You stand there, refusing to play his little game.
"In case you're unaware on how a fight works," Discord told you, "Allow me to explain the process."
"Two opposing forces confront one another with a series of punching and kicking."
"Fights can usually start when somepony wants something the other has, so they attack them. The other won't attack as long as they hold the object of their desire."
"In other words, I don't have a reason to fight as long as I hold the locket, meaning you're going to have to make the assault."
He's right, you going to need to try something different.
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As you stare down this mystical entity, the thought of succeeding appears to be hopeless for you.
You're facing a bully that has brought you out of your world, disciplined you for making friends, and dangles your one chance at getting home in front of you just so he can rip it away before you can grasp it. What is Discord gaining from this game of his? Why would Celestia allow this to happen in her throne room and not help you out?
These questions weigh you down and you're starting to think that you're completely alone in this room, struggling with a goal that nopony is going to help you with at achieving.
"Well?" Discord said to you, "Don't keep me waiting human; let's get shaky!!!" He levitates and snaps his fingers.
The room begins to vibrate and you're trying to keep your balance. You look up as Discord laughs. but you notice that the chandelier above him is shaking a little bit too awkwardly.
A loud screeching sound is heard coming from it and the hanging ornament comes falling down on the laughing prankster. Both him and the decoration crash to the floor.
The quake settles, leaving you intact but Discord pinned, looking pretty hurt. He looks like he's in pain and could really use some help. You look over to Celestia, she's not showing any concern.......... should you?
Now would be a good time to take the gold locket.
"that nopony will allow or help with at obtaining." sounds weird. Maybe rephrase that. I'm too tired to think of a proper way to do that right now.
I hope that it doesn't seem like I'm trying to be overly harsh on this fanfic with everything I'm pointing out. I just like the story, so I keep coming back, and thus, when I see mistakes that I didn't notice before, I want to fix them to make the story better.
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That did sound a bit off to me as well, but I believed I was too tired as well and thought that it was alright.
Not at all, I encourage that you and others tell. I spend late nights on this story and the majority of the time was just linking the chapters together. I was more focused on making the story feel like a programmed game so I wasn't paying much attention on the words.
I do facepalm myself for not noticing it earlier, but I really appreciate all the errors you and others are pointing out. Thank you.