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JackRipper


A real lady killer.

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The Great and Powerful Trixie is woken up by the voice of a narrator that's both around her and inside her head. To further annoy her, she can't seem to get rid of him, even though he has nearly lost control of the entire situation.
 
Neither of them are going to have a good time.


Rated E for meta-humor, crass banter and self-deprecation.
Cover art by Lukeine on Deviantart.
Pre-read by randome284.
Proofread and edited by Dreams of Ponies.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 45 )
JackRipper
Story Approver

8232544
That's a phrase that melts my heart. :heart:

Would this be the same narrator from this story: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/95183/twilight-hears-the-narrator ?

JackRipper
Story Approver

8232579
I'll leave that for you to decide. :raritywink:

This was fun!

Any chance of more?

JackRipper
Story Approver

8232658
Of this story? Maybe a sequel if it gets enough traction. :unsuresweetie:

Of stories like this in the future? Sure! I don't see why not. :twilightsmile:

god dammit man this is good

JackRipper
Story Approver

8232671
Glad to hear it. :twilightblush:

This wouldn't be happening if David Attenborough was narrating.

Writing something like this, that European air must be messing with your head, Jack :rainbowlaugh:

Still, the ham was good, also I may or may not have a surprise for you when you get back. Maybe if you're a good little colt, eheh.

i remember a game that had a simuler twist where the main character would contently argue with the narrator it was a very funny game as this is a very funny story

JackRipper
Story Approver

8232763
Thank you! :twilightsmile:

JackRipper
Story Approver

8232906
The narrator has proven to be quite unreliable. :twilightsheepish:

JackRipper
Story Approver

8233092
They don't have smoking regulations like they do in the US, I swear. :unsuresweetie:

JackRipper
Story Approver

8233493
no prob bob ... er jack

This reminds Stanley of the game that he was featured in called The Stanley Parable. Stanley questioned whether this was intentional or not, but he realized he didn't really care and decided the story was mind bending enough to put on his favorites shelf.

In all seriousness, this was an entertaining read and I rather enjoyed it.

JackRipper
Story Approver

8242452
Thank you. :twilightsmile:

ChappedPenguinLips
Story Approver

Finally caught some time to read this.

And you're right, I did like it :V

It was an amusing read, definitely funny. Not like laugh-out-loud funny, but I had a stupid grin across my face the entire time.

Good job, Jack. Also, nice job on really bringing the idea to life—I'm sure it's been done before, but this is the first time I'm reading the concept, and I enjoyed it a lot. ^^

And just like that, the narrator has been effectively "owned" by Starlight Glimmer.

This was a short but sweet story to read. I'm definitely keeping this in my favorites. Thanks for writing it! :pinkiesmile:

JackRipper
Story Approver

8256640
Thanks for reading it. :pinkiesmile:

Huh... I can see this being cannon and that's saying something. Huston, we have no problems:derpytongue2:

JackRipper
Story Approver

8279757
No, that would require the writing team to be creative. :trollestia:

8279761 That hasn't stopped Pinkie Pie.:pinkiecrazy:

JackRipper
Story Approver

8298678
Thanks, man. :twilightsmile:

Of course the narrator had to narrate "The great and Powerful Trixie" and of course she would be annoyed and sassy about it :derpytongue2:. Nice job JackRipper. :pinkiehappy:

JackRipper
Story Approver

8381872
Thank you. :heart:

This was amazing. Buy the time you see this comment, I'll probably have moved this story to my favorites. It's that good. :trixieshiftleft: Though it seems Trixie is upset about you calling her a "second-rate magician" in the title of your chapter...

JackRipper
Story Approver

8384167
Thank you kindly. :scootangel:

:moustache:
Indeed.
Yes, quite good.

“Sorry Mr. Narrator, I actually don't mind your company myself. But Trixie clearly doesn’t want you hovering around her, so I’m going to cast this spell.”

Starlight’s horn began to produce an incandescent light that illuminated the room, her face straining with focus as she looked up at the ceiling.

Sorry to break it to you, but I’m the one in charge of the story, you can’t just end the story when you feel li-

Shing!

Guess agaaain~!:ajsmug:

Every so often I feel like I can hear a narrator for me. Maybe cause I'm crazy. So did they kill the narrator or... what would that be called? Narrataside? Actually I like that word, it sounds awesome!

JackRipper
Story Approver

8502300
The didn't kill the narrator so much as they ended the story. Your ending would be a little dark for an E-rated story. :twilightoops:

8502302
Before I say this, I have to ask if you like dark humor?

JackRipper
Story Approver

8502309
Celestia's Tea Conquest has a lot of dark humor. It's the best kind of humor in my opinion.

8502384
Well then, I suppose, if my theory is correct, this narrator will meet Twilight.

May I have your permission to do a reading of your story?

JackRipper
Story Approver

8993055
Knock yourself out, my good man.

8993235
Great! I'll link you to the reading once it is finished! :pinkiehappy:

8993235
Here's the link to the reading! :pinkiehappy: Reading

Shing!

F for Narrator. So is he dead, or...?

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