Despite being a mute, Vinyl was pretty confident about her new life in Canterlot High, until she met this mysterious cellist...
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Welp, I'm guessing Vinyl and her friends knows how to sign?
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They didn't use sign language yet, but I introduce it in the next chapter ^^
I hope he teaches them about chaos theory
Interesting story so far. Definitely going to be following this one.
The cover image is certainly interesting. I'm positive that I've seen the style in which it's presented, but I honestly can't recall where I've seen the style before.
Okay, this chapter is quite alright since Vinyl finally sees Octavia for the first time. BUT there are a lot of problems reading this. Your paragraph formatting needs a lot of work and a bit of proofreading. I guess the paragraph format annoys me more than anything else here.
Here are some other things I noticed
I'm not sure why you're using this instead of this [ hr ] page break.
Don't you mean Heartstrings?
It's supposed to be capitalized if professor is used as a title.
EDIT: I love your cover. Did you make it?
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Hello and thanks for your comment!
Hum hum....
1) For the page break I just like to have mine, that's all
2) For Lyra, my bad, I'll change it.
3) For Discord, since it's a spoken dialog and not an official paper or anything, it sounds more natural to have it in normal size.
EDIT: 4) For the paragraph format, I'm still trying to find a decent presentation with chapter three. Once that's done, I'll edit the two first.
Concerning the first chapter, as I said to someone else, it's an issue I've been having after writing it, but it was mainly to set Vinyl's character, some backstory, and her current life. I think you see it more bland than others since you wrote your own Vinyl fic, but it's still an issue the two first chapters have. I finished the third one yesterday, and I can honestly say this issue is not present anymore, to my opinion.
The cover art was made by a friend of mine, i put her FB page in the story's description!
Thank you again for your advices and see you!
Saga.
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Well, it may be speech on the word professor, but it's still written here as a story for people to read so it's still correct to write it as Professor Discord or Prof. Discord.
Hope I'm not being to insistent on this.
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Nah don't worry it's always nice to have intelligent comments ^^
For now I'll keep it like this, and you'll tell me what you think of it in the next chapter where there is more character development okay?
Kisses.
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You know Octavia has dark gray skin in Equestria Girls right?
Discord is in my #1 spot for non ponies