to read this? Oh well, more chapters to binge at one.

This is such a a nice sad/feel good fic, that I'm almost surprised it's rated M and for sex. It definitely stands on it's own without those aspects, but I'm sure it'll still he very nice when they come to fruition. Hope to see more soon.

Keep it up! I not seen that many good ChrysalisxCelestia fics that are this adorable. Shit's pretty good, man.

This is great.

Just don't burn yourself out writing this.

I've become attached.

Fuck, I've already liked and favourited the story! Now what do I do?! (beside reading it that is)

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Good setup makes everything better, smut included. I always find the more narrative weight behind intimate scenes, the better.

Now watch the next chapter just say 'fuck build-up, let's get the fluids flying' - Celestia's an amputee fetishist or some crazy shit.

, it's not dead!
I know it hasn't been that long, but my entire feed has been silent for weeks haha
Anyway, I found half a dozen or so, but I am exhausted, so if nobody else finds them, I'll link them tomorrow.

Another good one. I'm having a lot of fun with this story, pretty much all the character moments have been spot-on and it's all been interesting so far. Keep it up

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Eh, no big deal; I personally don't trust whiskey at all (I prefer a bottle of beer or a glass of sparkling or red wine, myself), and there were only two errors I saw.

By the way, where'd you get that channel icon? I like it.

Gah! Fuck you and your cliffhangers! I want to know!!!
Keep up the great work, I think I speak for all of us when I say how much we are enjoying this story.

I've noticed how she is Imagining nuking those Dragons. Leaving the dragonlands Radioactive with eldritch flame.

Oh, and I also saw what you did there with the chapter title, yes.

"I'm bathing her."
"Truly princess, you don't need to go that far-"
"Don't take this from me."

Well that was nice :D.
It's quite obvious what Celestia wants, but still, it's about the journey, not the destination. So I can't wait for more.

Another small correction:

“Anypony else would have killed me already,” I mumbled, “yet you’ve feed me… 

*fed

so begins.... DA MAGIKS!

i fucking lost it at the picture at the end, i just couldnt keep from laughing

yet you’ve feed me… cared for me… staved of death for me.

This is the only typo I remember. I know there were more but I was too busy reading to point them out. Sorry.

Now I must wait for what Celestia wants to show Chrysalis. ARG!

Ahem...

Someone had to do this.

“I don’t understand you.” The words were soft and raspy, but they still caught her attention.

“I have something to show you.”

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So,the title was a reference. Thanks for that

A few typos/mistakes I remember seeing:

but if I had to hazards a guess

Should be "but if I had to hazard a guess" or "but if I were to hazard a guess". The s isn't needed since there would only be one hazard (a single guess).

Shampoo and conditioner were gingerly into my scalp,

Were gingerly what into her scalp?

That said, I'm really enjoying this. Can't wait to see what Celestia has in store for Chrysalis. =D

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Two there, actually. Fed, and staved off.

The comments found a couple. Nice!
Here are the rest: http://imgur.com/a/Prx94
As always, red are error fixes, yellow are suggested changes.

i kinda hope she gets her leg back, but then if it means celestia gets to make her a leg thats also pretty nice

“I have something to show you.”

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elytra ...well I learned a new word today

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If nothing else, we've seen changelings alter their number of limbs with shapechanging, so once she's well fed and not as sickly, Chrysalis could probably just... turn into herself but with four legs.
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Yes, it's Tangled.

*confused bughorse noises intensify*

D'awwww...

I hope she gets her leg back /gets a new one.

Another cliffhanger – it leaves a delightful taste upon on my mind.

I patiently wait for the story to continue.

I like that little gif it's cute

" We’d find out which was stronger: dragonfire or eldritch fire. "

lol at full power u'd still get ur ass handed to u by an average dragon sweetie

this continus to be good, keep it up

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HAH~
in her weakened state she killed a basilisk. i highly doubt at her peak a dragon would be an issue!

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Magic charged crotch attack. Tsundere Chrysalis is fun.

There was another reason I was reluctant to try and escape. Truthfully, I was just so tired. Tired of running, tired of fighting, tired of the struggle... tired of watching everything turn to dust.

In short: Tired of being tired.

Well, I could always gnaw on them... gingerly. That might be a little uncomfortable for them, right?

Somehow that sonds a little cute.

“I have something to show you.”

This will either end very good or very bad for her.

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you forgot sexily, it could end sexily for her

Really loving this story so far. Can't wait to see what Celestia has in store for Chrysalis.

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Sexily in a good way or in a bad way would be the question.

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there is a bad sexily with chrysalis? i dont think thats possible

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More like pizza, there's no such thing as bad pizza.

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... Chrysalis = pizza, that just makes her more desirable

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She's better than pizza, she can have any topping you want, heh.

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giggity!

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You know... I could see Chrysalis channeling the spirit of Glenn Quagmire.
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I hope i haven't already send this comment.

I woumd like it if Chrysalis would be able to keep some of her pride. I mean it was just a bit strange for me to see the Nurse kind of being so brave around her or treating her like a child for a moment.

I try to explain it but I won't makr it as long as the other comme nt that vanished on my handy already.

You could say that sometimed it looks to me thar often in stories there exist some characters that are always able to make the makn char do stuff thar he doesn't want to or that everyone is pbvioud to the main chars feelings or act like they wouldn't be important and I hope that thisbisn't going to happen here. Villak or not, I hope this isn't a ler's change her personality Story.

Who… who are you, hmmm? I asked myself.

Who-who? Who-who?

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this
would
make
a
great
fic!

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Either that or Chrysalis spends the entire story fighting the stereotype that she's the buggiest biggest slut in all of Equestria when in fact it's Cadance... who was the one that started the whole rumor mongering. (Yes, it's petty but Caddy never forgave Chrissy for crashing her wedding)