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Comrade Bagel Muffin


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A batpony colt wants to stay up until sunrise, because that’s when daddy gets home from work, but his mom wants him in bed. She knows how to get him to sleep without him even knowing it though because and I quote “Mommies are smart.”

I don’t know if this counts as being featured but with view M being off A Batpony Lullaby is in the featured box. Though I admit I don’t know how. Merci to all of you 06/07/2017

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Bravo this was heart warming.

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Merci anything in particular.

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A mothers live for her child.

This was a marvelous read. I really like your writing style. For some reason, it reminds me a bit of Dr. Seuss.

I do, however, have one issue with the story. I think it would be better if you put it into poem stanzas. It already reads like a poem, so make it look like a poem.

And another thing that I've learned from experience, it is a good idea that when you write the lyrics to a song, give the reader some sort of idea before hand what Melody goes with the words. That way readers hear the song, rather than feeling like they're reading another poem.

Other than that, I have nothing but praise to say about the story. It was short, sweet, and heartwarming. Very good job.

I concur with all the other comments; wonderful little read. It was so... heartwarming. It made me feel warm inside, and I like stories that can do that.

10/10

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And how would you suggest I give them the tune?

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Merci Beaucoup, I’m glad you liked it.

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I'd say something like “"another rendition of” or “"she sang to the tune of”

I'm sure there are better ways to say it, but that gives you an idea of how to go about it.

I've seen some even like the name of the song to a YouTube of the song.

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It’s actually an original though.

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Ok. Don't worry about it then.

Ah, Heart warming! Reminds me of that One batpony Video i Once Saw on YouTube

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What Do you mean with that?

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The youtube video was it called Where are you?

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Yes, exactly, this One was what i meant

I enjoyed reading this it made my morning , I thought it would be like Luna looking in to the dream of the child grown up and him remembering the day.
Maybe even do a few of these shorts for a small town not long story’s just a few hours in the life of a town of bat ponys.

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I am glad that you enjoyed it. Please PM me more of what you were thinking.

That was such a cute story! I loved the melody and loved how it came to an end.

Truely an adorable story.

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Merci beaucoup. I am glad that you liked it.

I like the adorableness. Although the rhyming was a bit off puting for me while reading.:twilightsmile:

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I’m glad you enjoyed the sentiments of the story.

This was very adorable and heartwarming! ^_^

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Merci beaucoup I'm glad you liked it.

Well, I liked that. It was short and sweet, and I love how it was a poem.

I agree with Realm Jumper in that it should have been done in poem format, but that's alright. And it reminded me of Dr. Seuss as well. :pinkiehappy:

As for you questioning the dislikes, there really is no telling. :applejackunsure: Anyway, I liked the story. :twilightsmile:

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Goshdangit! Now, I feel like like I have to rhyme everything I say! :facehoof:

"Doesn’t he like playing with me."
That should be a question. Not trying to be a grammar Nazi even though I am, but since you have asked why you're getting down votes, then this could be it. Some people just can't appreciate mistakes.

Edit: Also, rhyming might not be everyone's jam. Good for a short story or a poem, but people have certain tastes and think that their way is the right way.

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