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spike the lone wanderer


just a guy who love write fan on Spike for the fun.


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Spike Drake or the biggest loser of all time, died saving the life of a girl from his high school, he was finally going to know peace, but destiny decided otherwise. He returns on earth as a ghost to monitor the world and its inhabitants
Why me, mate!

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 63 )

I'm interested. Going to keep a lookout for this story.

You've sold me on this story.

So hard to watch Spike put up with so much crap. But I will continue to watch to see how it goes.

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OMG, Thank you very much. I'm a big fan of your works.

It's a decent idea and has promse, so I would liek to continue to read it but...

I'm sorry to say, the pacing too fast, the gramamr is bad, and you used the wrong words for several sentences.

'MY EYES!!!'' The coffee burned her face. She took a step back, and she stumbled on a haltere, making her fall. She tried to attach herself to a machine, but she fell to the ground, and the machine fell on her right leg.

Is a example, attach herself to a machine do you mean grab something to stop her fall and support herself, and what machine you said machine only that doesn't help.

What is the machine, sports equitpment, or Welding equiptment, or a Table saw?
Seriously thou what is the machine she grabbed on to? Helps with the story.

Work on pacing and grammar get a editor maybe.

Other then that it's a good story idea even if it I wanna make Spike suffer forever and ever story.

8306676
Thank you,t is true that I can better define certain actions of the character. I try to keep a rymthe fast enough for the readers to be in constant action. And for Spike, I love the character but, I also like to see him sad or angry at others. I thank you for these advice, diablo.

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alright well hope things get better for Spike...I guess sicne he dead now.
But do hope the others regret how they actted just before he died.

Fuck spike has it rough.....it's sad that he died

8311446
Yeah, to be honest. This fimfic is my favorite of them all.

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At least spike had one person act nice to him before he died......

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So people are going to do a complete 180 when they find out her died right?

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What is a 180? I inquired but I did not understand.

8311510
Doing a 180 means to turn around like the next chapter people will no longer hate him and may even regret what they did to him

8311519
Then that's going to piss Fallout off

8311521
Actualy, your role is resumed to a funny little cameo. But, you can have more lines if you want.

8314535
Soon, I finish the fourth chapter of wanted, then I Will work on the next chapter.

I can't believe it took him that long to realize nobody could see him. Even for a guy who thinks everyone hates him.

So, how long before he tries to make contact through a whiteboard?

Sweet chapter now time fore pranks

I like one punch man also I like to watch strike witchs and girls und panzer

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Oh, believe me, you're not going to be disappointed.

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Denail can be many things. I be honest Spiek was a asshole in this chapter more so then before, maybe because deep down inside he knew he was dead, or maybe in the end he gave up and accepted his life sucked and decided to lash out.
I'm am curious who that being was and what she had to do with Spike suffering and why.

Ok the songs are nice and approite but two things really grind my gears.

( Close-up on Spike's mother holding a picture of him when he was a child in her hands. )
( Imagine Spike alone under the rain while looking at his old house. )

That was the LAZIEST method to describe a scene and it doesn't do anything except RUIN IT, it lazy and ...I'm sorry sad as well.Sad it soo cheap.
Come on! You could done better or maybe asked for a tip or something! Anything better then describing a scene like that.

Hey fallout ain't gonna be a main character is he well I hope he's not

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You're fucking right, I can do better Than this. But, for Spike. His sentence serves as a presentation scene for the generic. It has nothing to do with history.

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No, he's just a random cameo for the fun.

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I figured be a better sad scene written in better detail.

I do agree with Spike on what he said to Celestia, does she really regert her last words with him, or she just regrets how she said it?
Seriosulys he was awful and hope her final words haunt her for a long time the last words she said to Spike before she expeled him.

i also still wodner who was that spirit what ehr problem with Spike and if he can get pay back if the reason his life stunk and death as well, was her fault.

So he's discovered the power of possession. Wonder if he'll try using it to let others know it's really him.

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It's a wat : this is the best storie of the world. Or it's a wat : I'm completely lost.

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