I (sometimes) write Twidash stories
With Twilight soon coming back from Canterlot. Her friends cant wait to surprise her with there welcome home party. But as it starts to get late, Rainbow brings out the new horror film and pops it in the projector. Its just that.. Twilight is a little more than scared to watch it.
This is my first story! :)
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Nice story, I can't wait for more!
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im glad people like it, it means a lot to me! Ill try to get the next chapter out before i get my wisdom teeth pulled. Ill probably be very out of it after for a bit and wont be able to write at all. :S
Thank you very much!
No glaring fault as far as I can see, so good job on that. (really some stories just...)
The only thing I have a minor gripe with is the current description. As far as I can tell this is going to be a somewhat shortish story and you are giving away too much with regards to what you've posted so far, this will of course change when you are done.
Also, I would say that the last paragraph would better as a starting point for the next chapter instead of the ending to this one.
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Thank you for the feedback im always looking for ways to improve my writing skills, its greatly appreciated.
Though since the first chapter is already published i dont really want to change it, but i can most definitely implement ur advice in future chapters and stories i write.
As for the description i do belive ur right i should be a little less descriptive on the plot of the story. I cant exepct to get everything perfect on my first story after all. I most definitely tried though! :D
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Glad to help with the little I can.
You could do a compromise of sorts, write the rest of the story and then go through and make changes/revisions but that's up to you.
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Yes, I can most definitely come back to this story in the future and revise it.
Nice chapter :-) get well soon :-)
Great! I hope you get better soon!
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Thank you so much! I am feeling a little better already so I should be able to start working on the next chapter around saturday or sunday.
So good to see more of this story! Glad you're feeling well now and I can't wait to see more
Interesting cliffhanger...I wonder what's in the bag (oh, it's the horror film, isn't it?)? As for grammar, there were a couple of missed capitals, but nothing terrible. Also, I like the every week thing. If I can get some sooner, why not?
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Thank you im super glad you enjoy the story! More is definetly coming!
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Also, thanks for the information about the missed capitalizations ill be sure to find them and fix them!
You cheeky cheeky bugger you.
I caught up again, missed the last two until now.
And the story is picking up :D
This is getting good, please continue.
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Yes it is. I'm sorry it has been a while I have had many IRL things that have needed my attention. I will do my absolute best to continue the story for you guys.
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Don't stress, take your time.
You'll have more fun that way.
It was nice to see this updated. Keep it up!
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Thank you so much! Im so glad people like the story it means so much to me.
Like before, I think I saw some errors with capitalization, but that's all, really. Nice job so far.
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Thanks ill find them and fix them!
This is so cute!
And I think you've mastered capitalization
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Thanks! I do hope i have mastered capitalization haha
Is this on hiatus or just cancelled?
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No. Actually i am going to continue these stories to the best of my abilities and work on other projects another time. People have probably waited a long time for an update so im going to try to get a chapter for at least one of my stories out. I just have to remember where i left off.. 🤔
Not bad at all for being your first story.
And Twidash is never wrong.
I would like an epilogue. This is a very cute and enjoyable story to read, and the more the merrier!
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Thanks! Yes, you can never go wrong with twidash!
Somehow, my jaw can’t keep still. Sure, It’s pretty cold, but I don’t think that’s the reason because, why would I feel warm?
Not overly important but it should be philosophers stone. Stupid British thinking Americans wouldn’t understand the reference.
I have to admit I thought that what Rainbow Dash would end up saying would be "Um.. H-hey Awesome. You look.. Twi."
*Le wince*
Dashie gonna scare Twi.