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Solifer


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Rainbow Dash is conflicted with her feelings toward her best friend and fights her own thoughts about how to tell her and whether or not Applejack will take it badly or not.

Its an AppleDash fan-fic

Its my first time writing a MLP Fan fiction so bear with me. Any critique would be appreciated. I've never written ponies before.
I am one for good grammar and spelling so please, if you find any mistakes, tell me.

A lovely picture that has inspired a part in this story is; http://aeronjvl.deviantart.com/gallery/?catpath=/#/d4plf99
Feel free to bombard the artist's dA account as they are a great artist.
Stories that inspire me;
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/6563/Pillow-thoughts
http://bronyneumo.deviantart.com/gallery/31814017
http://malikvamp.deviantart.com/gallery/35598394

{Not sure if I will ever actually finish this..I have never finished a story before}

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 17 )

First !Yay!:twilightsmile:

FIRST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :trollestia:

878572Trololololololol!!!!!:trollestia:Its witchcraft!!!!!:twilightoops:

Something tells me Solifer won't really appreciate having you guys spam his/her story.

You both cant be fucking first to bad guy but you were literraly a second away from being first! But who the fuck cares really.

878612
Spamming like that can get quite annoying, So You are right. Best regards ~

Ok now its time to talk about the story. Its a commonly done pairing but its still fun to read. The only thing i didnt like about the story was i felf 75% of the words was applejack saying "Ah" i understand she says it but that often is a little fucking much. I will happily contine to read why hell i will favorite you might be just what i am looking for! Will you take story requests?

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Commonly done, I know, But I am a huge fan of AppleDash.
Yeah, I'd take story requests though it would only be to the best of my ability, this is my first writing in a few months and Im a bit rusty when it comes to it, and Ponies being brand new in writing for me. But what the heck, Its always worth a shot so yes.
And I'll keep the 'Ah' in mind and see to fix that

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I really enjoyed reading it but it seems to fall into the niche that all apple dash fics run towards, they both want each other, both are afraid, and both learn at the same time of each others feelings than fall madly in love the end. I don't mind but a few suggestions to keep it from falling into that hole would be; throw in some side story's that advance their relationship but also make it fun and exciting to read, don't end the story after the happily ever after, one thing I really want in a shipping fic is to know what happens after, and not just a quick burst either but a few story's of adventures they run with together. Also what are you plans for the other main 4; encouraging, disappointed, or to involved in their own shipping to care but still encourage it anyways. I prefer the third option myself. Anyways keep it up :) you have an awesome baseline setup it just depends on which way you take it. I would gladly be a pre/proof reader for you if you want. I read fanfics religiously haha:scootangel:

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This advice, much appreciated. Yeah I've read a bit of AppleDash fan-fics and I know the 'both like, both afraid, blah blah, etc.'
I can tell you one thing I wont do is break Rainbow's wing xD Now that is too over done.
As for the direction this story goes, Not even I know what will happen. This first part was written in a little over an hour on a whim with no real idea in mind.
I haven't found out yet where the other of the main 6 will come in, And I will try then to keep it from following too much of other AppleDash ship fics. I'll look into as well about going into side things to advance their relation.
Having someone as a pre-reader or proof reader would greatly help, I believe. So I shall look into that as well. Much appreciated on your insight.

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My first thing, It took me a moment to realize what you meant by italics for her thoughts, because on the original word document I had her thoughts in italics. Though thanks for catching that here.
I understand the change in past and present tense but that is just a problem I face in general. I have always done that in every one of my writings.
The pop, the paragraphs mainly jump back and forth between AJ and RD, So whichever was actually mentioned in that paragraph was the one to hear the pop. Though I'd automatically assume they bother heard the pop.
The reason behind Rainbow didnt actually push Applejack off at that point I used was that she had just fallen and had a heavy weight land over top of her. That would take the wind out of anyone and there would be a bit of a struggle to push said weight off.
For the rope, Yeah, but it was outta frustration when she got stuck.
I shall keep the "Ah" thing in mind as well as using it a lot.
And yes, ultimately I plan to continue with it.
Danke for your words

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Personally, I think using "Ah" is overkill. Applejack doesn't really say "Ah"; she says "I", but her accent sort of warps it into something that sounds only somewhat like "Ah". And then there's the problem of choosing whether to capitalize the "Ah" or not. Some do it to distinguish it as they would with "I", while others keep it lowercase because it's not a name. Other people may think differently, but I say just using "I" is appropriate as long as you keep in mind the other aspects of Applejack's accent.

You've got me curious... :3

*follow*

Edit: Well, make this the one you'll finish ;3

890419 We will have to see about that, But bear in mind it may take a long time for it to be finished

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