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Tumbleweed


A guy. A guy who writes stories. Stories about ponies. (And sometimes robots).

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This story is a sequel to The Prisoner of Zebra


In the second installment of The Flash Sentry Papers, Carrot Top (a.k.a. Special Agent Golden Harvest) calls on noted rogue Flash Sentry for a Very Important Mission. Soon enough, Sentry is dragged into another misadventure, this one involving feuding families, young lovers, and a troop of very angry flying baboons.

Which, given Flash's luck, is par for the course.


Written for Jake the Army Guy's Horse Words Extravaganza! Let's hear it for Obscure Shipping, folks!

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 51 )

Huzzah! More of the Flash Sentry Papers. This should be quite good.

You're the only pony I know who I trust to lie to my family.

I love how much this says about both Carrot Top and Flash.

Very intriguing opening. I look forward to seeing just how disastrous the reunion gets.

This is all some insidious plot on your part to get me to read the first Flash Sentry Papers story, isn't it?

...Well, it's working.

I think your italics got screwed up a little ways in.

Don't make me feel sorry for him. Don't do it.

Good beginning, here. Very reminiscent of a certain Miss Amberly. ;)

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You mean you haven't already? I thought you were legally obligated to read any story containing Carrot Top. :pinkiegasp:

Oh, you chose to continue? I'm curious already!

Also, considering what a nice fellow his mirror counterpart is/was, maybe those sceptics have a point. Proof, not so much, the one in the know appears unwilling to share.

“And allow me to introduce my husband, Over the Top.”

That is the single greatest name I've ever heard and nobody will convince me otherwise.

“Muffin is missing!”

Oh dear.

I take it Over the Top experienced some hearing loss back when his job was blowing stuff up on command.

Carrot's family is quite nicely presented, and the hint about the future conflict is tantalizing indeed. Looking forward to seeing where things go from here.

Love the banter between Carrot and Flash. Great names for her family, too. :D

What, what? Over the top sounds like a proper fellow.

In the distance, a few pegusai shoved some fluffy clouds into place

I have to ask, since this always looks looks horribly ugly to me: why do so many people spell it like that? I know people use "pegasi" because they think "Pegasus" is Latin for winged horses in general (instead of the name of a specific winged horse in Greek), and try to make a plural using the one Latin rule everyone remembers: "us" -> "i". And "pegasi" is common enough in the fandom that it's stopped looking silly by now. But what rules are people following to end up with "pegusai"?

“Ah! Sounds open and shut, then. Where are we headed?”

“The Everfree Forest.”

Because, when Carrot Top does the whole angsty teenager bit, she goes all out.

“We don't need the sheriff.” Carrot Top said. “We've got Flash Sentry.”

Eh?

“Nevermind what my Dad said-- he's panicking right now, because his little girl-- because my sister has disappeared. And it's your fault.”

His fault nothing, he didn't do anything and it's your fault for implying you have a coltfriend and then dragged him along.

“I'm only here because you forced me. Or did you forget?” I flapped my wings to keep up.

Carrot Top cringed, stopped, and turned her eyes downwards. “Damn it, you're right. I just ... “ She ran a hoof through her frizzed hair. “I should have seen this coming."

I rest my case.

“What are you-- no!” Carrot Top smacked me on the shoulder. Hard. “The boy's name is Bottom-- Rock Bottom –from the Bottom clan.”

“The who?”

Carrot Top sighed and shook her head. “The Tops take their name from the fact we live at the top of the hill. And the Bottoms live, well, at the bottom of the valley. The two families have been feuding off and on for generations. That's the 'valley trash' my father was ranting about.”[1]

That's stupid.

Carrot Top rolled her eyes. “The head of the Bottom clan is traditionally called Big Bottom, and-- now what?”

And just when I thought it couldn't get even more hilariously stupid,you prove me wrong.

“Sorry. I must be making an ass of myself.”

“Sentry.”

“Oh! Right, didn't mean to make you the butt of the joke.”

Sentry.”

“Of course. Back to business. Put all this silliness behind us, eh?” I went so far as to waggle my eyebrows.

Oi, bad puns are my thing.

The exact origins of the Top & Bottom Feud are unknown (Sentry neglects to delve into the matter, unsurprisingly), but various sources claim the quarrel between the two families was either caused by a land dispute, or possibly by an incident involving a Hearth's Warming Eve Pageant, a cartload of potatoes, and somepony's pet pig.

Wow. Didn't think it could get any more hilariously stupid, but I was wrong.

Hmmm... I liked the old style for the footnotes better. This way may be more "authentic", but it makes reading them a real pain in the ass. You have to either keep scrolling back and forth through the chapter as you read it, or hope you remember what all of the different numbers were attached to by the time you get to the end.

