Rarity has a problem, a very personal and agonizing problem that she has no solution to. Rarity has deep and overwhelming feelings for Twilight, yet she can't speak the words that would convey these feelings to her beloved. She despairs of finding a solution, until Twilight unwittingly shows up with the perfect solution. Or maybe not as unwitting as she seems...
A exceedingly last minute and poor quality submission to the Interwoven Colours RariTwi contest that I could not help but add because Mono has dragged me head first into the trash can and I'm having far too much fun wallowing around in here. Just kidding Mono-senpai, I love your work and am happy I could contribute something for you to enjoy. Plez notice me and enjoy!
I don't exactly expect to win anything with this, since I've written it over the course of like 2 days with zero pre-planning and going entirely by the seat of my pants because nothing bad could ever happen like that right? Constructive feedback is welcomed and appreciated... Please be gentle.
I just have to say this is a great story and is really well written.
This was so sweet! You portrayed the shyness between them very well. Both your Rarity and Twilight were well written, very in character, though my only suggestion would be to take a few 'darling's out as there is quite a few of them. The mind melding was aptly satisfying, and the colors and imagery you used were very nice, I'm glad you added the former, it really adds to it!
A solid, sweet Raritwi story. Thank you for sharing it with us!
I must say, my friend, and with all honesty..... This has to be THE single MOST beatiful romance I have read in the 5+ years I have been A FIM-FIC patron. This was simply wonderful to the point I was having a minor nerdgasm.
Bravo!
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Nooooooooooooo! I can't be the best you have read! That can't be possible! I'm only above average decent at best, stealing the inspiration and beauty of others for my own needs! We must fix this travesty at once! Please, make your way with all due haste to Monochromatic, The Queen of RariTwi to fulfill your true romance needs! I am merely a lowly student basking in the radiance of the true master. Go and gaze upon her great works of RariTwi and revel in the majesty of heartrendingly beautiful romance!
But seriously, thanks for the compliment, and try not to take my shameless shilling of a better author too seriously. I did put my best work possible into this, even if I wrote it in far too short a time, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
(Hi there! I just realized that I never posted my comments on your story as a Judge for Interwoven Colours. After a recent review, someone did on your story, I thought it was important to get a different perspective. I don't think they did it justice.
The catch with reading in EPUB (on a dark screen, as I recently discovered) is you don't see colored text, so I didn't actually see this until now. A beautiful description... but I needed to re-read it to get a second glimpse. This was a wonderfully fluffy and intensely sweet story This is definitely sweet.
I've used a version of this spell, but you actually did an amazing job of actually adding visual color to the description and the text while still being sure to write an incredibly vibrant scene. It's wonderful and gorgeous and simply fun. There are some issues with the story though. Rarity changing her mind felt... too easy. There are some grammatical or stylistic errors (like some sentences could be tightened). However, a lot of cool touches (such as the changed cutie marks) made a strong story with some fantastic ideas!
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Oh, so there were supposed to be reviews in the comments on the entries. I wasn't sure if that was the case or not, and I didn't know where to look to find out for certain. Ah well.
I think I know what review you mean, just read it earlier today. I know it wasn't exactly the most glowing and positive thing ever, but I didn't really mind. Aside from the section during the spell itself, the rest I acknowledge was average for the most part, so I wasn't annoyed by him feeling not too interested. I wrote this in a rather short period of time so I was rushing both in story and without. Overall, I just wanted to play around with writing Rarity in Mono's kind of style, and the only part where I got really into it was the spell part, where I was forced to think and write in a form that is very different from my usual fare. It was a fun exercise
even if recoloring it all was a pain in the flank...Still, glad that you liked it, and it was fun to write, so I'm still plenty happy. Thanks for giving out your positive thoughts, as well as mentioning your issues.8728237
Some of us did internal "reviews" of stories, some didn't. I don't really consider this a "review" though. More just a few comments.
And I know Mono is intensely grateful for that. She said so for herself when we announced the winners.
Coloring is totally evil. ESPECIALLY since you don't have an undo button if you need to fix something. I've fought that battle. Yes indeed. In fact, your concept about the shift in the cutie mark has come up several times in conversation with Mono and me. So you did something cool. Be proud of that!
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Anything I do that makes Mono happy is instant super-pride for me.
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The perfect attitude to have!
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Will there ever be a sequel?
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Probably not, this was built to be a standalone and I haven't thought about it since I made it. And... haven't posted much on Fimfiction at all lately really. Hmm...
I wonder if there are any other stories on fimfiction that did any sections in their story the same way you did with the colors. This is the third time I've read this story by the way.
Oh be still my gay heart, this was phenomenal. When I got to the colors, I actually gasped, and then when I thought about the nightmare that would have been to set up, I gasped again, but in horror.
Absolute 12/10 though. Never enough Raritwi, and I'm a sucker for the 'aura/soul melding spell' trope.
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Um, hello, one doesn't have to be gay to enjoy a fic like this; in point of fact, I'm such a hopeless romantic that I absolutely ADORE this fic. (That might also be the reason why my muse latched onto Twidash for the fics I've wrote; who knows? Muses are perverse at the best of times.) Previously, I'd held the opinion that Monochromatic was the only fimfic writer that could write Raritwi with this much panache. I've been proven wrong, as this rates right up there with some of her better fics. I wish my own were this good.
Don't let me fool you; my own stories don't even come close. They're tolerable, given that they were written by a straight white male in his 40's.
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Oooh, Monochromatic has written some of the best Raritwi there is on this site! And not just Raritwi either; there's at least one that I know of by her that pairs Pinkie with Rarity. Bit of an odd combo, though it does work.
In many ways, this story compares to Mono's work because you invoke the same spirit that's found in her fics. I only hope that my own feeble efforts come as close as this one does; it's extremely hard to capture a spirit of shared love as you did here.
Incredibly cute story.