haha the Monty python reference made me completely ok with this story. infact i will even give it one of my oh so important fucks.

8185286 I had that in there from the start of the story. The scene I posted was 'slightly' modified from the original, but I had to work in the reference anyway. I'm glad you like it.

I really like this so far. You seem to know how to balance the silly that it's not completely over the top. I will be eagerly looking forward to more.

Oh, and there's a "D7D" instead of what I assume was meant to be D&D in one line near the end of the chapter(involving Pip).

8185320 One, Yay! Two, thanks, I'll fix it.

Yes!!

WE REQUIRE MORE!!

Not to well written, but a bit of editing, and I see potential.

Plus, Bonus points for doing a Cthulhu transformation. That's a new one.

Loving this more please

I.... did not expect this much of a positive reaction... I'm a like stunned.

Eh, I'll see where this goes.

I now agree with what other authors say. If you're going to downvote, I'd like to know why. Feedback makes me want to improve. Unless it's harsh painful feedback, then I'd rather 'not' hear that.

THE DARK SORCEROR DEMANDS BLOOD MORE CHAPTERS!

8185783 AND YOU SHALL HAVE THEM BROTHER! lol Second chapter is being written as I type this.

even tho thats vel'koz and not a eldrich god for the card ill allow it because the story is good

8185854 Thanks, it was either Vel'koz for the eye, or Cthulhu. If I could find someone to do art for the lead I'd use that. But for now I think I'll Stick with Vel'koz

Dinky vs Dark Souls. I see undeniably cute rage in the future. That is all.

Yes, I enjoy this. More when you can!

This could be really funny as long as you don't take things too seriously.

I very much like.
Glad you didn't have an exposotion dump on the looks of your character before his trasnformation like other storie do.

MORE!!!!

8185961 BEING WRITTEN AS WE SPEAK!

It feels like you need to take a breath and let the situation settle a bit. Then you can go back to making me laugh like crazy.

8185970 Nope. Inspired. Getting Chapter 2 out then I'll take a breather, had most of chapter 2 written anyway XD

8185973 I meant in story, not out of it. If you drop too many jokes in a row without letting the audience recover the humor starts going stale. The God Squad never lets up, so it starts feeling monotone. Let mister No Name check out his new digs, figure out what works and what doesn't, and give him enough time that when Twilight shows up again the audience has their heads on straight and can enjoy her antics properly.

8185980 Eh... valid point sir and/or madam.

Oh jeeze... I think you struck gold with this!

8186037 I guess so.

~confused giggles~ Eh heh... Number 4 on the Featured List? What is happening?

8185892 Just read this comment, I know plan on Dinky and Dark Souls.
"Oh you like Bloodborne? Try this."
"What's Dark Souls 3?"

Tracking~

8186046 though kinda disappointed it was 5.0 and not 4.0 or 3.5 d&d

8186088 I did mention that there were bookshelves of Pathfinder (3.75). Who's to say main won't say "Yeah 5.0 is okay, but Pathfinder is better. You can fight robots and Cthulhu in Pathfinder."

Of course you'll be featured, IT'S VEL'KOZ! Why wouldn't ya? =D

8186098 Weeeeeellllll The cover art is Vel'koz, mainly for the mono-eye. The lead is.... actually he 'is' kinda an anthro Vel'koz come to think of it... A bit at least.

8186105 Ah, he looks like Vel'koz but isn't. Regardless of what your character is, I can see why the story got featured, I mean I haven't came across any other stories of Tentical Gods being adopted by a filly. So the concept idea has alot of originality points.

8186111 Neither did I XD that's why I wrote it.

8186115 To be honest, when I saw the story cover, I thought this was a Displaced story.

YES YES YES YES. Sorry, had to get that outta my system. This story is probably the second funniest thing I've read all day. The first funniest being my five-year-old sister's take on a romance novel.

8186125 I'm not surprised lol I was originally going to use Cthulhu.

8186127 Well thanks for the high praise! :D

This is priceless! XD Please do more chapters!

You Sir or Madam, are a God!

There are no words for this.

PLEASE continue.

The Monk

8185968 THANK YOU!!!

An Elder God who cannot use their powers? Sounds to me like he's something of a... Living Failure :3

In all seriousness, sounds like a neat concept right up my alley. I just might give this a read.

I cannot even begin to thank everyone for all the support for my stupid idea. :D It means so much to me! Thank you all!!!

I agree, Dinky is adorable!

This is just to perfict love it

This... Is GLORIOUS! Oh, that is just excellent! Turned into Cthulic Elder God? "Meh." Finds himself in the world of MLP? "Meh." Is suddenly beset upon by nerdy foals and finds out that the Hooves family reads Lovecraftian literature? "Meh." Twilight Sparkle thinking that he's evil and trying (read, FAILING) to defeat him? "Meh." Cliffhanger knock on the door (Which is probably one or more of the diarchs,)? "I hope it isn't Twilight again." I greatly look foreward to future chapters! ...Although, you should turn down the comedic God Squad for a moment.

Keeping it up for too long will burn out the appeal, and I really don't want to see this story get burnt out. In any case, you do have some minor to moderate grammatical errors that you should correct, and Dinky really isn't acting like a filly most of the time. Other than that, it looks solid. Keep it up!

Sincerely,
Hunter Redflame.

this story is nonsensical , incredibly over paced , we don't even know the main characters name yet , and takes a dump on all Lovecraft's lore ....and i love it!

Cute'ning speed ahead!!!
More soon, please?

This is... shockingly good. The story is pretty original, I have to say. Though, there are a few problems along the lines of pacing, capitalization, comma usage, and spelling. Though there has only been one of the latter so far. Keep up the writing.