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ChappedPenguinLips


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After making a bet with the crusaders that he could get a date with any mare in Ponyville, Spike winds up on a date with a crush from the past. Will everything turn out okay, or will karma catch up with him and turn the date into a disaster?

Knowing Spike, probably the latter.

Collaboration with the amazing FamousLastWords

Submission to Jake The Army Guy's Obscure Shipping Contest

Thanks so much to Pearple Prose, FrontSevens, Enigmatic Otaku, Norm_De_Plume, and Pickleless for editing. Y'all are da real MVPs.

There's no such thing as Minuette X Spike art so thanks for making it happen, Kairipancakes.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 78 )

Epic! Thanks for letting me have a piece of this one.

Fantastic story, I really hope you win this one, Chapped!

Neat. Also, good.

“Hm,” she mused, tapping her chin with a hoof, “since you and Twilight left, I’ve been working as a paralegal for a small firm, doing research on cases, drafting and organizing documents, contacting witnesses and clients, pretty much the lawyer doesn’t want to do.”

That awkward moment when the stuff you've been studying appears in the story you're reading.

Anyway, that was a cute and charming story. You nailed the characterization for Spike and Minuette, and while the premise was a bit odd at first, it ultimately worked out in the end. There were one or two minor grammar issues in the story, namely when Spike tastes the food he orders in one scene and replies accordingly, but those were small in the grand scheme of things. Nicely done, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest! :twilightsmile:

And the ship has set sail!

Technically he did win, because the only reason he didn't get the kiss within the time limit was because the Crusaders interfered. That should make him the winner by default.

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Hey what'd you know I was thinking the same thing.

I knew you were in a pickle for artwork so i am always glad to help.

this is my new OTP!

ChappedPenguinLips
Story Approver

8269170

Fifty percent is a good-sized piece, I'll say. :rainbowlaugh"

You couldn't have been anymore of a joy to work with on this. Love you, my dude. Thanks for giving me the opportunity to write with you. :heart:

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Thank you! I really appreciate all of your support and encouragement!

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I'm glad you liked it! :pinkiesmile:

ChappedPenguinLips
Story Approver

8269209

Thank you for the support and read! It means a lot to me. And I have a few friends working in law so that was kind of a nod to them. Then, Famous, my co-author, came up with the brilliant jab against the dentist stereotype, and I loved it!

So, yeah! Thank you so much for your time, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

8269352

There were too many factors. The crusaders interrupted, but he still got the kiss. Both sides were biased. All bets are off, I guess, because it's too close to call :V

8269297

Yes. The S.S. Spinuette. Or the S.S. Mike if you want the ship to be named after a cool dad or something.

8269432

Thanks a million! I really appreciate the support, and the art is just wonderful! :heart:

8269544

Wow. I'm not even sure I can say that one! Thanks, though. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for reading! :pinkiesmile:

8269658
Of course, my friend! Any time, any place, we'll do it again. But next time... let's not bite something this big on such a short deadline.

“Hmm,” she started, “well, the firm I work for mostly does handles civil suits, like Divorce settlements, property disputes stuff like that. Though, there was this one couple where the mare and stallion were married, right? And it turns out that the stallion was cheating. So, the stallion was cheating, and after we start the case it turns out the mare was cheating too! But here’s the kicker! The stallion was cheating with the stallion the mare was cheating with. It turns out the stallion in question was trying to double dip for part of their inheritance or some nonsense. The case was so ridiculous we referred them all to a psychologist and family counselor. And get this,” she said, pausing for dramatic effect, “after counseling, right? They all decided they were going to get married, because, y’know, polygamy,” she finished with a nod. “That’s probably the craziest I’ve seen. I expect worse though. I’ve only been there for two months.”

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This was really cute and incredibly cheesy. Also I think I'd stop being friends with the CMC after that.

This story is practically begging for it:

That was just amazing! So cute and gripping! Reading this instead of having lunch was worth it.:pinkiehappy:

Spike returned the ever-so contagious yawn. ‘Oh man, me too.”

so true

Really unexpected ship, I found them absolutely adorable. Really loved this story.

Don't make bets with children.:facehoof:

Cute story!:moustache:

8269658
Yay! Also, your pic is awesome

I love you.

Dude. That spike and starlight banter? *chef kiss*

I'd read a story about that even if they were just on a couch watching tv!

Really well done story.

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I'd read a story about that even if they were just on a couch watching tv!

Don't tempt me...

The three fillies each thought for a moment before Scootaloo broke the silence. “The next single mare that walks in, no matter who she is, you have to ask her out and get a date.”

I like how this could technically include a lesbian/other orientation that doesn't work mare, which would rig the bet in their favor.

“I hate to interrupt…” Minuette bit her lip. ”Um, But... I’m pretty sure I heard my name earlier, and I’m kind of, sort of, really lost right now,” she said, followed by a few blinks. “Also, does Starlight have seizures often, I’m not sure if that was a seizure or laughter, it’s depressing how similar the two are sometimes.”

Dunno why, but every time I re-read this line it feels awkward. Maybe break up that sentence a little?

“She called you ‘buddy, o-friend, o-pal, o-chum, o-friend zone.” Scootaloo smirked.

Haha get rekt, Spike.

“Sure she will,” Scootaloo said. “And we’ll be watching. So no funny business.”

Scootaloo's totally oblivious to how weird she sounds right now. Love it.

“Hmm, let’s see,” he said to himself. “Scales polished? Check. Fangs brushed and shined? Check. Two spritz of Inconceivable pour Homme ?” *spritz, spritz* “Check! You’re lookin’ good, Spike. You really are.”

