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WHELP THEIR FUCKED
also first
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they'll be lucky if he hits them with the flat of the blade
OH SHITE BOI.
tis be interisting.
That description... looking forwards to this.
Welp, that happened
And then Pinkie pops out of the chestplate to diffuse the whole situation and offer Artorias a slice of Manehattan cheesecake. With a slice of strawberry on it.
Mother fuckers going to get it now. Also is it bad i can't get this line out of my head
"A wardens call to blood and steel!"
It just fits with him for what ever reason.
Wow I wouldn't want to be to those reporters and façe flametwi
Congratulations on being the 70th story I'm tracking
Well, this hasn't updated for a while. What's up?
They shall ride the train to Canterlot!
. . .
On second thought, maybe they shouldn't go there. It is a silly place.
The thought of Artorias cursing... pleases me.
Chapter 2:
All I all: I liked this story. Not much has been revealed so far, the three dudes seem like a lively bunch and Celestia is a bit of bitch. Not really rulery, if you get what I mean. But hey! That's MLP for ya.
An original dark souls crossover, with an original storyline, that goes beyond: 'Oh I'm just an ancient dude, some shit happened before and now I want vengeance!' is:
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Because now: there are three epic guys, that want vengeance. Or do they?.. I dunno, but I'm enjoying this story nevertheless.
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Welp. Once again, one of Twilight's patented Panic Attacks screwed everything up. I'm surprised that the result of this one turned out better than Lesson 0. I mean, if she hadn't panicked, forgot about Celestia's letter to them saying they could take the train, which she didn't even recall NOT MENTIONING TO THEM WHEN THEY CAME TO SEE HER AFTER RARITY ASKED ABOUT IT, and made them take a half day jaunt alongside a river, then that giant-ass snake/centipede would still be alive!
Wow. And I thought Solaire was the most positive thing that could come from Dark Souls.
So how come Twilight was mostly calm with Pontiff, yet completely freaking out when Artorias arrived?
Nice chapter, the third member of the group has meteorite abilities apparently.
You know, if I were a nice and selfless person: I'd say: get better soon. But I'm not and I want more chapters of this story soon, so... yeah.
Ebola man. It sucks. But if you turn into a zombie: there are many things you won't have to worry about.
-OoC
....not sure if Molestia or Trollestia at the end there......hmmmm......
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Who said she can't be both?
Otherwise: #WHAT A TWIST!
At last I've found a Dark souls crossover that's still going and not cancelled or on hiatus!
If the Triumvirate were voiced, what would they sound like?
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I dunno. But I expect them all to have deep baritone like voices
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Have you read NFire's Legacy by chance
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Here yea go https://www.fimfiction.net/story/238582/legacy
You know, Pontiff isn't actually Sulyvahn's first name. It's his title as head of the church.
EDIT: Nevermind, this is addressed later on.
IT LIVESSSSSSSSS!!!!! Also good story.
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Hmm. Personally, I feel a crossover right at the beginning of a story, especially one where both visit each other's worlds but seem to go nowhere, is kind of a bad sign, but I'll keep reading nonetheless.
8467480 Shit and nonsense.
Personally, I feel this has gone a tad fast, at least in this chapter. Being promoted to knight/right-hand, along with the fact Celestia wanted words with them and not just Artorias, well, it just feels like too much too fast. I'd recommend pacing it out a bit more.
That's kinda racist, Shining...
Overall, good chapter!
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Hey, thanks for the feed back! I completely agree with you that my pacing is out of wack, and there are definitely some things I could have done way better. And it's crazy how much criticism nags at the back of your head as you go throughout your day, good or bad. I wouldn't say that I'm trying to defend myself, but rather, provide context.
Of course, I'm not a professional writer or aspiring to be one. This is just a little fun thing I do on the side to get the creative juices flowing. Being such a novice writer, ignoring all the school stuff I do, I really want to get to the meat of this whole world I have been imagining on and off for a while now. I kind of want to get all the set up out of they way. On top of that, at the start of things I didn't really have a plan. Just started writing and saw where it went. In hindsight, not the best idea. Was it fun? Sure was.
I'm not trying to make light of what you say or bat away your criticism. In fact, it'd be great if you did keep reading and provide criticism. I'm reaping what I sowed years ago, and evidently that's biting my ass. I already knew the things you pointed out and decided to ignore them. Thanks, again on your criticism and calling me out on to-be-improved-faults. Hope you keep reading!
Well, that's one way to take care of a pest problem.
rarity is a fool. To go after a monster.
The giant bobblehead orbs aren't it's eyes, look really closely.
this is funny and interesting
You need to mark the change of POVs better. Some minor grama Problems but nothing to big.
Besides this it is a good chapter. I am a bit confused why the one Pony suddenly was afraid of his visitor and a moment later i had problems because he was afraid of the bell and it was written as if it was only the bells that frighten him but besides this it is interesting to see how different Ponys react to this situation.
Keep up the good work.
Well hello Dandelion/Jaskier. Wasn't expecting to see you here. Now where's your white-haired friend, I wonder?
NONE SHALL HARM THE GOOD DOGO AND LIVE!
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She's limping