Completely unnecessary and pointless epilogue
Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy had spent a year together. A year of trials and tribulations, of growing together, of nights full of tears as they became better individually by being better together.
..... No not really, Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy were a perfect match. The biggest problem in their relationship was suffering through everypony constantly telling them that they were a perfect match. It was a constant source of annoyance for Rainbow Dash, whose constant groans of annoyance were a constant source of amusement to Fluttershy, which in turn was a constant source of annoyance to Rainbow Dash.
That was not to say they didn't have their fair share of arguments. Their largest fight to date concerned Rainbow Dashes scent and how potent it could be after a long day training and wanting to do little else but cuddle up next to her marefriend after. About half a harsh sentence from both and both were suddenly apologizing. Dash never wanted to hurt Fluttershy's feelings with an argument and Fluttershy never wanted Rainbow Dash to feel like she was trying to change her. The only thing that had really come from that argument was Rainbow Dash learning that she kind of liked her marefriends girly shampoos, though she would never admit it.
Now a year in and they had made plans for their anniversary that reflected that willingness to make each other happy. They had both wanted their special day to be both memorable and exciting, but in different measures. Thus their plans had been an early airshow and spending a quiet evening at home together.
Though the airshow was not Wonderbolt quality, it had served to make their day exciting and give them just the reason they needed to laze away the rest of the night.
Even better reason was that their anniversary seemed to perfectly coincide with the latest Daring Do release and the release of the latest issue of a trashy romance series Rarity had gotten Flutteshy into. Thus they could be found a year later, exactly where their journey began. Enjoying each other's company, on Fluttershy's couch, while Rainbow Dash tried to figure out how to keep the next part from being too mushy.
Rainbow Dash had been hoping to have longer to figure out that part, but had made the same miscalculation she had been making for the past year. Just how much more comfortable her favorite pillow seemed to be getting every time she settled down on it. She really did want a nice long night just enjoying Fluttershy's company, she really did, and she really wanted the moment to be romantic, she really did, but with how much her eyes were already fluttering it seemed it was now or never.
As Rainbow Dash let out a big yawn she could practically feel her marefriend smile at it from where she laid on her back, that spot probably a little more on the flank then it used to be. Fluttershy already knew Dash wouldn't last much longer and had been waiting for when she would give in to sleep. Thus she could not help but smile more as her marefriend rolled onto her side and started to get comfortable.
"I'm sorry Shy, guess that show took a little more out of me then I thought."
"It's ok Dashie, I had a perfect day with you."
"Not too perfect I hope. How the heck will we top it next year?"
"I'm sure you'll think of something. Go ahead and get some sleep." She couldn't help but smile some more. She noticed Dash shift while getting comfortable, almost like she was adjusting her wings. That was odd for her, but not enough to pay much attention to. That was until she felt Dash's front hooves snake under her chest and wrap something around her left hoof that was tucked there.
"I dunno, I might have a hard time beating this." Dash said this as her eyes closed and a satisfied grin crossed her face.
Fluttershy gasped as she pulled her leg out and examined a simple band adorned with both their cutie marks secured gently around the base of her hoof. Looking back and seeing the small black box half way under Rainbow's wing and the smile on the face of her now more than even a marefriend, she knew she needed her answer to be clear. She shifted, eliciting a slight groan from Rainbow Dash as her favorite pillow left its place under her head. It was quickly replaced by her second favorite pillow that she had discovered over the last year as Fluttershy slid her leg under her head to cuddle close, chest to chest, with the love of her life. Flutter Shy could hardly contain herself as she kissed her half asleep fiancé. "I love you so much Dashie."
"Love you too, Shy."
As the initial shock and rush slowly wore off with the help of several more passionate kisses, both mares felt fatigue and comfort blending together into the perfect feeling of peace that they only got when they were together. Neither wanted to ever give up that feeling, so they never would.
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It may have been unnecessarily for the story but it still had a good point to it. It was also cute Flutterdash which is also a win
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Thank you so much, I was really worried I ruined what I had going
Woohoo. Thank you so much everyone for getting this to 400 views
500 views, thank you so much everyone.
Diabetes levels of fluff.
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Yes, very much so. It was my first story. Glad you decided to check it out. Not terribly sophisticated, but I still like it. I'll buy your first round of insulin
600 views on my first story ever, some year and a half since I first put it out there. Thanks too everyone who's read and helped me since then.
A rather nice job on the atmosphere and the characters, managed to elicit some feelings. Having Greensleeves playing in the background while reading this also helped
However, there are quite a lot of recurring issues that break out the reader of the atmosphere before they can get fully invested in the story. Namely it was mixed up your/you’re, then/than, the lack of apostrophes in possesive case and also some tense inconsistencies here and there. You have done well with dialogues though.
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Yeah, I'm not a very good writer. I do appreciate constructive criticism though. Your and you're I thought I did a good job policing, but this was my first story. Then and than is one I know I always get wrong. I'm also pretty sure I don't do quotations correctly. Though I think I'm doing possessive correctly nowadays. Maybe it's time for a mass edit of all my stories. Or maybe I'm just looking for reasons to stall on my current ones. Thanks for the complement either way.
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You also made me look up Greensleeves. Not my style but not bad. I could see how it would be good to read to.
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You are welcome, I’m taking into consideration this is an older story. Still, those are just little slip-ups, so you don’t need to be that hard on yourself. (Still, it’s better than if you considered yourself the best of the best!)
As for your/you’re and so on, I have found that it is good to keep a chart containing and explaining the use of the different forms. Then you can just use Ctrl+F on the chapter, find the words you want to check and compare them with the chart. As for direct speech, I can’t say you got it 100% right in the chapter, but given there was no glaring issue that I noticed, you are still doing far better than a majority of writers on this site.
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I guess one could say that it Sounds Cool, despite being a few hundred years old ;)
Little late, but woooooo. 700 views!
And now 800. I'll probably keep celebrating until one of my stories hits a thousand.
sweet
My first story ever has reached 900 views. Thanks so much everyone.
My first story ever, and it's finally broken 1K. Thanks to everyone who's enjoyed it so far.
nice
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Twas my first story and it shows, but I still like it at least for getting this wholething started. It's not a very good story from an objective standpoint but I still like it and I'm glad you found something to like in it too.
That was so cute
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Thanks, and thanks for the fav