Journey to Equestria

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metroid_freak

metroid_freak #1 · Jun 15th, 2018 · · · Chapter I - Arrival ·

Okay, I've gotta ask: is this a trollfic? I'm not trying to bash you but you've checked off a lot of cliche boxes and I'm still on the second paragraph.

TheMajorTechie

TheMajorTechie #2 · Jun 15th, 2018 · · · Chapter I - Arrival ·

Seems edgy and cliched, as 8986789 stated. Also, it's not a good idea to illustrate your stories with inline images, unless you REALLY know what you're doing.

Also, infodump much?

Crimson Chaos Night

Crimson Chaos Night #3 · Jun 15th, 2018 · · · Chapter I - Arrival ·

This is honestly my first story so I'm still working on a few things but if you have any experience writing please PM me if you have a way to help me.

HappilyDead

HappilyDead #4 · Jun 15th, 2018 · · · Chapter I - Arrival ·

One suggestion is to read, a lot. Read "Mordane Stronghoof", "Dance Amongst the Stars" or other stories that have a like to dislike ratio of about 100:1, you have to remember that likes are cheap and many people are not really into analysing stories but they usually only read for fun.

If you want something more complex read Weapons_X or Celesti Lateo's story. Casper is also pretty good, BookeCypher too. Read "Diaries of a Madman" if your up to the challenge.

Ms QIB