Rendering sound effects with * is weirdly distracting. Other than that, nice StarSpike friendshipping!

“Well when you put it that way…”

Sweetie Theft Auto. Carriage?

“Well, suffice it to say I saved the entire city and perhaps all of Equestria!” Spike hopped on his feet to make his point. “Picture this: King Sombra rising from the depths of tartarus. His armies at the gates. But, Spike—the brave and glorious—on the back of one Princess Cadance flies in to put a stop to his tyranny and saves the day! And now, there’s a giant crystal statue of yours truly in the center of the city. I’m pretty much royalty there.”

This should be capital.

Anyway, the Crusaders are clearly evil milkshake schemers, 'extroverted' is the perfect word to describe Miss Minnie here, and this was a cute story.

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Except it wasn't all bets are off, since the Crusaders forced Spike to buy them milkshakes anyway, despite never setting terms and interfering. Bet SHOULD have been called off, but they get to win because of BS.

I know it's not the point of the story and all, and the rest was a nice little shipfic, but it would have served those insufferable meddlers right to see their golddigging get thwarted. As much as the rest of the story is good, that threw me off so much I can't thumbs it up. I just despise cheaters too much.

Anyway, best of luck on your future endeavors.

Never before has a story both made me squee with delight at overwhelming cuteness and made me want to brutally strangle the crusaders to death.

JackRipper
Story Approver

Hey look, I don't hate reading Spike for once. Good job on the story Chap. :scootangel:

Also, second feature in a row, totally not jealous or anything. :unsuresweetie:

Shouldn't Spike have won the bet because the CMC sabotaged it? Why does he owe them anything when the reason he lost it is because of them?

there is a special bookshelf for situations in which I need to double favorite a fic.
and this fic is granted a place on that shelf.

The thing that I liked the most about this fic was the good use of the characters and the variety of slangs and expressions used in the conversations (the over cheesy parts were the cherry top of the ice cream).

You did a good job fella, a really good job.

We need more Minuette and Spike fanfic, maybe a sequel to this.

I CALL SHENANIGANS!!!! the CMC pulled a cheating move at the end therefore they should forfeit on principle.

The cheese level is high with this one, but it was a highly refined well aged cheese.

ChappedPenguinLips
Story Approver

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Holy hell my sides :rainbowlaugh:

8269817

I'm glad you liked it! And yes, it very, very, very cheesy. :derpytongue2:

8269839

So, this video scared the daylights out of me when I heard it. :rainbowlaugh:

When I sleep, I hook up my bluetooth speaker to my phone to amplify the speaker. It's great! So, I forgot I'd done that, and I'm scrolling through comments while I'm barely awake... I click the video and hear this nasally raspy voice just flood my ears, and the entire house pretty much—it's a really good speaker. So, amidst me trying to shut off the horrible voice violating my ears, I managed to fall out of bed. So I just laid there on my back, painful croaking in my ear, gritting my teeth.

So thanks for that :rainbowlaugh:

8270051

Oh no! You should have eaten :rainbowlaugh:

But i'm really glad you loved the story. Thank you so much for reading! :heart:

8270106

Thank you! If it weren't for my co-author, this ship would have never happened. So, I'm glad it turned out as well as it did! ^^

8270156

Don't make bets with kids~

Ever.

I'm glad you liked it!

8270177

Thank you so much! I like yours too :twilightblush:

8270185

I love you too bby :heart:

8272559

Total trash mammal, nough said

ChappedPenguinLips
Story Approver

8270271

Thank you so much for reading! And Famous was mostly in charge of the Starlight/Spike banter. I did some too, but I mostly did the CMC and Spike :V


8270302

Rapid firing these but:

> I think a lesbian would have been a better story now that I think it. All the way through and:

"I don't like boys."

That would be so great :rainbowlaugh:

> Spike always gets rekted

> I actually had no idea the *spritz spritz* was in there. That must have been Famous' doing, because I'm a real stickler for stuff like tbat, too, and I'm actually going to change that when I get on my laptop. :unsuresweetie:

I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for taking the time to read!

8272659
Sure thing!

I actually had no idea the *spritz spritz* was in there. That must have been Famous' doing, because I'm a real stickler for stuff like tbat, too, and I'm actually going to change that when I get on my laptop.

tbat

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ChappedPenguinLips
Story Approver

8272697

Shhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I was on mobile!

8272831
It's just a prank.

Wonderful story; kind of predictable overall plot, but then the same could be said for most of the best MLP episodes, and, as there, it was all the detail of getting there that provided the story :twilightsmile:

Thanks for writing this; the world needs considerably more Minuette :pinkiehappy: Best background pony.

> I actually had no idea the *spritz spritz* was in there. That must have been Famous' doing

If Chic Fil A calls me for a reference ima just tell 'em you throw people under the bus, lol.

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He applied to Chik Fil' A?

But a good, upstanding Christian would never lie or throw his fellow man under the bus.

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That's what I thought, but you learn something new every day. :eeyup:

i liked this story, it seems almost-sequal worthy to me

That was cute! I'd love to see them do it again but maybe in a different situation.

Cute story. Definitely would read a sequel

Honestly, mid-way I started cringing at how adorable this was.
Fuck I loved it; upvoted and favorited.

That was so sweet! :heart: Well done! :moustache:

Nicely done.

I particularly heard Spike's voice throughout, which I don't find as often as might expect. Good job.

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