Celestia thought with all the movies that Luna had made her watch with her that dealt with portals, wormholes, or what have you that it would be as easy as going in one place and coming out another. It certainly wasn’t anything like it was in the movies.
Instead, Celestia felt as if she was falling down a well, which in every right is pretty scary. Not only that, but she felt something change inside her. Her bone structure, her DNA perhaps. Of course, the sensation was only momentary as she passed through an area of blinding light and next thing she knew, she had fallen onto a rather smooth surface.
She felt slightly dizzy as she heard a voice call out to her. Then she recognized it as her sister’s. “Tia, are you alright?” Celestia opened her eyes and at first she thought maybe she was seeing things but there was a blue muzzled face in front of her with short ears and bright eyes…her sister’s eyes.
“Luna…” She took a moment to register everything. “…You’re a pony now.”
Luna suddenly grinned and squealed with delight, something Celestia hadn’t heard from her in a long time. “I know! I look adorable right!? And look at this mane! Is it not fabulous!?” Indeed, her…mane didn’t look like a typical mane at all, but instead it had…wait was she seeing the cosmos in there? “And these wings! Twilight Sparkle was right all along!”
Celestia tried to get up, and then realized as she looked down that she too no longer had hands but two front hooves. “This is…interesting…I’m surprised I’m not freaking out.”
“Because you look marvelous sister,” Luna beamed. “Take a peek for yourself.”
Celestia looked behind and saw that there was a mirror, presumably the mirror that brought them here. She looked into the reflection and saw she too was now a pony, a rather large one with a horn and wings…what did Sunset call them? Alicorns? “…How is my mane doing that?”
“I suppose it must be Equestrian magic,” Luna guessed. “But now that I think about it…where are we exactly?”
Suddenly, the door on the other side of the room opened and a smaller pony with a purple body and matching mane peeked inside and upon seeing the two ponies rushed inside. She too had a horn and wings. “Princess Celestia, Princess Luna!” the mare asked. “What are you doing here?”
Celestia and Luna glanced at one another before Celestia leaned over to her sister and whispered, “I think that’s Twilight. This world’s Twilight.”
“Ah…” Luna whispered back. “So…how should we play this?”
“Just act normal…” Celestia then looked up to Twilight and beamed. “Hello…Twilight. We certainly didn’t mean to surprise you.”
“Oh no it’s fine it’s just-” She then paused as she looked at the two curiously. “Wait…how come you didn’t use the front door?” She then glanced behind her towards the mirror and then gasped as it all clicked together. “Wait a minute…are you-?”
“W-Wait!” Luna said as she backed away slowly. “Please don’t be upset, we were just curious and-”
“Upset?” Twilight asked. Her face then broke out into a grin. “Are you kidding, this is wonderful!” The young princess went up and hugged both of them. “I can’t believe you two are here! Sunset didn’t say anything about you two coming at all!”
“Well, Luna was apparently bored and came up with the idea of coming over here,” Celestia said simply. She then looked around the room. “This is…interesting architecture.”
“Oh! Yes, this is actually my castle,” Twilight said, blushing slightly. “Tada…!”
“Very impressive,” Luna noted. “Again, I hope you don’t mind. Since you’ve come to our world we figured it couldn’t hurt if we came to learn a little bit of yours.”
“I’d be honored,” Twilight said as she bowed. She then paused and giggled. “Sorry…kind of a habit since you both share such a resemblance to both-” She then gasped and this time she looked worried. “Wait, no this isn’t good at all!”
The two sisters glanced again at one another. “I beg your pardon?” Celestia asked.
“Princess Celestia and Princess Luna are up in Canterlot…” Twilight started pacing. “But if anypony sees you here they’re going to start talking and everyone will get confused and think-” She then stopped in her tracks. “No, this won’t do. I’ll have to-”
Suddenly there was a knock on the door which almost made Twilight. “Twilight?” Another unicorn poked her head inside and her eyes widened as she saw the three ponies. “Oh! Princess Celestia and Luna, I didn’t realize you two were here.”
“Oh Starlight!” Twilight said rather loudly. “Yes um…yeah these two wanted to surprise me because um…” She glanced at the two ponies for help.
“Because…we wanted to celebrate Twilight’s birthday,” Celestia said. “You know, a whole…royal thing.”
