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TheEveryDaySparkle


A fellow fan and author. Newbie and looking to make friends here on this amazing site of ours

Comments ( 24 )

Ehhh, the pacing is as fast as a jetliner, and the writing leaves much to be desired. Not a bad story though. You don't see VinylMac... BigScratch? DJ-M4CINT0S}{?

Shit, I dunno

Interesting. I'm definitely interested on this one.

Sounds interesting ! My fav male and female :3

I will follow this story, I hope to see it get updates regularly.

Given how different Octavia and Vilyn are, I think sisters, half-sisters and or step-sisters would be their relationship, but other than th at this was a great second cha.... wait a minute how come neither of these two girls can't id Big Mac? Okay Vilyn not connecting the dots because she's tired from work, but Octavia? I am reading too much into this there might be a pregectly logically reason why... looking foward to more.

8149325 My friend, there is a perfectly logical reason to this. Not even in the show do either of them know Big Mac. Plus, they need to be strangers for the whole romance to work.

Good story so far :pinkiehappy:

Ooh, an update. I almost forgot about this. Reading now :3

Not sure if Applejack was the best Apple sibling for this scene. Apple Bloom has a lot much childlike innocence and such.
As for Octavia and Vilyn, I think they work better as sisters, but other than that, telepathy makes for a possible solution

AN UPDATE I thought I'd never se the day jk

So let's see how this goes down someone as allready fainted so it can only get more intresting am I right

Are they humans or ponies? I'm confused.

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Then why did you write; Those ponies love you? Those ponies, how can they be humans when you wrote ponies?

Noticed some typos, the most frequent is a lack of capitalizing names

Noticed some errors, mostly typos along the line of misspelled words and a lack capitalized letters at the start of proper names, you might want to wait a few hours before hitting submit so you can do one last errors check before hitting the submit button

So when can we expect the next chapter?

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Thank you for reminding me about this. I'll see if I can do it, but recently I haven't felt the urge to go back to any of my previous stories. Maybe a week?

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So it's June, I take it you're not continuing the story?

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Oh. There are people who actually want me to finish this? Well, if that's the case, then I'll put a bit of effort into cranking out chapters for the few of you who care. I never came back because I figured no one gave a crap. Well, that and I'm lazy. I'll make a new chapter.

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I can't speak for others, but I find the ship an interesting concept.

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