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Just a guy who likes writing and reading some pony fanfiction.

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It has been one year since Starlight Glimmer graduated and ventured out on her own to teach others the friendship lessons she learned as Princess Twilight's personal student. Now, unexpectedly, she's coming back to Ponyville for a visit, and everypony is excited about it. Well, everypony that is, except Spike. But why?

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 64 )

I wonder. Does Spike feel like Starlight did to him, what Starlight felt Sunburst did to her?

I think Dark Storm is taken and so is Mauve Avenger.

this start gave me weird vibes, but I will track this fic and see how it goes

8142776 Yay! :pinkiehappy: What kind of "weird vibes" did it give you? :rainbowhuh:

8142794 it made me remember a series of an artist, I think is called the adventures of glim glam and friends or something like it. the thing is, Trixie eating in the crystal castle as if were her home sounds funny and at the same time weird for me.

8142827 Everything will be explained as the story goes on. I actually thought about explaining some things in this chapter, but didn't want it to be bogged down by so much exposition.

I got that NSFW feeling from this. We have some good Spike X Starlight stories. But none where she does something bad or wrong sexually to/with Spike. This maybe the one.

Waiting to see what happens!:pinkiehappy:

8142865 I refuse to imply whether or not you're on the right track because I don't want to ruin the story. Maybe things ended on a bad note for them before she left, like maybe they got into an argument or something. I think the bigger question is, what in Equestria is Trixie doing spending time with Twilight and Spike!?

8142942 Good. That makes the story more interesting, but that "mature" tag and when, Trixie, nuzzled him that made him tense up was a pretty good give away to a possible bad touch moment.

As for, Trixie, spending time with Twilight and Spike? Easy!
1. Twilight and Trixie are dating.
2. Twilight let Trixie move in because of friendship! And then they started to date!:pinkiehappy:

Either way, the next chapters should be very interesting!:moustache:

8142975 We have a Trixie shipper here! :pinkiehappy: But, sadly, no, you're wrong. And maybe Spike just isn't comfortable around Trixie?

8143085 Than friendship. Just want to wait and see what's going to happen. Hopefully it want be long.:moustache:

8143099 I'm working on the third chapter now. I need to edit the second one.

Did somebody give Spike presents again because he seems to have become an angsty teenager

8144046 In truth, I was worried that I made him act out of character.

I don't care what Starlight did, what the plot is, how short the first chapter is, what it's rated, or which other characters are involved. Spike and Trixie are interacting! And in a story that wasn't written by a 10-year-old who gets fluctuating grades on his English homework!

8145005 Uh . . . okay. I'm glad that made you happy.

8149698 What gave you that idea? :rainbowhuh:

This go-cart bit is from some other cartoon, but I just can't remember which.:rainbowhuh:

Good chapter. And the mystery continues!:moustache:

8150181 I remember "The Cart Before the Ponies."

Tipsy Spike acts exactly like I do when I get drunk :moustache:

Excellent chapter, can't wait for more oooooo so excited:pinkiehappy:

Im curious, i get this whole mystery novel vibe when i read this, and i consistently feel like starlight has been doing something secret and sneaky in the shadows. I mean, spikes lack of memory. He constantly asks if other people remember the moments they shared, and the question line to daimond and silver makes no sense. Then his general displeasure towards starlight, like yea i get it, she left, but even still, that wouldnt cause his displeasure to last a while year! characters come and go all the time. Its just a little too strange to me. Although, this may just be a regular old family story, but its just so, unusual.

Even still, its a solid 7/10 so far! Keep up the good work!

Unless we're being led astray... the answer here seems clear, that Starlight... does things with foals, and Spike has either repressed his memories of her or she has done it for him with magic.

But... Maybe there is either something else, or more to it than that.

“Now, Spike, if you don’t mind, I think I’ll toss your salad for you.”

I totally lost it after reading this.:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh:

“I was thinking about asking her to permanently stay instead of going back to her old village. Would you be all right with her being around more?”

I wonder how the ponies that actually live in that village feel about Starlight not coming back?

“You know, Trixie, sometimes I think you like me a little too much.”

Come to think about it, other than those who live in the castle, who else does Trixie hang out with?:twilightoops:

“The track will start in the Ponyville square, go through the Everfree Forest, through--

Have they lost their minds??:flutterrage:

Starlight sighed. “You don’t think he’s still mad at me, do you?” She turned to her former mentor. “Did he ever tell you why?”

Actually, Spike didn't act all that mad at Starlight in this chapter. Hell, he can't even remember anything that happened with her before she left.:applejackunsure:

“Starlight, the two of you were very close when you were here, and then you just up and left without so much as a goodbye. It’s bound to leave some scars.”

There we go. Isn't that what Starlight thought Sunburst did to her?

For some reason, as good as the chapter was, it didn't seem to fit with what we have read already. And why is the chapter titled 'Diamond Tiara's Earliest Memories'?

Is Starlight a pedophile? I'm curious to see were this is going.

8159851 Thanks!

8160055 Thank you. Though, I personally feel like the pacing is beginning to suffer and the story needs to pick up. Everything will make sense as the story goes on. But how does none of it, especially Spike's question to Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon, not make sense? Explain it to me.