“But…her birthday isn’t for another month?” Starlight glanced at Twilight with a confused look. “Right?”
“W-Well we may be…very busy next month,” Luna added. “Plus we need to discuss…discussions about…pony-related stuff.”
“Yep!” Twilight said with a forced grin. “It’s kind of top secret though so…”
Starlight looked at the three alicorns and her eyes narrowed slightly. “You three are hiding something…”
“Are we?” Luna said darkly. Funny how Luna could make the temperature in the room drop…and apparently there was a storm brewing outside.
“…Well okay then, I’ll just leave you three to it then,” Starlight said as she left the room.
Twilight sighed with relief. “That’s Starlight Glimmer, my former student,” she explained.
“Former student?” Celestia then smiled. “I see you’ve been busy lately.”
“Oh you have no idea,” Twilight replied. “But Sunset tells me things too. I heard camp was fun.”
“It was…interesting,” Luna said. “Well except that we ended up rebuilding that dock about five times…”
“Anyway…” Celestia rolled her eyes. “You were having a moment before?”
“Oh!” Twilight started fidgeting again. “Yes, I need to get a letter out and have the princesses here. I mean, if you’re okay with meeting your counterparts.”
“Actually, I think we’d be most interested,” Celestia said with an amused look. “Do we really look alike?”
“Absolutely…well except for the crown and royal gear,” Twilight said. “But don’t worry, I’m sure they’ll be just as excited to meet you. Be right back, need to get that letter out!” She then rushed out of the room.
It was quiet for a few moments as the two sisters looked around the room. “You know…this place almost reminds me of Crystal Prep,” Luna said. “But look at the walls…I know these ponies have special talents but this doesn’t look man…er…pony-made.”
“Knowing this world, it probably just built itself,” Celestia chuckled slightly.
“Now that’s just ridiculous.”
Twilight was currently in her study, trying to keep her quill still as she wrote her letter. “This is the first time anyone’s ever come to this world from the other side!” she thought gleefully. “It would be nice if Sunset were to come back as well.” She then refocused on her letter.
Dear Princesses Celestia and Luna,
I know this letter is rather short notice but something amazing has just happened! I believe I told you about your human counterparts right? Well, as fate would have it, they just showed up in my castle. Don’t worry though, they just wanted to visit I promise.
Anyway, I know this is a lot to ask but perhaps you two could come visit real quick and speak to them? They’ve shown an interest in meeting you and I would consider this an opportunity to understand one another much better. I hope to hear from you two soon!
Sincerely,
Princess Twilight
Twilight then rolled up the parchment and almost skipped out of the room. “Oh Spike!”
Meanwhile in Canterlot, Princess Celestia was sitting on her throne drinking some hot tea and looking quite bored. What was going to be a busy day suddenly turned into a free day: the Duke and Duchess of Trottingham had postponed their meeting with the princesses due to a family member suddenly becoming sick and once again Prince Rutherford sent in a last second letter about postponing their trade summit with Canterlot. He didn’t specify, only saying in the letter, “DEAR PRINCESS, VERY BUSY. WILL MEET LATER. SORRY, PRINCE RUTHERFORD”. Celestia always favored free days but the question was where she was going to go.
“A day at the spa sounds wonderful,” she thought. “But there’s always so many ponies there and I just want my alone time…” Well, she could kick everyone out…but that was more Luna’s thing than hers.
Speaking of which, her sister had just entered the throne room, a similar expression on her face. “Something wrong sister?” Celestia asked.
“Tia, I want you to be honest with me…am I really that strict?” Luna asked.
“That…would depend on who you ask,” Celestia replied. “What happened?”
“Oh, I was just with the Lunar Guard…don’t get me wrong they’re very loyal and follow every order to a T,” Luna said, sighing slightly. “But those poor ponies give me the thousand yard stare and they go so stiff I’m worried they’re not getting enough blood to the head.”
Celestia smiled slightly. “They want to impress you, dear sister, because they’re aware you’re…um…very ‘old school’.”
Luna snorted. “I’ve done better with becoming more…what’s the word? Mainstream? Yes. I know I ask a lot but…I’m not sure how I can compromise without losing their respect.”
