Little filly Twilight's flare was so powerful that its magic echoed through time itself and woke up an entity. An entity that tried to help what it considered a young little mortal thing full of potential and magic.... An entity with only a vague sense of constant awareness, enough to know that the silly short-lived mortals who think itself only a concept, need a guide and peacemaker that won't be dust the next time it fully comes to awareness...
A very different pony is revealed when Twilight Sparkle steps up to defend Equestria from Nightmare Moon...
after all.... things are bound to be different when an entity that represents Harmony and an entity of time itself choose to train and raise filly misplaced in time to become true guardian of Harmony and something more...
PS: this is my 1st story, so feedback is welcome
This looks like an interesting story. Let's see where it goes...
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I'm working on the next chapter.
Thank you!
I like it can not wait for the next chapter
interesting....
Nothing really wrong here. Grammar’s good, spelling is great, and I can most definitely sense and see an opportunity for an amazing story here. I don’t have any stories of my own. I’m great at making them in my head, awful at writing them. But I see a lot of potential here. All I can honestly say this: don’t give up.
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plus its hard to write it on my phone in the little box the website has... so when I write, it has to be on my computer...but.... Christmas break starts this Friday and that means more writing opportunities!
I'm not giving up, laziness and life just gets in the way of finishing the next chapter.
My God. This is amazing.
I'm just confused as hell. so I'm out.
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I'm sorry... what do you find confusing? is it something I can fix?
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Thank you! Whats your favorite part so far?
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Honestly? It's too hard to decide!
This is...interesting. So far you're getting the characters...close enough to be easily recognizable if they weren't named. So that's something. I'd like to see where you're going with this because right now you're still establishing setting and background...but it could be very interesting,
Just to let you guys know, I did a little blog tagged to this story explaining why there hasn't been a new chapter and asking for advice. Soooo yeah..... Check it, I guess...
I think maybe have Twilight have a moment with the rest of the main 6 is fine. But I also think that before Nightmare Moon shows up you maybe have it were Celestia think about what happened to Twilight on her test day. Maybe have Celestia think about it because she just saw Shining Armor and or Cadence and the gilt of not being able to help Twilight comes into play. But then she feels something off, something to do with harmony and this makes Celestia worry a lot. Hope this helps.🌸
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
Ok you have my interest. I hope you are planning on continuing this 'cause I really want to see where you go with this
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Please don't leave. It might get better
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
Looks good
I like this Celestia
Really now... how interesting
continue it
Interesting story, when will there be an update?