• Member Since 28th Jun, 2015
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Welcome to my little slice of FimFiction, i hope you enjoy your stay! If you enjoy my stories, i write more stuff on my Patreon if you feel like checking that out.

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There were a few grammar issues, but I'd like to see where this goes.

*Edit: One thing I should add though, is that you should make scenes clearer. I didn't know who was sitting at the table and I didn't know Twilight was supposed to be there, until you said it. You should describe scenes and locations, and describe the characters who are there and matter at least a little bit.

Okay thanks, if it helps im doing a few reworks on the begining. Changing things a bit and basically making a brand new story with the same idea behind it

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