I'm NOT a Mary Sue!

WyngsTriumphant #1 · Apr 30th, 2017 · 4 · ·

Well... that was interesting.

Hmm... I'm not 100% sure how to take this. Part of me just wants to accept the joke of her being named "Mary Sue" and the confusion ensuing, but at the same time, another part of me wants to dig deeper. A part that wants to see the satire hidden here. A part that insists that there is a greater message to the story. A part that believes this to be some kind of metaphysical commentary on the nature of characters and their deep complexities, how they serve as a façade, and how that façade is sometimes only a façade in itself, a twist to twists, a subtle jab that you aren't sure whether it is a jab, a feint, or a misinterpreted gesture of kindness, a reversing of the plot and theme in such a subtle way that a reader must truly delve beyond the text and unto the idea itself, unraveling it bit by bit like a ball of yarn to find what hides in the center.

And another part of me wants to just get some sleep.

Either way, good job. Simple (or is it?), humorous (or is it?), and lighthearted (or is it?). Thumbs up from me.

Flyingninjafish

Flyingninjafish #2 · Apr 30th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Reply

8131111
OK, so, um, don't quite know how to top that, so... Imma just say this was pretty good.

HiddenMaster

HiddenMaster #3 · Apr 30th, 2017 · · ·

Reply

This wasn't too bad, in all honesty. The beginning could have used more setup, and you skimped on description a bit much for my taste, but with the setup you have I can almost see Pinkie taking the mane 6 on a detour to enlist the aid of a mary sue and confusing matters thoroughly when she turns out to be just Mary Sue.

mastermenthe

mastermenthe #4 · May 1st, 2017 · · ·

Reply

oh god that roast pun brick joke was perfect!

i was so certain they would walk away and she would pull out some power to fix the fire or start the garden or something, but tea is far better!

B_Munro

B_Munro #5 · May 1st, 2017 · · ·

Reply

Mary Sue's superpower is clearly stayin' chill.

Cuber Snuggles

Cuber Snuggles #6 · May 1st, 2017 · · ·

Reply

I want more of this in my life. Maybe a Gary Stue next? Or an Anti Sue?

Aced4Remakes

Aced4Remakes #7 · May 1st, 2017 · 1 · ·

Reply

I just wanted her to sneeze and the house fixing itself afterwards.
But sadly, that would have defeated the point of the story...

Toggle Switch

Toggle Switch #8 · May 2nd, 2017 · · 1 ·

Reply

When I came up with my oc (my second, pony oc rather than my first flailing attempt that ended up with a tiger in ponyville) I made him intentionally boring. He's an electrician, he just works a normal job in Canterlot fixing streetlights and stuff. I can definitely empathize with Mary here, because everyone else assumed from the name he was some mad genius inventor type who could fix anything with a device.(He can't by the way.) I love this fic, and I love the issue it addresses. Or maybe I'm just reading into it way too much.

Windy0

Windy0 #9 · May 3rd, 2017 · · ·

Reply

This makes me what to see a fic with Mary Sue from this one, going along her daily routine.

Ultra-the-HedgeToaster

Ultra-the-HedgeToaster #10 · May 14th, 2017 · 3 · ·

Reply

Wow. I'm almost expecting that poorly named pony to just... snap.

Like this:

Mary turned at the sound of her mailbox, just in time to see the mailpony fly off.
"Oh, her tail's on fire." She observed. "I guess that's my fault too. Oh well, better check the mail."
She walked over to the burning mailbox, and stuck her hoof in.
The heat licking at her fur stung a bit, but she just couldn't bother to care anymore.
"Bills... bills... bills... advertisement... Oh, what's this?"
"Dear Ms. Sue, since we were unable to reach you on Thursday, 20th, 5:16 a.m., your mail-order package has been returned to sender, Sirup Street 29, Baltimare."
Something snapped.
Mary Sue walked back into her burning house, depositing the mail on what had once been the desk counter, and walked back out. Who needed fur anyway. At least she was getting a sun tan out of it.
Her mane and tail now a charred black, her skin an angry red, Mary Sue trotted off towards the center of town.
"Pinkie Pie!" She yelled, her expression slipping into a deranged grin. "I've changed my mind! I'll help!"
~~~
"I can't believe she just... walked up to the Bearosaurus and... and... and let it eat her!" Twilight gestured frantically.
"I know, right? That was so cool!" Rainbow Dash gushed. At the other's glares, she settled back to the ground. "Cool, but completely insane. Of course."
"Yeah!" Pinkie bounced excitedly. "She really showed that monster! ...Could've used a good one-liner, though. Oh! Ohh! 'Warning, Choking Hazard, this pony is not suitable for ages under three' or 'I hope you like spicy food, 'cause I am too hot for you'!"
"Uhm, I think it had something to do with her second degree burns?" Fluttershy pointed out. "I'm not sure, but I think Bearosauruses don't like cooked meat..."
"Well... can't say Ah'd wanna be the pony to clean up all that monster-vomit."
"Don't remind me." Rarity looked about ready to vomit herself. "It... it was everywhere!"
"I think we're all losing track of what's important, here!" Twilight stomped her hooves. She was about to say more, but the doors to the waiting room opening made her pause.
The two figures that stepped instantly resheduled Twilight's rant.
"Princess Celestia! Princess Luna! You're here!"
"We came as soon as we could when we received your letter, Twilight."
"Now, pray tell, where might we find this brave mare who all but sacrificed herself for thy own sakes? We will make sure she gets all the attention she deserves!"

Somewhere in the hospital, a pony-shaped bundle of bandages screamed.