I Stroked her cheek to show her I wasn't mad. "Well that would be the material it's made from a titanium-tungsten alloy one foot thick, in fact, the roofs, exterior walls, as well as the garage and basement floors, are made of it. Put it simply this place is a giant metal box and the alloy makes it virtually indestructible."
So he's a billionaire?!?! That stuff is bloody expensive especially for a house. Also the story is moving waaaay too quickly. He's already gonna marry about 8 mares ?! Also spotted some grammar mistakes but I can't be bothered to put it on here (sorry). Other than that, story is nice
8192291 Anon Saves Equestria, er... the ponies in that story are giants. Also, I don't give a damn about the consensus. It 's my story so I can make them any size I want. If you don't like it then STOP READING IT.
8192253 Yes his family had money they were Arms Dealers remember and I don't think he's going fast just read 7 human in Ponyland that's how the title is written The Fabled Worrior same as the first one Rune Soldier And about four or five stories by Distorted Flare. And about you previous comment the green colored house was the only one that matched the floor plans, in fact, the color is a blueish gray as for being a box its easier to build a box than something with multiple angels plus it's more structurally sound.
The story does go a bit too fast and some points may need more time to flesh them out, there is also so there are some odd character moments e.g. twilight, but overall it's a rather good read and I shall be waiting for the next chapter. 6/10 would (INSERT MEME) again.
Was kinda hoping 6 of the 7 ponies weren't gonna be the Mane 6 since that cliche has been beaten dead, then beaten for another 3 days for good measure.
8193463 Thank you I know I've not seen a lot of stories about Gilda and Zecora and a human either. FYI I'm also adding a Diamond Dog named Lassie to the group. https://derpicdn.net/img/2012/9/30/110701/full.png And there will be a couple of funny scenes with Poison Joke but that's all I'm giving away.
8193463 I've seen 1, possibly 2 clopfics of Gilda with a human. There are/were multiple M rated stories on this site with human x Gilda but they haven't been updated in years.
8193390 That is true but how many stories do you know of, that the mane six are still ponies but are able to drive awesome vehicles and were Spike gets to learn how to shoot guns?
8195622 No she was an Omega because she was smarter than the rest of them and they didn't like it. But Lassie lost her Pack and Pup to Raiders. And Brian, Rarity, and Spike find her at the Rainbow Falls Traders Exchange beginning sold as a slave. And yes Ponies driving is awesome X 10.
I'm sorry, but this is moving way too damn quickly, and with far, far too many errors. I have seen that you won't build upon the constructive criticism given to you, that you are far too entrenched in your grounds that you have (rather shoddily) built for yourself, so I will just leave a dislike and these words for you: don't be so quick to push off help, it may make your work better in the end.
So he's a billionaire?!?! That stuff is bloody expensive especially for a house. Also the story is moving waaaay too quickly. He's already gonna marry about 8 mares ?! Also spotted some grammar mistakes but I can't be bothered to put it on here (sorry). Other than that, story is nice
Actually I believe the consensus is that they are much shorter.
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8192291 Anon Saves Equestria, er... the ponies in that story are giants. Also, I don't give a damn about the consensus. It 's my story so I can make them any size I want. If you don't like it then STOP READING IT.
8192253 Yes his family had money they were Arms Dealers remember and I don't think he's going fast just read
7 human in Ponyland that's how the title is written
The Fabled Worrior same as the first one
Rune Soldier
And about four or five stories by Distorted Flare.
And about you previous comment the green colored house was the only one that matched the floor plans, in fact, the color is a blueish gray as for being a box its easier to build a box than something with multiple angels plus it's more structurally sound.
8192858 Chill out, I wasn't criticizing, and I actually enjoyed the story.
Seriously, calm down.
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The story does go a bit too fast and some points may need more time to flesh them out, there is also so there are some odd character moments e.g. twilight, but overall it's a rather good read and I shall be waiting for the next chapter.
6/10 would (INSERT MEME) again.
Was kinda hoping 6 of the 7 ponies weren't gonna be the Mane 6 since that cliche has been beaten dead, then beaten for another 3 days for good measure.
8193390 kinda agree with ya
8193406 I'm all for Princess Luna, Gilda and Zecora though. Not enough good stories with them.
8193433 habent seen any with either gilda or zecora with a human b4
8193463 Thank you I know I've not seen a lot of stories about Gilda and Zecora and a human either.
FYI I'm also adding a Diamond Dog named Lassie to the group.
https://derpicdn.net/img/2012/9/30/110701/full.png
And there will be a couple of funny scenes with Poison Joke but that's all I'm giving away.
8193536 wow will she be like her species or will she be smart legitimately
8193463 I've seen 1, possibly 2 clopfics of Gilda with a human. There are/were multiple M rated stories on this site with human x Gilda but they haven't been updated in years.
8194009 Average pony intelligence so she's a genius to other Diamond Dogs.
8193390 That is true but how many stories do you know of, that the mane six are still ponies but are able to drive awesome vehicles and were Spike gets to learn how to shoot guns?
8194635 ok cool so shes like the leader? Wait ponies driving vehicles...... Sir I have to issue a complaint of too much awesome in that statement
8195622 No she was an Omega because she was smarter than the rest of them and they didn't like it. But Lassie lost her Pack and Pup to Raiders. And Brian, Rarity, and Spike find her at the Rainbow Falls Traders Exchange beginning sold as a slave.
And yes Ponies driving is awesome X 10.
8195679 whats this spoilers?
Cant see the sons pic
Can't wait for more, good sir. In other words MORE NOW!
I'm sorry, but this is moving way too damn quickly, and with far, far too many errors. I have seen that you won't build upon the constructive criticism given to you, that you are far too entrenched in your grounds that you have (rather shoddily) built for yourself, so I will just leave a dislike and these words for you: don't be so quick to push off help, it may make your work better in the end.
8199738 Thank you and I will take your advice into consideration doesn't mean I'll listen to it but I'll consider it.
Beside that the story is mocking at a really fast pace i must admit that i have enjoyed this fic so far, will be looking forward to the next chapter
100% pure Epic awesome. can't to see what's next.
This story is just ridiculous but I'll admit it is a fun read.
I do not know if you still check your comments or not but I would like to offer my services to correct grammar and spelling errors.
Why is the name Brian so popular ? I've read a number of stories where the main human characters' name is Brian.
There is a lot of Gary Stu going on here.
My dream herd would be Luna and Zecora as alpha and beta... then, Ditsy Doo, and Lyra...then, ????