Disclaimer: this crossover is NOT a Doctor Whooves story but rather the story of pony in the Doctor Who universe meaning The Doctor is humanoid.
Fluttershy finds herself on The TARDIS after an incident with a mysterious extraterrestrial phenomenon. It is up to Fluttershy and the Doctor find her a way home. Along the way, she must overcome the obstacles and fears that come with being without one's friends in a darker, more violent universe populated by giants.
The shy Pegasus is taken on adventures across time and space. It is a journey of self-discovery for both Fluttershy and The Doctor. For Fluttershy must find the strength within herself, once again to overcome her insecurities in the face of the terrors these unknown worlds throw at her. Along, the way Flutts gains new friends in the form of old companions who help to find her place when travelling with The Doctor. The Doctor, Is forced to show a more tender side of himself in the sensitive pony's company. He must heal from his past scars while running from his past sins and also brace himself for the uncertainty that the future holds.
Please continue
Not a bad beginning and I can't see any major flaws in your writing. No bad english, no run on sentences, etc. I look forward to more from you. My only suggestion is that you chose an odd point to end the chapter. While it is easier said than done, A better place to end chapters are at cliff-hanger-esque type moments.
Character turns a corner and runs into the armed guards who draw their swords...And the chapter ends.
The Tardis lands and fluttershys eyes light up with wonder as the doors slowly swing open revealing....And the chapter ends.
That sort of thing.
Like I said, this is a great job for a first story and I look forward to more from you.
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Oooooooo I love this!
Looking good so far!
Okay, I know I helped edit it in small fashions, but still happy to see the final result. Also, loved the image of Ten you picked. Which episode is that from by the way?
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Hello, person I in no way have a pre-existing relationship with. thanks you were a great help
as for your question, I don't really know I think it was Smith and Jones.
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Thanks!
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If you want see more remember to give the story a follow!
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Reeeallll subtle Mojo, and thanks. Lovely image.
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Thanks and Thanks for the advice
I am really looking forward to the next chapter, this is one of the better crossovers of Doctor Who, and it's only the first chapter.
A lot of these crossovers are just too complicated or not well written but not yours; it's great.
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No problem man. Can't wait for more.
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Thanks, and yeah I worked meticulously to make sure it made sense.
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Thank you!
Which Doctor is the Doctor in the picture?
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The Tenth Doctor played by David Tennent between 2006 and 2009. This story takes place in 2009 in the Who Timeline which means it is Tennent's Doctor.
Oops.
He's wearing...
Sandshoes
omg I love this Doctor, he was my Doctor(while Martha was my first companion)
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Did I mention shoes? I don't recall...
He and Martha were my first Doctor and Companion...
To me his inclusion was down to how well he could play off Fluttershy and the wealth of sidecharacters you can pull from. It was a toss up between ten and eleven but I went for this one because the hyperactivity of Matt Smith's Doctor probably wouldn't have as good a chemistry with 'Shy.
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Nah you didn't mention his shoes, it's just that the nickname that War Doc and 11 gave him in the 50th anniversary special stuck with me hahaha
(10: they're not sandshoes
War: yes, they are)
Yeah, 11's hyperactive side would give poor Shy a heart attack (and his sullen demeanor during the Clara Oswald part is, I think, too scary for Shy)
.... This is a v good beginning. Obviously a dead fic, cough...
But I'd encourage you to continue it. It's a rarity for a story to have such a good grasp of the personalities of Flutters and The Doctor.
The premise in your introduction is also promising!
Here's hoping you can continue
Best!