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"He vuelto"

Amari is a 'New Girl' of Canterlot High, shes a sly girl who gets away with anything. What will happen when Amari threatens to ruin the girls life?

(Overwatch inspired)

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VitalSpark

First Published
21st Apr 2017
Last Modified
21st Apr 2017
#1 · 5d, 13h ago · · · Chapter One ·

You know, the doors at CHS happen to be electronic locks...

#2 · 5d, 12h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8111447 Im sorry im not too sure what your on about

#3 · 4d, 17h ago · · · Chapter One ·

Nice story so far can't  wait to read more also love this mysterious girl :)

#4 · 4d, 10h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8113033 Thank youuu currently writing chapter twooo

#5 · 3d, 17h ago · · · Chapter One ·

To be honest, I like the concept, but i feel like everyone is a little out of character. Sombra is a little too quick to threaten Rainbow and Sunset, confrontation just isn't her style. Maybe this will be explained later, but why does Sombra feel the need to separate the girls from each other? Sunset and Rainbow are arsonists for some reason, i fell like neither of them would just burn a building down for fun. Also, fluttershy falls for Sombra a little too quickly. Grammar wise, the story is fine, it just seems a little flat so far in terms of development.

#6 · 3d, 13h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8115004 ill all fall into place, and well done *claps* thanks for the comment though

#7 · 3d, 40m ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8115422 Well thanks for staying positive. A  of people would have just brushed me off. I'm going to follow this, i'd like to see you improve.

#8 · 2d, 19h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8116601 Thanks also i never brush off people who take the time to read my story

#9 · 2d, 15h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8115004

Sombra? Am I missing something? Amari is Sombra in disguise?

#10 · 2d, 13h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8117560 Well the cover, the title, she has a translocator, she can hack, it seems pretty obvious that it's Sombra in disguise, or at least a character inspired by her.

#11 · 2d, 12h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8117780

Oh… I see now… there's a character called Sombra in Overwatch. Didn't know that. I thought you meant King Sombra from My Little Pony.

#12 · 2d, 10h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8117857 Dangit, i always forget that he was a thing lol. Yeah, i meant the character from overwatch.

#13 · 2d, 3h ago · · · Chapter One ·

>>8117857

>>8118128

Now everyone gets that mixed up haha. Thats why i used the name Amari (still from overwatch) instead of Sombra, just because that will get confusing, i would have used her real name but its not stated but yeah haha i actually have a photo with both Sombras together

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