Just a nice, polite Canadian.
Celestia's personal dungeon. A thing of mystery. A thing of terror.
So just what does it take to get banished to such a deep, dark, horrific place?
Not much, actually.
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that ending
...... Good story.
Besides the use of pion instead of peon... That was a delightfully light-hearted and fun fic! Thank you!
LMAO that was funny
*snerk*
"Then use thou wings!" should be "Then use thy wings!"
Thou is to You, as Thy is to Your :)
Sweet Celestia that was amazing.
This better get featured.
Wut
I wonder what Discord did?
... Bad Dude?
I constantly had to stop reading to laugh. Great work!
I feel the story is a little unfocused in how it dances from character to character kind of randomly, and the lack of names made it really confusing as to whether the character we started the story on was still the viewpoint character at the end.
Solid jokes, though.
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that would be funny, more likely the other "evil" colt though
I hate iced tea too.
First stallion: So, how did you get in here?
Second stallion: It wasn't easy. There's a long line.
I don't normally care for your stories, but that bit with Starlight just killed me. Hilarious read, man!
Wow, so how big is the dungeon?
... you know, through this lens, a lot of things suddenly make sense.
Suddenly, Ich am in ze mood for iced tea...
Um... ok.
If i was drinking something when i got to the tea part it would be all over the place lol
Great story have my upvote.
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And it would also probably work if the second part used "Thine". But I ain't no expert on ye olde english
...what have I just read?
Okay, so... How did Starlight get locked up for telling ponies that Trixie hypnotized her? The other stuff is plain dumb (intentionally, I know), but that one just doesn't make sense to me.
Mind, that might actually make it more bearable than the plain dumb stuff...
I was looking for the comedy, but there was none.
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So does Discord.
The only bad thing I noticed in the story is how it says "complete" at the top
Loved it
That is so genius! Hilarious! Great if it works in real life...
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I read that story too! It was adorable!
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What?
Luna only used "thou" when there were many cases to use thee and thine. But she clearly has no clue what she is doing in this story.
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... oh yeah.
Luna: SO, miscreant! How dost thou feel about BLOWJOBS?!
"Unlucky" stallion: NO! Not that! Anything but that!!
Luna: Too late, foul criminal! Prepare to have thine balls DRAINED! (sucking sounds)
Stallion: Noooooooooooo!
Luna, sweetie...you just aren't very bright.
Unless the anti-fortunate soul is actually composed of a quark and an antiquark, he's a peon, not a pion.
In any case, an amusing example of a story where you really shouldn't think too hard about everything. That's always been tricky for me, but I still had fun. Thank you for this.
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Such a typo! ChappedPenguinLips won't get feed tonight ;)
plot twist:
https://derpibooru.org/25029
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I do believe that is the point!
Wonderful.
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Oh, YES!
Bro when he said slimy Alicorn threesome I was DEAAAD
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He slowly ate Celestia's cakes slowly and with much moans of pleasure and showing visible delight in the delectable delight. Right before her face! Afterward Celestia made more chaos than Discord himself! Totally worth it!
That ending was friggin perfect. I loved this story. It was hilarious.
Some of the humour was really hit‐and‐miss in this; keeping the laughter coming at a steady rate would have worked wonders in ensuring the couple of gut‐busters in there didn’t go to waste shoring up the filler. As it is their impact was not only spent poorly (by failure to capitalise upon their softening up the reader) but dulled too.
Others may have beaten me to the punch on “pion” and Luna’s misuse of “thou”, but I can still point out one of my pet peeves!
fazed
A lot of jokes. Some worked. Some did not.
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Blasphemy!
That ending was worth a like and favorite
I'm not sure how to react to this story. Is Luna really that daft?