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MidnightShy21


If 'I love you' is a promise, would you break it if you're honest?

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After her friends prank her, Rainbow dash runs away. Yes, she DID prank them too, but making her believe she killed everypony was way too much. After a while she bumps into Soarin. He cheers her up but what the both don't know, is that equestria is in horrible danger.

In this story rainbow dash isn't a wonderbolt.

Special thanks to:
CategoricalGrant
For helping me with my story
And another special thanks to:
Wonderbolt Writer
waspinator331
For the ideas! I'm sorry if I didn't use yours.

Please forgive me for the horrible grammar.

Rated teen because of some violence.

Warning: Contains some bad grammar.BEING EDITED

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 35 )

Story-wise, this is a pretty nice concept. You just need to work on your writing and grammar.

8257405
Thanks!
I'm working on my grammar the best I can!

Conceptially wise, this does have possible merit. However, the pacing is far too quick, this first chapter should be drawn out a lot more and you do need grammar and spelling work done just a tad.

Very good please continue

8258416
Thank you!
I'm writing the third chapter right now, the second one is being edited by my editor!

8258464
Well, lets just say my life isn't always happy...
And thank you so much gurl!
I love how all of these happy comments make me smile!

Ummmm i'm sorry but this chapter..... like you jumped one point to another super fast.
i mean it barelys tarted and twilight already putting her inthe paer she missing and then PONYVILLE UNDER ATTACK few secs later....

Yeah not sure i want to read sucha fast pace story.

8259605
I'm sorry it was rushed, I wrote this at like 1 am and I was super tired...
I wanted to re-do it but some persons wanted it to continue as soon as possible, I will try to make the next one less rushed!:twilightsmile:

Oh no they're in big danger now, EQUESTRIA IS DOOOOMMMMDDD!!! :raritycry:But hopefully they will stop them and save the day, I wonder what will happen between soarin and dash to.


Anyways I love it my friend I'm sure the other's will like it to. :pinkiehappy::raritystarry::twilightsmile:

8261259
Aww thanks!:heart:
I'll start writing the new chapter soon, trust me!:yay:
I'm so glad you enjoy it!:heart:
And i think you know one thing that wil happen to Dash and Soarin:raritywink: SOARINDASH!!!:heart:

8261499
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoy it!:heart:

8261523
Ooohh I can't wait to see it come soon. Good luck my friend. :raritywink::heart::rainbowdetermined2:

8261887
I'm writing the next one right now, I'm sorry if it took too long, my best friend left the site and is only coming back sometimes, but anyways, SOARINDASH IS COMING CLOSER!:heart:

Ooohhh I'm so excited I'M SOOO EXCITED!! (atleast that's what Rarity would always say) but you get the hint. But good luck my friend. :raritywink::rainbowdetermined2:

Aaaww it's OK my friend, you just need some time to calm down a bite, :twilightsmile: atleast this chapter is really getting better and interesting at the same time. :raritywink: and I am loving it, :heart: good job and do a great job on it. :rainbowdetermined2::pinkiehappy:

That was amazing my friend. True love broke the spell. I new they or he cold do it, so I wonder what they might do now. :pinkiehappy: awesome job you did :rainbowdetermined2: and now we'll have to see what will happen next with the Maine six and Soarin (and Chrysalis to). :raritywink:Good luck on the next chapters. :heart:

8306370
I'm glad you like it:raritywink:
I appreciate all the support:derpytongue2:

8306588
Your welcome my friend. :raritywink:

Ooohh I really enjoyed it alright, :twilightsmile: also it is so cruel of those evil villains to do something like this, :twilightangry2: they have gone to far now.:twilightangry2: I hope they have a plan soon. The fate of Equestria is in there hooves. :rainbowdetermined2:

8363705
Thank you!:heart: I think this story has one or two more chapters:twilightsmile:

8364195
Well then good luck for it my friend. :pinkiehappy:

Ooohhh I would love a sequel to it to. :raritystarry::heart::heart: I can't wit to see how Rainbow Dash and Soarin's life go from wedding, :pinkiehappy: having a baby, :pinkiehappy: and I wish you a good luck on the next story book sequel my friend. :twilightsmile::rainbowdetermined2:

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Thank you so much! You are really supportive and nice:twilightsmile:

8374228
Your welcome my friend and good luck on your sequel story book to. :raritywink:

A nice concept. Could be done better though. Grammar and spelling could be vastly improved, and the pacing is way too fast.

I'd highly suggest getting it edited.

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I actually have an editor right now. Thank you for letting me know.

Comment posted by MidnightShy deleted May 20th, 2018

It's so cheesy, I love it uwu

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