Havelock Vetinari- master chessmaster, patrician and lord of Ankh-Morpork, (former) assassin and possibly the most dangerous man on the disc.
He's been a lot of things in his life, and as he juggles the political coalitions, unstable individuals, race relations, and magical mishaps of the city, he's never really missed the social life he discarded for this job.
The arrival of a small, white filly in his throne room will give him a chance to try adding "father" to his list of titles.
Inspired heavily by Tatsurou's My Little PWNY stories, and by the shameful lack of Discworld crossovers on this site.
First story- updates will be slow, and commentary is greatly appreciated. I may solicit direction for how the story should go down the line, if I get that far. Will try to update one a week. Will try to update regularly. On hiatus until further notice. Many apologies.
I'm loving this story! It reads just like any other Discworld tale. The characters are spot on and the pacing is perfect.
Please keep writing. This is gold.
So gar it seems to be keeping with Diskworld's style, which I like.
And holy crap Discord is a Sourcerer, it totally makes sense!
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I had no plans to make Discord a Sourcerer. I have other plans for him.
It says something when the only thing I can find to moan about is 'Sir Vimes', as it should be Sir Samuel. Otherwise, I look forward to reading this.
I'm having visions on what Tia would do to mimes
Yep. Yep, this is gonna be good.
Apologies for the late chapter. My proofreader was having computer troubles.
Uhm... Weh?
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correctly and well, or remove her from the world. "Correctly and well" is part of one phrase.
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Oh. Okay, I get it, now.
I never thought I'd live to see a crossover of this kind.
Man, the Discworld series are one that matches MLP well enough to be great if well handled.
And you, sir, are writing an excellent story - it is quite a feat to keep the characters within their characterizations, not to mention Pratchett's signature writing in the way you've managed to keep the comedy within his style.
I'm faving and tracking this story. :)
Please keep it coming. :)
"dread ascendency of Coin,"
I believe the correct term is "ascension", as in "dread ascension of Coin,".
Other than that, excellent chapter, and great use of the footnotes (a Pratchett staple). :)
Ohhh... I think I know who they are going to call. :)
Pity that character didn't get too much focus beyond the few books she appeared in - and it looks like you are intending to correct that lack of attention to her...
It is a good work you've done - the narrative flows well, the characters are - well, in character. And the humour is pure gold.
Nice! I'll be waiting for your next release.
In footnote 3, Lobsang is probably better described as an anthropomorphic personification than a god. He would be shaped by belief like Death has been shown to be, but being linked to something actual and not dependant on the local Disc magic/environment as well, Time itself, he can't completely dependant on belief to the degree that the defined Discworld gods, like Om or the late Nuggan have been shown to be.
The reasons there aren't many stories combining Discworld and ponies are really very simple. One, ponies are used to make something more perfect. Hard to make perfection perfect. And two ... Discworld is fucking hard to write well. Possible but fucking hard.
Sto-Helit. You're missing the L.
This is an excellent chapter overall, discounting the minor flaws due to lack of proofreader - but they are minimal.
Excellent characterization of the characters, and I hope to read more from you in the future.
It is indeed buggered hard to write Discworld right, and you, sir, managed to do just that with the same humour.
I was laughing all the way from their banter alone.
I'll be waiting for your next release! ;)
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Am I at least doing a decent job?
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Knew I missed something. Thank you!
This chapter makes me think Celestia will return home after having picked up her ideas of what a proper ruler is from the Disc. Could make this a cross over/origin story.
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Very welcome. To quote 8360569, you're doing great.
Loving the story, and I can't wait for more!
Three paragraphs in and my inner
fanboygeek is bouncing off the walls. I really hope the you will continue this story, at whatever pace necessary.One bit of criticism, though... I would suggest trying to keep those footnotes close to the paragraph they relate to. Having them in the Author's Notes is not the same as the end of the page, as you have to scroll all the way down while trying not to accidentally read any spoilers, then scroll back up the same way while also trying to find the spot you left off. Not to mention anyone reading the story on an e-book or otherwise as a download won't be able to see them at all.
