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HeartBeat


Well, let me start by saying that I will mainly be writing love stories! Being that it is my favorite genre of literature, I find it much easier to write. Of course I will get out of the comfy zone!

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I thought that every relationship would last for my lifetime. But it always gets thrown back at my face. Daizy dumped me in the cold streets, and I felt the need for a drink to calm my nerves. But when I arrive at the club for a drink, I meet a lovely mare named Vinyl Scratch. Putting my other relationship behind me, I think that there is something that can really work between us. Am I wrong?

-First Person Vinal Scratch & OC fic.

Chapters (8)
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Comments ( 45 )

It's a nice start, a little date rape-y (the part with Daizy and and her 'date'), the syntax and formatting are good and the writing doesn't have any errors or at least none I can see. I wouldn't expect a huge wave of trackers or readers yet, just because their isn't enough bait on the lure. Like I said it's a nice start and as long as it doesn't get too dark or involve Dubstep, I'd like to see where this goes.

Peace Out.

A interesting story. I will give this story a thumbs up and a favorite and wait a eternal wait for the next chapter.

Hmm. I can sense Daizy becomeing super jealous after she realizes what she did and how the OC ended up after.

884709
Now, now... Lets not jump to conclusions, my friend. :moustache:

Nice.:scootangel: Now I'm wondering if we will see his ex or hear about Vinyls last relationships.:rainbowderp:

this is comming along quite nicely

Karma's a bitch, isn't it Daizy? :rainbowlaugh:

this reminds me of something... though I can't put my hoof on it. hmmmm:trixieshiftright:

897999
You do? That's not good. I don't want to sound like I'm copying someone else's work :twilightoops:

898171 just seems weird, I have never read anything like this, but I have a strange sense of deja vue

This is a good story. A VERY good story actually. Keep up the good work!
And because of you're effort's I will give you a 'stache :moustache:

(Reads the ending of this chapter)
Daaaaaawwww! that right there just made my heart to mealt :heart:. I just cant seem to get enough of these cliche moment's. Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

My heart just exploded. TOTALLY WORTH IT

883089 Yeah I can agree with him, no mistakes to be found. 885017 To clarify any questions, No I am not going to Costa Rica, well at least not any time soon. So, I will be able to work with you anyways.

HOLY SHEET no mistakes... or this dubstep was too loud, and messed up my editing skills. Whatever. GOOD JOB!

I feel so great to have been missed so much. I hated being away too, Heartbeat. :3

Ok, great job. The ending had elements of suspense, and just the right touch of romance. These are what make your stories so great. You don't go to big on the romance, and you always play the suspense card right. :D plus, you don't have them all repetitive. Ever single one is unique. Great job brosef! /)


Flares special somepony is either octavia or fake:scootangel:

Wow mate this is an awesome short sweat story. nice one

Thank you HeartBeat for making such a awesome story!

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOT THE END! MOAR

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:fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad:

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Id love to, but how would I continue it?:duck:

940887 What ever happened to Flare and Octavia's realization that she shoulda taken him up on his offer? In chapter 6, Snow said he had somepony to talk to when he got back, what happened to that?

945142He was going to go speak to Flare once he got back into town. But I forgot about that part :twilightblush: So I think I dun goofed.

947336 i believe an epilogue should wrap things up quite nicely. :ajsmug:

947471 You don't know how much your reply made me laugh right now, I'm crying! I think you meant 'things' not 'thongs' BWA~HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! :rainbowlaugh:

947925 Lol, I was crying over here, that made my day. :rainbowlaugh:

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW so cute i love :pinkiehappy:

you could have a sequel where vinyl and snow raising kids and going through life delema's?

so let's see how much swag Snow has on his date tomarrow...

I was smiling the whole chapter. Well done

Beautiful :raritystarry:

That...Was fucking adorable......:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::raritystarry::yay: No amount of emoticons can explain how awesome this was!

my brain :twilightoops: it's having trouble processing how much i love this

Found this little thing...

"I'm Vinyl Scratch." She said, holding out a hoof. I gently shook her hoof with a smile on my face. " <- I don't think that extra quote mark is needed...

903057 There's no such thing as dubstep being too loud. :twilightsmile:

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