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Time moves on. Things change. In the midst of sorrow, Twilight learns one last friendship lesson, taught to her by the children of her best friends.
MLP Belongs to Hasbro and the cover art belongs to its creator (Not me, found it on google images because I couldn't find the original creator). Finally found the link to the actual picture thanks to a reader: https://derpibooru.org/288396
Now with Prequel: How to Date a Princess
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This is your FIRST story???!!! This is amazing for an EXPERIENCED author!! Going to my favourites instantly. good work, and I look forward to seeing more of your stories.
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To be fair, I do have an amazing editor (slash girlfriend) who helps me polish it. Then again, it could just be that with so many good stories I have read it just seems like mine isn't as good. Glad to hear someone thinks differently.
Also, CONGRATULATIONS! Your are the first comment I have on this site. Heres a random pinkie as a reward
Also, your avatar just makes this first comment even more epic. It looks like Twilight is mad that I'm underestimating my own story
This is a very good one-shot.
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Thank you
Not a bad first story. It flows nicely and is written well, though I would break up the paragraph where you talk about the Mane 6's kids; it's a really big block of text.
If I may, I'd like to offer two points of criticism:
1) A minor thing, but this kind of story has already been done a lot (there were especially a lot right after Twi became an alicorn). That's not such a bad thing, but this doesn't really stand out from the pack very well. It's all right, it's just a little basic.
2) For all the buildup and time spent discussing the descendants, the ending comes too quickly. There's not really any dialogue or exchange of words that gives that nice emotional payoff. Don't be in such a hurry to bring things around to the end next time.
Still, it's a solid first story. Not bad, certainly. I hope you can run with it and write some more.
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Thank you for the constructive criticism. I will keep that in mind for next time, though I think my next story will be a bit more unique simply in the premise I will be going for (though it will be quite a bit darker). Still, thanks you
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Also, I don't think i will be expanding on this story, at least in the immediate future. It was merely an idea I had about two years ago that I thought would be a good premise for a one shot story. I will say though that I do currently have three stories in the works, all with at least two chapters in them. I would post them now, but I need to edit them and I have graduation on Sunday, so I will be busy for a few days. Still, I hope you will give them a read when I get a chance to post them
8175997 Oh wow, no kidding?
What kind of graduation? High school? College? Grad school? 
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College. I plan to then take a gap year before going back for a PhD in clinical psychology, though I'm not sure where. It is exciting though
8176216 Ooh, going all the way for a PhD, eh? Good luck with that, and congratulations!
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Thank you
Good for your first story! I'm really impressed :D
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Thank you
It feels like it's been so long since I read this one! Definitely gets you in the feels.
I think ynfiltra said it the best, though. I probably shouldn't find that string of emojis as funny as I do, but they are adorable.
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agreed
Beautiful one shot chapter
! Simply beautiful!!!
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Glad you like it
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Though, I gotta admit...living on forever without your friends by your side really has to sting...I can only imagine what Twilight's going through...
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Sure did!
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Yes, but she will have new friends to help her through it all her life. And she will always have her friends decedents to keep her company. It may not be the same, but it will always serve as a way to keep the memory of those she has lost alive
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. May the Elements of Harmony forever rest in peace, and find eternal happiness in Paradise...
So true...
From the editor's archives...or what I'm going to call this little thing where I share some of old editing comments with you guys!
It's kinda funny to reread this - when Piemaster first sent it to me, I had very little knowledge of MLP, but now my brain has grown and here we are.
"Pinkie may not have planned this one, but it still kept with the excitement and fun that only Pinkie could bring. It was certainly better than their first Gala. Twilight shuddered slightly as she remembered that particular disaster."
Me: Sounds like a fun story. If you wanted to do a quick little one-shot, definitely keep this in mind :)
Apparently there was foreshadowing long before "How to Date a Princess" was a thing!
"One was red, one was green, and one was blue. Ruby Pie, Emerald Pie, and Sapphire Pie"
Me: Zelda goddesses shout-out?
According to him, it was completely unintentional!
"But this time from joy"
Me: I think they can still be sad tears, but she feels comforted, because she doesn’t have to pretend anymore, and she’s not alone in the world with ALL THE BABIES
This is a good showcase of how what I had was different from the finished product! Originally, that little fragment was all I had, but as you can see, he's since expanded it! And I really liked this comment for some reason.
As this was probably my first MLP story I read by him, my reactions were pretty hilarious.
Pinkie's "We got our own statue!" party got a giant YES out of me.
My reaction to the name 'Cheese Sandwich' was YES. YES YES PLEASE TELL ME THAT WAS AN ACTUAL CHARACTER
And the group hug at the end just made me go AW.
Excellent story set in the future, and the pairings are almost all lined up with my own.
CheesePie? Check. SoarinDash? Check. Flashlight? Check. Sparity? HAIL YEAH.
And as for Applejack and Fluttershy, I prefer them with Caramel and Thunderlane, respectively.
But it's your story, so you do what you want.
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Glad you like it
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https://derpibooru.org/288396 it's by Fly-grey
I found it haha, yer welcome
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Thank you for finding that. Now I can give the artist credit.