“Just be open with them Luna…if they’re as loyal as you say, they’ll listen,” Celestia smiled. Suddenly, a green flame floated into the castle and upon reaching Celestia’s throne, transformed into a letter. “Hm…a letter from Twilight I see.” She then opened it and read through it. Her eyes widened slightly. “Oh my…”
“What is it?” Luna asked, looking slightly concerned.
“You’ll want to read this; it’s addressed to you as well.” Luna took the letter and read through it herself, soon having the same expression.
“Well this is…most surprising,” Luna said. “What shall we do?”
“This is definitely a once in a lifetime opportunity,” Celestia pondered. She then shrugged. “I’ve got nothing better to do. You?”
“Nope. Let us pay our friends a visit then.”
Celestia then got herself some parchment, a quill, and ink and began writing back.
Dear Princess Twilight,
This is most interesting news. Of course we’ll come and say hello. I suppose you probably don’t want us to use the front entrance. Very well, we’ll be there right away. Let this letter be a two-minute warning.
Sincerely,
Princesses Celestia and Luna
“Two minutes?” Luna asked as Celestia sent off the letter. “Sister, are you trying to kill the poor mare?”
Celestia smirked slightly. “Twilight will learn eventually that once you’re a princess, you’re fair game to all sorts of shenanigans…”
Luna stared at her sister with slight concern. "And they say I was the evil one!
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You spelled her name wrong.
Get out.
But seriously.
Yes. Shenanigins.
Celestia, there is a fine line between shenanigans and downright cruelty. You crossed it.
Great story, I like where this is going
Do you plan on writing a certain amount? Or are you just going to write as long as ideas come?
8158287 EQG Celestia and Luna performing Dancing Queen by Abba.
So they did reappeared as Alicorns. Guess if you want to cause a maximum of shenanigans it is require.
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I'm going to write it to the very (comedic) end.
Right, new item on the "ways to destroy the world in ten minutes or less" list.
Another good chapter can't wait
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THE NEXT PERSON THAT SAYS SHENANIGANS IS GONNA GET WHIPPED!
8158696 SNAGINANEHS
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... You're lucky I like your profile pic.
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No I mean...did they get wigs?
looks like a fun read so far. get a track
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Well, this looks loke it could lead to some amusing she—
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Er, hijinks. Yes. Amusing hijinks. Clearly what I was going to say.
But yeah, looking forward to seeing where you go with this. Also, I feel I should note that Prince Rutherford now has an imperfect record of attendance. A coup may be imminent.
8158724 I guess so
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Oh my~
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SPOILERS MAN! Just kidding that won't happen.
It would be, but sadly, Hasbro is run by monkeys with typewriters more than half the time.
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Hasbro's attitude toward it's shows is both a blessing AND a curse. Their basic attitude seems to be "So long as it sells product we don't care." Meaning the writers have a greater freedom to make show as as good or as bad as they want, and yes their are limits and corporate mandates to follow but compare the horror show that was the G3 animated specials to FIM and remember Hasbor has about the same opinion of them. They just want to sell toys and will pander to any people with money to spend.
8158906 Honestly, I stopped watching the show when S7 came on and bored me into a catatonic state and I won't even give Hasbro a cent of my money for any toys, (at least through retail) so I'm not sure why I'm still caring. Maybe it's just that they've really stepped up their game in terms of quality that it's sad they don't just go all the way.
wooooo!!! love it!!!!!
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Well, there's an episode coming up with Luna and Celestia switching cutie marks. I don't think THAT's gonna be boring...
And we get to see Applejack react to learning she's part pear.
And we finally get to see yakyakistan! The slow beginning is a facade! They're saving the best for last!
The Principals took the transition better than I expected. Well, at least they had some forewarning compared to Twilight's first trip through. Just hope neither of them start playing around with the sun or moon accidentally or it could set off a panic. Well, let's see how they handle flight first before messing around with the environment.
8159072 That's.... cool... I guess?
Oh this'll be a fun meeting. Will EG Luna show Pony Luna the wonder of Video Games? Will EG Tia ask how she looks so good at a few millenia old?
Will Twilight go into a catatonic panic attack from the 2 minute warning?
Find out next time!
This is going to be so much fun.
