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Decadent Deimos


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I had interacted ponies on and Rainbow Dash said this story was true

Chapter was originally much longer, but some feedback suggested some things were too much of an info dump and I should maybe spread out through later chapters.

I think we get the gist of Fluttershy/s anatomy. Now on with the interactions and 'the interactions'.

As a side note this is all starting at the very beginning of season 1.

So, is everything going to happen before the series or the series will be changed due to Fluttershy's... assets?

This isn't meant to be a short story.

Then I hope you know what you are in for. Especially, if you are going to involve episodes.

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So, is everything going to happen before the series or the series will be changed due to Fluttershy's... assets?

Yes.

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Yes, you're only going to do up to the beginning of the series, or yes, you're going to try and redo all the episodes only with Futashy?

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Starting at the beginning, doing episodes where she is more involved and changing the flow based it being Futashy. I don't have a plan for each episode, but I certainly have chapters in mind that can take place between episodes too!:twilightsmile:

Definitely gonna be watching this one

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So, when does Fluttershy turn Angel into a water balloon?

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Best he can hope for is cum showers.

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Aww, that's no fun ;P

Is water ballooning the worst he can expect then?

If you're going to write more, please do try and improve your vocab and use of words - the story itself isn't too bad, and mostly it flows quite well, but there are a few glaring things, like the used of 'hanged' instead of 'hung'.
Otherwise, be interested to see what happens.

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If you're going to write more, please do try and improve your vocab and use of words - the story itself isn't too bad, and mostly it flows quite well, but there are a few glaring things, like the used of 'hanged' instead of 'hung'.
Otherwise, be interested to see what happens.

Pot, meet kettle? In all seriousness, I had to look that up and didn't realize hanged only meant to put to death by hanging. Went ahead and fixed it, but was that the only thing?

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Damn you, predictive text, for making me look foolish again.
But no, I don't have any other words of advice or criticism - it was a fun start to the story and was a good mix of slight humour and kink, which I enjoyed. I'd like to see where it goes, and keep it going

You should write more of this.

A whimper escaped Fluttershy’s lips and she covered her ears with her pillow and buried her head into it, sobbing lightly. This was going to be a long day…

A long day indeed:rainbowlaugh:!

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