(WARNING: Contains A LOT of intentional OOC) The books tell of Celestia's battles. Between her sister, Discord, etc. But no one seems to understand what it was like beforehand. When Celestia was a loud, obnoxious, impulsive teenager. When Luna was a anti-social, non-tolerant, bookworm. When Discord was their friend. When he was just another teen, albeit a bit... mixed up. When Celestia's dad was still alive. When he ruled alongside a griffon. This is the story of Tia's high school years, and the unbreakable bond she shares with her dear friends Luna and Discord.
Note: The cover art is kinda terrible, I know. I haven't got a chance to finish it, my comp died. Celestia is not standing, she is sitting on a bench with Luna and Discord. There's no bench cause I haven't finished it yet.
interesting
51455 Thanks, I guess
nicely written and an interesting new concept, keep'em coming!
53264 Thanks a LOT.
The random bits of flashing forward in time seem interesting, can't wait to read more!
SOOO OOC, oh god! my eye's!
3 star for poor characterization. good story, let down solely by OOCness
54426 Well, Celestia and Luna have been alive for over 1000 years, of course they'll be out of character considering the story is written when they were both around the age of 14 :P The point is that the change of character is so drastic to prove the point that they were different ponies back then, and certain "events" have led them to change and be more mature. I can understand why people would be upset and I am aware the characters need better characterization in general. It's my first fanfic (and actual written story!). I'll try to improve ^_^
I'm actually surprised nobody has raged at my blasphemy of the OC parents of the sisters and Discord.
54359 I've been wondering if people would like that, thanks for the input! ;)
54488 The only thing I have to say about it is that it seems a bit sudden, at times. The first one, which I think was at the end of the last chapter, was more like "huh?" then "Oh, cool." It was good, but I feel a small transition would almost be better.
54598 What would you advise?
A literal transition like putting two Line Breaks instead of one,
Something that happens in the story that triggers a flash forward,
Or maybe adding a piece of dialog that points it out. <-- That's what I've been trying to do: "my sister’s been gone for a little over nine-hundred eighty years" and “You just needed to pull off one last prank to cause some last-minute chaos, didn’t you…[Discord]?”
54716 I get that you have been doing really good, it's just me being a bit picky. It wasn't hard to tell, it just seemed sudden at points. It's working well for you, I admit. And I can't wait to read more. I really don't know a perfect way to fix it. You could try out a few things, ship it to some pre-readers, and see how the enjoy it best. That might help with any other issues that may come up later, too. Just a thought, not saying "do it".
54887 No being picky is good! Just a little nervous, first fic after all, didn't mean to sound so aggressive :L
55036 It's all good, I've helped a few people start off by editing. I would, one day, like to write one myself, but I never have the time or ideas to do one... I understand the needing to "be accepted" and "well liked" though, and I can say that this fic will give you a great start.
“Discord?! What the fuck, man?” Celestia squealed in complete shock.
Oh god, that had me in stitches. XD I must read more!
Hehe, the foul language may be out of character, but I think it's actually very well implemented and makes me laugh every time there's a crude joke (and I mean "crude" in the best possible way). Oh, and Celestia playing Quake 3 was hilarious, by the way. XD
94302 Thanks, I'd like to think I'm funny
The reason I put so many inappropriate jokes is because they're in high school, and I wanted it to be as realistic as possible ^_-
You know, this is pretty good. It's a shame it hasn't been continued in forever. Welp, on to the next story.