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LukeTheMercenary


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William was a country man. A true hunter. His father helped him kill his first deer when he was twelve. He claimed his father's forest when his father succumbed to lung cancer, and treasured his father's rifle...which was also passed to him in his will. His father always carried a powerful weapon: The Barrett .50 BMG, whenever they hunted. It was simply a treasure to William, something he never left his house without. It was this rifle he used to obtain food and money. He would take or sell meat and hide from his kills to obtain money and survive in the woods.

One day, his land gets foreclosed due to his inability to pay his mortgage. This added to the deep depression he suffered ever since his father died. He decided to end it all. He stuck a suppressor on his rifle, took all the ammo his father gave to him in his backpack, and went into the forest to take his own life. However, after stepping into a puddle, he is warped into the Everfree Forest. After looking through the scope of his rifle, he spots a lonely orange foal. He decides to keep an eye on her from the Everfree, making sure she's safe.

Scootaloo, however, hasn't seen him...but she knows he's out there to protect her. To watch her. To make sure she's safe.

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At least the ending was a good one. *Sniff*

I liked that great job.

A beautiful story! You should make a sequel.

Yes, a beautiful story.

Overkill with a 50 BMG to hunt with.

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That was my thinking.

What I love about Orphanloo and Scootadopt is that someone or somepony is watching over her. Is it me or did I get a "Mysterious Stranger" vibe from William?

Goddamn it! You hit me in the feels again! This was just too sweet!!

8143525 As in the Fallout Mysterious Stranger? If so, yes! I did base William's actions off of the Mysterious Stranger from the Fallout series! :twilightblush:

8143816 So, does this mean that Scootaloo became the Mysterious Stranger's daughter?

8143830 Hm...good question...

I'll leave that for your imagination...

Who knows? Maybe I'll write a crossover fic about the Mysterious Stranger sometime... :trixieshiftright:

A sequel is being made currently, it's just taking me some time...

I can see like a many chapter story here yet there are only two.

Why is that?

Good job though.

Me: "guardians from afar? Let's have a look see".

~5 minutes in~

Eyes: *twitch*
Me: wuh?
Eyes: *mists up.*
Me: damnit eyes! We talked about this. No more emotional outbursts, we are giving feelings the cold turkey this weekend.
Eyes: *reluctantly dries up*

~end of story~

Me: *cries in the corner*

I just can’t
“I never leave home with out my 50 cal”
He hunts deer with a ant-material rifle
I want to try to read it but I just can’t

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This guy's got the right idea.

Me: hmm
Emotions: damn.......
Brain: NO CRYING....ALRIGHT!!!!!!!
Emotions: ok
end of story
Me: SADNESS IS OVERWHEMING LOGIC....."SOBS UNCONTROLLABLY"!!!!

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Lol came across the story and I was kind of thinking the same. Like wtf is going to be left of the deer to sell? It'll be blown into little chunks of hamburger that you won't get anything good from it. But I'll give it a try lol

man this is funny, i know the author didnt intend it to be but i just gotta tell yall why this is so damn funny


Firstly yall dont understand just how heavy a rifle that size is there is no way a kid could reliably and safely handle a rifle just that fucking b e e g

It doesnt matter that theyre rubber rounds, theres so much damn powder behind it that as soon as the bullet makes contact with anything it'll instantly LIQUIFY (fun fact, the M82 Barret has a moving barrel that essentially flings itself back into the gun because of just how much goddamn r e c o i l there is)

not to even mention the fact that the only chance in hell a M82 Barret has a chance of being quiet is if the surpressor is as big and long as [Insert "My Dick" joke here] and if it was modified to be Single-Action because if not the gas will blow-back the action/bolt as it was built to do to make it semi-auto and if the gas blows back the bolt all of a sudden all that noise you tried to suppress with that absolute fucking C H O D E of a suppressor just escapes through the now open bolt, and because pony ears, the second you fire that damn thing everyone in a 5 mile radius will be wondering "Dafuq was that and why did it come from the everfree?" (and those less than 1 mile away will get tinnitis without proper hearing protection)

on an unrelated note heres a handy guide on how to easily stop human threats that aren't immune to magic:
Step 1. be unicorn
Step 2. learn transfiguration/transformation magic
Step 3. transform human into brick and either keep the gun or dispose of it via aformentioned transformation/transfiguration

Next bit includes spoilers for this story and it's sequel, and as much as im giving the author shit, i like the two stories and still recommend you read it because of the unintentional f u n n i s


Right so:
- Diamond Tiara's well... Tiara would either shatter or it would shatter along with the point of contact liquifying
- Because pony ears, there is (again) no way in hell even with the suppressor and single-action modification that all of ponyville wouldn't hear the CRACK of rubber liquifying against wood or the shattering of glass
- There is no way in hell that Spoiled would grow such a pair as to dare kidnap scoots whilst she was under the protection of the guy with a FUCKING A N T I - M A T E R I A L RIFLE


Thats all i can think of atm that wasnt stated already

With all this being said, dont let this discourage you Author Lad, because as i said before, i find this absolutely butt-fuck hilarious

(fictions a wonderful place where anything can happen, just enjoy mah bois)

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