• Member Since 25th May, 2017
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Applefai


Hey y'all. I'm a christian brony born in 1996, I just love making stories. Picture of my oc done by a really good friend of mine.

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a heart warming story/sad on our favorite flightless pegasus Scootaloo and how she became an orphan as told in the perspective of her.


Cover image made by: http://deviantart.com/sayorionline

http://aminoapps.com/p/089p8j

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Comments ( 5 )

8214371
glad you liked it Lumica

Like dis if you cri everytim 😭

The emotions in this I feel are a bit rushed to get to the point. There could have been more emphasis on the overall impact of her losing her parents, rather than just skimming through it. As is, it's a good somber tale of a filly in distress, but if I was reviewing it, I couldn't pass it, just because I don't feel it hits enough marks. But, however what I did like was the connection with the characters and how easily Scootaloo was able to overcome her own fears and doubts to become a strong filly on her own, despite her own limits of not being able to fly.
5/10. Needs work, but not bad.

9785093
Thanks, I might actually edit it or rewrite it altogether. Thanks for the feedback and I'm glad you liked it.

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