Having each footnote after a page break at the end of the paragraph would be a solution, or at most at the end of the scene.
And Celestia continues to pull in all the major players of the Discworld without even trying. At this point I'm wondering who isn't going to show up at some point. Hope to see Moist and Adora Belle at some point in this story.
If you need a spare proofreader, I'd be happy to offer my services.
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Tried that. My story wasn't approved- authors notes have to be at the bottom of the page.
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I may take you up on that offer. I'd also like someone who has experience in both discworld and MLP.
And of course I plan on including Moist! Someone needs to teach Celestia the fine art of winging it.
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Well, it's already approved now. And I have precedence.
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Well, I'd be happy to help and I've read most of the books, save for a few of the latest ones (which were, ironically, pushed aside by pony fiction... something that can't happen to this one, for obvious reasons).
One thing I might not be as much help with is Discworld names, since I read all the books in German. I'll do my best, though.
Well. Your knowledge of the Disc makes mine look downright pedestrian. And your writing doesn't get in the way of the story.
I am impressed so far.
Most excellent use of footnotes.
I was going to suggest Vimes could raise her, and cackled at the possibilities that would spring therefrom, and then you invited him to the palace. Well played, sir. Well played.
This fic needs more views...
Minor quibble: Pratchett always pluralized "dwarf" as "dwarfs". Were this anyplace but the Disc, I wouldn't even bring it up.
Eeee! Susan! And Sweeper's here, too!
Are you putting together a gathering of Discworld's greatest hits to raise this pony?
I wonder if Susan will mistake Celestia for an imaginary creature at first...
than
I can tell your proofreader's gone. There was an entire letter out of place!
Let's see if I can finish reading Thud! before the next chapter comes up...
So many tags, no Discworld tag. Objection!
I know I'm utterly unqualified to make a complaint like this, but... damn it, I need more!
Discworld + Celestia? How could I not love this?!
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Well of course. This is Vetinari, and you need to think like him.
Of course, given that he often seems to be like the Great Old Ones and incomprehensible to mortals, you simply expect it to be really pragmatic yet funny, and wait for the story to tell the rest.
Having never read the Story of Mel and Discworld together, this had escaped me for the longest time.
Do you also think that Pratchett named Pessimal for the opposite of optimal?
Anyway, I recently did a search for essentially the very premise of this story (because of course it has to be epic), so I'd really like to see more of this soon.
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...you know what?
I abandoned this work to work on Myriad Thoughts and all that came with it.
BUT maybe it's time for it to return.
...let's see what my creative juices can stir up.
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*cue disturbing, hissing voice* YESSSSSSSSSSS...
Not to put too fine a point of it to be misunderstood, but MAKE MORE CHAPTERS. Thank you, an avid fan of the Disc
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And suddenly the palace is swarming with witches. Celestia now has a father, at least one potential unofficial uncle, and a governess; there’s definitely room for a Granny.
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Not to forget a Nanny. Just think of all the fun new songs to be implemented into Equestrian Heartsong Magic.
I wonder if she'll get a chance to meet the worst horror on the Disc, The Luggage?
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Nope. As soon as Rincewind heard about some "strange thing appearing out of nowhere," he vanished on Sabbatical, and took the Luggage with him. The faculty of the Unseen University don't expect him back until next decade.
One minor issue.
It's "Lobsang Ludd", not Lobstang.
This is definitely a story I'm going to be keeping an eye on. I really hope for a new chapter soon, I can hardly wait to see Vetinari and Susan negotiating, that's going to be fun.
Also, as far as errors, you still haven't corrected 'Lobstang' to 'Lobsang'. Unless that's regional differences - somehow - that's a significant error.
You mean logic and consistency, as applied to things like gravity and physics.
quite similar to how magic applies to some of the people I've made up over the years...
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Well, Tatman, Lord o' Regression, if you're enjoying this, then I know that this'll be fun.