Gilda had flown out to see an old friend only for it to end in disaster. Now at a club (the only place with halfways decent drinks) she simply wants to drink in peace. Vinyl Scratch, unfortunately, will make that impossible.
Rated teen for language.
A little something I came up with for Jake’s Horse Word Extravaganza.
You can, hopefully, find more obscure shippings here.
This is quite good. it had a natural feel to it. with only a couple thousand words one would think it's be rushed, but it flowed so well. I know this is a one shot but I wouldn't mind seeing this take off into a more in depth piece. it's got big potential. I think you got a decent chance with this. good luck my friend.
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Why thank you I may do a series of one-shots with these two if it does well enough.
I'd absolutely read more of this. That's for sure
Some proofreading flubs here and there, and the naked Gilda apologism isn't winning me over, though that's largely a matter of clashing headcanons. The biggest issue lies in one simple fact: I'm reading this story somewhere where I can't listen to music.
I have to judge the contest entries based on the text, not whatever else accompanies it, and this one feels more like a playlist with a framing device than a story in its own right. I can see the chemistry here, but it's a fairly rudimentary reaction. In short, this needed a lot more to it to counterbalance all of the tracks. Text that described the sensation of playing together as it was happening would've gone a long way.
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I understand. I just wanted to get something out there for the contest. I know it was fun to write.
I just really liked this story, the awesome music was a bonus, but it was metal as f***
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Well thanks
Vinyl and Gilda? interesting pairing.
A nice work, the story flowed smoothly and the interaction between them was well done.
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Thanks. glad you like it.
I like it. Definitely improves my previous opinion of Gilda.