8158959 I still enjoy the show, it has far more hits than misses. DHX actually gives a damm about making a quality show. Hasbro may not care much as long as it makes money, we got lucky the animation studio cares.
This is great, shenanigans shall ensue! I'm so ready for the next chapter.
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*every word to a T (Maybe replace "word" with "order"?)
Hmm.
I really want to like this, but it's incredibly rushed, has terrible pacing, and needs a few more editing passes. Also has some glaring logic issues, but I won't go there just now.
Tracking, for now. I do suggest you slow down the pace, put more effort into future chapters, and maybe go back and fix these first chapters?
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Shenanigans. Shenanigans everywhere.
I'm not sorry
I have to do this:
8159335 Ya know... can't help but finding myself agreeing with that assessment to an extent.
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I'm enjoying this so far. Definitely worth keeping in the Fav-log
I'm enjoying the plot quite a bit so far, but I can't help but feel that some of your own voice is bleeding into how the characters speak in the story. When I read some of the lines it doesn't seem like Celestia or Luna or Twilight talking. For example:
Twilight tends to be formal, articulate, and cheery in her letters to the princesses. While the principals did in fact "literally" just show up, the word doesn't sound right coming from Twilight in this context. Literally is a heavily overused word, one that a bookworm Twilight would most likely avoid except when it was necessary. Celestia and Luna also have somewhat different speech patterns, yet here they speak very similarly to one another.
In summation, it is important to consider not just what a character might say, but how that character would go about saying it.
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Ugh, is that it? A T? Noted.
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I gotcha. I'm just surprised you took interest in it!
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Celestia and Luna to me are kind of a new challenge so I'll look through everything again before I continue on.
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You will be.
Just checking here... Isn't the term "shortcoming" a noun describing a flaw? I'd guess the word "unexpected" might fit better.
...I always understood the Shenanigans to be an honored and ancient Irish family. Let us not disparage that fine name.
Yes, I'm just kidding. Maybe.
Perhaps I have a few shortcomings of my own to confess?
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.......Yeah.
I don't know words!
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Words are slippery and devious creatures indeed--why d'you suppose lawyers and politicians love them so?
and they i was the evil one < you forgot 'said' also good story so far. But i call bulldodo that the principals are alicorns.. BUUUT i kinda think know where this is going. :D
Prepare for a precipitous, pedantic and picky presentation of parts that perhaps pranced past your proofreading:
A space goes after an ellipsis.
"Ta-da". Hyphenated.
"Are you kidding? This is wonderful!" The first part is a question.
“Yes, um… yeah, these two wanted to surprise me because, um… ” Twilight is stammering. Pause the cadence accordingly.
“… well, okay then. I’ll just leave you three to it, then,” Starlight said as she left the room." A lot of sentences like this one are missing commas, which are important so that it doesn't feel like someone is talking in one long incredibly unbroken sentence moving from topic to topic so that no one has the chance to interrupt as it can be really quite hypnotic (like this).
May I offer to proofread and correct in this regard? Not because I want to rag on the story, but to help polish it a bit more.
Thanks for this update.
Just a missed word.
Other than that, this story is fun!!
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The use of said and other markers of speaking, are not always required as long as it's clear who's speaking. This really helps if you don't want to disrupt the flow of actions taken while the characters are speaking. Sometimes removing anything but the dialogue itself for back and forth between 2 characters. Writing is an amazing thing. Lots of exceptions.
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I've...never had a proofreader before so I'm not quite sure how it all works. But knowing me, I probably do need one so sure!
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From what I've heard, it's going to be 'Starlight Glimmer fixes everything, even for Celestia and Luna'. Really wish someone'd restrain Jim Miller and his blatant overuse of Starlight like someone's bad OC. She's not supposed to be the main character. It's even canon that Starlight is more powerful than Twilight. Which is freaking ridiculous.
"Obvious copy of main character with shitty backstory replaces main character, is stronger than main character. Now fixes problems of what amounts to Equestria's deities, who look bad for having another petty squabble not fitting of people more than ten centuries old."
Eugh. Really hope it's not gonna be this bad.
**say**
8160426 no i mean in the middle of that sentence. The dialogue should have been "And they said I am the Evil one. " the last quote by Luna
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I'm hoping for hilarity to ensue.