A Different Start

After investigating a strange magical energy signature, Celestia stumbles across a young alicorn foal, and is too stunned by the discovery to ask more questions.

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Yeah, I'm honestly labeling this under the 'X is a Changeling' thing that seems to be everywhere here. I really don't know what else to say, beyond the fact that one NekroPony's comment on Blyskawica is what resulted in the idea for this particular story.

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Xanderfox

Xanderfox #1 · May 15th, 2017 · · ·

Course little Cady won't be exposed, she's not stealing love so no drain effect. She has no reason to change shape either.

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meme_hater_6948_ #2 · May 15th, 2017 · · ·

Not a bad fic imo, but the prose was bland in some parts and there was some telling instead of showing going on in some segments. Definitely a readable and functional fic, with an interesting concept, but it could be an even better fic if you expanded on some of the throwaway lines like

>She was the most amazing thing the nymph had ever seen

and made it less...boring. Maybe spruce up the language a little bit, don't be afraid to go in hard with the adjectives when you need to. Besides that, no major criticisms really. It does its job as a concept fic and I'd give it a 5/10, with the potential to be a 6 or even a 7 with better prose.

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