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A valid point! The changeover to the new site made the footnote code in The Prisoner of Zebra go a little wonky, but it might be fixed now? I may go and edit the footnotes once I'm sure.

I need more of this in my life.

I'm sure Flash Sentry's stellar public image was helped quite a bit by Celestia's personal spokespony, Spin Top.

Ah, a classic Romeo and Juliet situation. Hopefully this one will have fewer deaths by the end.

Also, I'm inclined to believe that second cause for the Top-Bottom feud. That pig was never the same again.

I hit Rock Bottom, and passed out.

You're alive, so, there's that.

Great action with Flash, there. I like the baboons. :D

Should have taken a breather on a cloud

“THAT HE HAS! AND I CAN'T THANK HIM ENOUGH FOR IT! TO THINK, HE SAVED BOTH MY LITTLE GIRLS ... “ Over the Top trailed off, tears welling up in his eyes. “I CAN'T THANK YOU ENOUGH, LAD!”

In my mind, you're now voiced by The Scotsman from Samurai Jack.

“Heroes usually are pretty stupid.” Carrot Top mused with a wry (and dare I say lovely) little grin. “Maybe it's the same thing?”

I mean, there's a fine line between heroism and stupidity, it's sadly often crossed.

“I think--” my mouth suddenly went very, very dry. “I need a drink.”

Oh yeah. Kinda feel bad for Flash, he never wanted to be a hero and yet here he is being dragged into these sorts of adventures.

Normally I'm not a fan of these sorts of vague endings, where the tension never really gets resolved, but in this case I think it fit perfectly. Your Characterization of Flash and Carrot was fantastic, and their relationship is one that's defined by the tension between them. I don't think either one would really be able to stick with a relationship that wasn't like that. This tension fits them, whether they want it to or not, and really makes their relationship feel real, far more so than any sort of actual conclusion ever could.

SENTRY'S ALIVE!

In case it wasn't clear that Over the Top is pony BRIAN BLESSED!

In any case, another excellent entry in what is quickly becoming one of my favorite series on the site. Eagerly looking forward to future installments.

Another assignment? Nooooooo!

Great ending. Good idea leaving it open-ended like this.

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That last line. :facehoof: This cannot be allowed to stand.

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I think I have like this more if it were a standalone. It doesn't hold a candle to Prisoner.

I'm a historian, not an evolutionary biologist.

Thanks, Bones, :moustache:

Well when will Flash get it through his skull, get out of being a Royal Guard, that way Fancy can't drag him into any of his missions that he sends Carrot Top out on.

I hit Rock Bottom, and passed out.

Somehow, I suspect this entire story was an excuse to use that line.

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I so wish we'd hear more of Cain's (mis)adventures... :fluttercry:

And yet, despite the caddishness Sentry admits to in his memoirs, I have yet to find any conclusive mention of such a dalliance. One would think a confessed scoundrel such as Sentry would admit to (if not brag about) such a relationship, but I have yet to find any thus far in my studies. Which implies that no such relationship ever happened, or Flash Sentry simply chose to completely omit the most scandalous details.

Princess Twilight Sparkle still has not returned any of my letters of inquiry on the subject.

Remember though, Princess Bookhorse knows some magic spells.

This is so much fun to read if you imagine the fic and the show as different but both entirely unreliable narrators.

How? How is every sentence so on point?

Methinks flash has a problem with strong women. Every time he considers her negatively it's because he's reminded of how competently she can fight.

The story ended just when you thought it was about to start. Which was a bit odd, but the more slice-of-life oriented scenario was a welcomed change of pace.

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You read him admiring her beauty while she goes through her kata and you think he has a problem with strong women?

Get a grip.

FLASH! A-HAA!

Am I really the first person to catch that?
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You're slipping, Shadow.

here was High Top, a basketball prodigy, Black Top, a civil engineer, a bearded old codger by the name of Uncle ZeeZee, and a dozen more besides.

Ha! I see what you did there!

“I'm was just doing my job.”

Something's a bit off here.

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I was wondering when someone would catch that gag. :)

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Just imagine if it was Spinning Top, and this crossed over with the Civil Serviceverse.

“FLASH! A-HAA!” 

He'll save every one of us!

I really enjoyed this. It's definitely a different tone from the first installment, but I'm a sucker for romance stories. At the end of this story, Flash and Carrot Top could either be friends, or could move onto being a romantic couple. Either one could work in the next story, so I'm eager to see what direction the next story takes this couple.

This is brilliant. It was such a cute little story. I'm just disappointed Brian Blessed pony didn't say, "Chiswick, fresh horses!" Ah, but you can't reference every single one of Brian Blessed's miraculous roles.

I hit Rock Bottom

It's not the worst pun I've read on this site, but it's a contender.

Really liking your writing-style here. It's smooth and crisp.

Uncle ZeeZee, I think "Sharp Dressed Man" it the right sound track for this.

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