This story is a sequel to Sea of Misfits
Sailors shudder at the name of the Marblehead, ships captains call upon Celestia should they see it, navies across world fear it, and powerful figures will stop at nothing to claim it as their own. For the crew that sails this fearsome ship, all that matters to them is the safety of their friends and loved ones. However, when an unexpected visitor comes aboard and two of the crew are kidnapped, loyalties will be tested and blades will be sharpened. A Storm is coming, and she's out for blood.
Chapters (14)
Like the start so far. Only problem I had was the pirate talk got a little too confusing when he started talking to the mail carrier though. I also hope you touch on why the pirate left his ship a bit more later on.
I liked it, I just don't like that it hasn't been explained as to why the Marblehead is back to pirating. The chapter also felt short for some reason, it looks around the same length as the first though. Perhaps becuase you crammed a plunder into a wedding setup? I don't know, either way I look forward to more.
P.S. Sorry it took so long to read this chapter, things have been busy.
I didn't think it was that bad. The wedding scene was my favorite part.
this ain't going to end well...
Nice work. Looks like there's trouble on the horizon...
I read all the chapters in a row, I love it and the love fight between Captain and 1st mate,
I thought the song was pretty catchy. Nice one.
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Just out of curiosity, what about it did you find catchy and what could I have done to make it better?
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The lyrics. Going over them in my head, it sounded very melodic. As for making it better, I'm not certain. Maybe it could have been a verse or two longer?
Is the story back?
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The story is still alive, somewhat, but due to a combination of a very stressful school and lack of enthusiasm for the story on my part means I'm not posting content that often and what I do post is mediocre at best. I'll try to post a little more consistently, but it won't be near the rate I was able to write when making Sea of Misfits.
That being said, there are a few other stories I'm contemplating on starting and giving the Crew of the Marblehead some more time to sit and allow me to work out all of the mistakes in my current writings.
To everyone who has expressed an interest in this story, I really appreciate the feedback you have given me and will try to give you quality content I am satisfied with before long.
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Cool, hope you don't go and overwork yourself though. Brought it up since there are two new chapters since I last checked up on the story. Can't wait to read them.
It takes time to write a chapter, It's a great chapter.
I really need to edit these chapters more before I post them. There are a ton of grammatical errors.
Storm Stalker’s dad think she’s a slave? I can imagine how he’ll react that the cap’n Trade Breaker asked for his daughter’s hoof in marriage.
go to 0:10
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The wrong way? I put that video to destroy Storm Stalker's old man mind and his overprotectiveness on his daughter. If he had it.
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There's a reason Storm Killer is so aggressive about saving his daughter right now. I hinted at it in chapter 5 but it will be further explained in a later chapter.
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I’ll tell the reason I used that video. I imagine that Storm Stalker would thought he trapped Trade Breaker in a room and did that laugh as his daughter got him out as she did the laugh too as she wail on her father for overthinking that she’s a slave. But you got to admit, it’s funny if you saw that Tom & Jerry episode.
Happy that your back 😊
That's quite a plan Drip has. Hope it works...