8160221 Probably something else.

8160253

I totally lost it after reading this.:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh:

I'm glad you got the joke.

I wonder how the ponies that actually live in that village feel about Starlight not coming back?

Interesting idea. Maybe this will need to be explored in a later chapter.

Come to think about it, other than those who live in the castle, who else does Trixie hang out with?:twilightoops:

Nopony! Trixie is infatuated with Starlight and wants to spend every waking moment with her love -- I mean, best friend. Yeah, best friend. That's totally what I meant to say!

Have they lost their minds??:flutterrage:

Yeah, even I admit that was stupid. What in Celestia's name was I thinking!?

Actually, Spike didn't act all that mad at Starlight in this chapter. Hell, he can't even remember anything that happened with her before she left.:applejackunsure:

But Starlight and Twilight don't know that. And maybe Spike expressed anger at her when she left and Twilight told her in a letter.

There we go. Isn't that what Starlight thought Sunburst did to her?

True, but Twilight did the same thing and Moon Dancer was pissed off at her for it. Maybe she'd get along with Starlight in that regard.

For some reason, as good as the chapter was, it didn't seem to fit with what we have read already.

How so?

And why is the chapter titled 'Diamond Tiara's Earliest Memories'?

Because I honestly couldn't come up with anything else. Sorry.

8160803

True, but Twilight did the same thing and Moon Dancer was pissed off at her for it.

You know?:twilightoops: I forgot about that.:facehoof:

How so?

In the prior two chapters, we saw that Spike clearly did not want anything to do with Starlight.:rainbowdetermined2: Now, he can't wait for her to spend time with him?:rainbowhuh:

Because I honestly couldn't come up with anything else. Sorry.

'Memories and Reconnections'?

Thank you for the response.:twilightsmile:

This feels like this may get real dark real fast at one point. Been on the edge of my seat waiting for it for 3 chapters now.

But who knows maybe there is a non dark just emotional reason.

8160951

You know?:twilightoops: I forgot about that.:facehoof:

How? :rainbowhuh: It was one of the best episodes of season 5.

In the prior two chapters, we saw that Spike clearly did not want anything to do with Starlight.:rainbowdetermined2: Now, he can't wait for her to spend time with him?:rainbowhuh:

The first two chapters have been edited. And Spike might have just been saying that to get Trixie off his case.

'Memories and Reconnections'?

I honestly didn't consider that. Thanks.

Thank you for the response.:twilightsmile:

You're welcome, mate.

8161095 I agree that the pacing has been rather slow. Time to pick up the pacing!

8160803 In retrospect, i believe my wording may have been incorrect what i mean is, im confused as to their relevancy of the plot. They seem rather tanget in nature, like little side bits that have no real end or meaning, and i was merely speculating on whether or not they may be of any relevance to the story, also, thanks for replying haha,
Sincerely,
MornomgStarTheMage

8161248 Oh, okay. These two will be featured later on in the story. Sorry if I didn't make that clear enough.

Trixie chuckled. “And that’s why you love me, Spikey-wikey.” She leaned forward and nuzzled her cheek against his.

This is the greatest line ever typed by any fanfiction writer.

Spike shoved her away.

Dang it, Spike.

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I was writing this story for a contest, but life got in the way and I haven't had much time to work on it. The deadline is on the 19th, and I doubt that I'll be able to get this story done in only four days.

8234047
Well, that's disapointing. I wanted to see where this was going. Is there any possibility you could finish it anyway, even if it it's not in time for the contest?

8235728
Well, it's marked as cancelled. I was concerned.

8235769 Well, I was going to cancel it, but since you're so passionate about it, I figure I can continue it.

I think I might be gay. Right now I just feel so confused. I don’t know what I’m supposed to do. What do I do?

Where... the bloody hell... did that come from? I was starting to think that Starlight might have touch Spike inappropriately like she did Silver Spoon. This comment? What does this have to do with Starlight back in town?

8286868 Ironically enough, your avatar fits your comment perfectly. Don't worry. It'll make sense as the story goes on.

8286868
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Maybe Starlight touched Spike and he didn't like it. Now that he doesn't like it he concluded it mustbe because he is gay. Elsewise he would not be disturbed by the idea of a girl touching him.

It's still possible that something different is going on, but by now I think it would be a bit and switch.

Comment posted by MyCutieMarkIsTellingMe1 deleted Jul 21st, 2017

While the fic is going at a good pace, the only thing that confuses me is the relationship. Because I can't tell if it's going along with the canon relationship, or a different one. The line in Spike's flashback ...while Auntie Starlight... threw me off completely as I wasn't sure about the relationship. I can kinda see Twilight being the mother of Spike, Trixie being a BFF sort of thing with Starlight, or something like that. Really hope this gets explained as the story progresses. But for now, lemme just quickly track this.

Did Starlight literally grow a pair and rape Spike or something?
...Or did he just write that in his diary because of the play he watched?
Edit: if autocorrect could calm down, that would be great.

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Edit: if autocorrect could calm down, that would be great.

:rainbowlaugh:

Given the context, it feels like this needs the Non-con tag

God this is so good but oof starlight went nuts.

Okay. It's been awhile since this was last updated, but a lot has certainly happened in this chapter.

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