• Member Since 12th Jul, 2017
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Destinyrays023


I am just a simple pegasister who's been loving My Little Pony Friendship is Magic since 2010 :) P.S. I ALSO SEEM TO HAVE AN OBSESSION WITH SHIPPING CHARACTERS AND WRITING FLUFF FICS ABOUT MY OTPS

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Pinkie has been depressed missing Cheese. She gets a surprise visit.
(COVER IMAGE NOT MINE, CREDITS TO THE ARTIST)

Story also on my FF.NET

**TIME SET DURING SEASON 5**

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 3 )

This seems like a first story, if it is, it's not too bad! it needs more romance, for example, when Pinkie Pie comes downstairs, Pinkie rushes up to Cheese and hugs him. that might be a option. either way, grammar is also good, you just need more storyline. good job!

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Its not a first story, but thanks! I've been wanting to up my romance but I'm just working on simple fluff for now. I'll write more stuff that will have more storylines in the future.

So, we get no build-up for Pinkie being depressed or for the love confession? At all? :applejackunsure: I mean, it's cute, but I don't think your words are quite painting the picture that you're trying to get us to see if that makes sense. I'm still giving it a like.

I'm also questioning the knife in the closet. That's kind of creepy.

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