Babysitting Rumble on Hearts and Hooves Day turns into more than Flitter could have expected.
Thanks to Noble Thought for editing.
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Minds Eye
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Glad to help out. It was a fun read and I had fun editing. I actually started working on some of my own neglected stories after helping, so you helped me out, too. Thank you!
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Happy to hear!
...ima still ship it
also have like and fave
8231059
Thanks!
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Just what I hoped to hear. Thanks.
Owing to the usual way such stories end, I am very impressed with how your story addresses the situation maturely and realistically. Great as always, Minds Eye.
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Always happy to live up to a reputation.
I was so into this story but was kind of disappointed with the way things turned out. Not that she would be with him, of course, given the age difference- but a night that I at first thought was going to make a sad mare happy ended up being a huge awkward mess!
Still, loved the first 3/4, and pretty well written. Worth a thumbs up.
she was
his? And maybe 'and go knocking on...
then
ran
her
Not to shabby.
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too
Fixed them, thank you.
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Thanks for your thoughts. Glad you enjoyed it in spite of the hard left turn.
8233598
Of course. I never fault authors just because it goes in a different direction than I would have written
Besides, Flitter is my favorite pony (don't tell the others) so its *basically* an auto like
Well... That was unexpectedly depressing. I wasn't expecting sunshine and rainbows, but I certainly was not anticipating a thunderstorm.
Still, very well written. I just feel the ending was a bit of a shame. I've always despised when adults give younglings no credit, nor explanation of things. But, I was a very mature child in my youth, so I suppose it might be just me with that opinion.
of his classmates
spat
flustery
Refreshingly sad.
8233598
I always make that mistake.
Loved it my guy. Loved it.
8531155
Glad to hear.
I think Flitter should have at least told Rumble "you did nothing wrong". It feels wrong how Rumble feels guilty at the end.