Sun Rise: A new dawn

by Jet Storm

Chapter 7: Earthling

“Homo Sapiens,” droned the teacher as he wrote the word down on the chalkboard, “is the binomial or scientific name for human.”

It was Friday afternoon at Canterlot High, and about half an hour remained on the clock. As luck would have it, the last class of the day was a biology one with the boring Professor Stein, and Sunset Shimmer, like the rest of the class, was painfully waiting for it to end.

“The full term is Homo Sapiens Sapiens,” he continued in his usual monotone voice. “Can anyone tell me who coined the term? Anyone? Anyone?”

Professor Ben Stein was a dreadfully tired and somewhat bitter old man. He cared not for the students or the subject he taught, but rather the paycheck that came at the end of each month. His apathetic manner and long lectures reverberated a lethargic tone with the students who struggled to remain interested and/or awake. Rainbow Dash, however, had long lost that battle and was snoring openly in plain view.

Even Sunset Shimmer, one of CHS’s brightest and most diligent students, was equally frustrated and bored with his slow pace and tendency to drag questions. She glanced at her friends, wondering what each of them was up to. Pinkie Pie was surrounded by a wall of books which she used to hide the large chocolate cake she was now decorating. Applejack was writing invitations for the next family reunion whilst Rarity was designing a new evening frock for next year’s ball formal.

Fluttershy sat at the back, appearing alert and a little guilty. Every so often (when the Professor had his back turned) she would sneakily open her bag and give a tasty treat to whichever one of her pets was residing inside. Although Twilight had finished the textbooks for that class, she remained vigilant in case the Professor decided to talk about any additional information not already covered in the course outline. Like Fluttershy, Twilight was hiding Spike in her bag but had to kick it whenever the dog was snoring too loudly.

Sunset couldn’t help but smile admirably at each of them. She was so lucky and proud to have met and befriended such wonderful girls.

“The term was coined by Carl Linnaeus in 1758,” said Professor Stein flatly, answering his own question and momentary interrupting Sunset’s train of thought.

She glanced up at the clock and groaned inwardly. Only a few minutes had passed. Placing a hand on the journal in front of her, Sunset began to stroke the cover affectionately, circling a finger around the emblem of the combined cutie mark. It was Sunset’s only remaining connection to her homeworld and to a very special pony that made her new life possible. Princess Twilight. As time ticked ever so slowly, Sunset couldn’t help but think about the past major events that led her to become friends with the six girls.

The CHS Ball Formal.

The Battle of the Bands.

The Friendship Games.

And their most recent adventure: Camp Everfree, which was especially memorable and profoundly more significant.

Earlier that month, Principal Celestia and Vice Principal Luna had taken a class of students to Camp Everfree as a reward to those who had participated or helped organize the Friendship games. It had been a magical experience, both figuratively and literally as the girls discovered their extraordinary new powers. The prospect of these new abilities both excited and frightened Sunset Shimmer as the divide between the two worlds seemed to blur as evermore Equestrian Magic seeped into the human world.

The ‘wild’ magic (as Applejack called it) appeared random at times but had a corrupting influence on any unfortunate soul it came into contact with. Gloriosa, the camp manager and owner of Camp Everfree was the most recent victim of such powerful magic after finding seven mysterious geodes in a nearby cave.

Originally Gloriosa had intended to use the magic to keep the campers happy and satisfied, hoping to raise enough money to repay her debts. Despite her best efforts, however, she was unable to control the magic, which lead to disastrous consequences. Her brother, Timber, tried desperately to convince Gloriosa to give up the geodes and surrender the land, but his cries fell on deaf ears. She stood, arrogantly confident that she could control the magic and find a solution to their financial woes, but the ever-growing likelihood of losing her family’s legacy coupled with the overwhelming power of the geodes corrupted her and ultimately transformed her into the giant tree monster, Gaia Everfree.

Thankfully, however, Sunset and her friends were able to defeat Gaia Everfree using their newfound powers. Whilst no one got seriously hurt, the results were devastating and costly. The money they had raised to repay some of the outstanding loans was not enough to also cover the damages that had occurred during their epic battle with Gaia Everfree. Feeling somewhat responsible, the girls decided to meet up at the library after school to brainstorm some fundraising ideas.

“Now, can anyone name another type of ancient human species?” asked Professor Stein. As per the norm, the room was dead silent. Picking up the attendance sheet, Stein glossed over the names to select an unwilling, random student. “Ms.-

At that exact moment, however, Sunset’s journal vibrated and chimed loudly on her desk, setting off a chain reaction of events. Fluttershy’s pet jumped out of her bag, knocking into Pinkie Pie which caused her to activate her powers as she was spreading the last of the sprinkles onto her lavish cake. The cake then exploded, splattering all over the nearby students, including Applejack’s finished invitations and Rarity’s sketchbook. Spike awoke barking at the commotion but was silenced abruptly by a swift sweep of Twilight’s leg. All of which had rudely awakened the sleeping teen, who stood to attention shouting, “5! No, wait, 16.”

In the midst of the commotion, a layer of chocolate frosting and pink sprinkles now covered Professor Stein’s face and glasses. He remained motionless and silent.

Taking this opportunity, Sunset quickly slipped the offending journal into her bag, whilst Fluttershy snatched the pet bunny in mid-air with her empty bag. Applejack hurriedly hid the soiled and unsoiled invitations in her pockets whilst Rarity shut her book, cementing the cake into every page and ruining her new designs. Twilight hushed and apologised to the whimpering dog in her bag and Pinkie Pie miraculously licked her books, desk and self-clean.

This left poor Rainbow Dash to stand out alone, dazed and confused. Before she could gather her wits, however, Professor Stein glared angrily at her, as some of the frosting dripped off his hook nose and onto the attendance sheet.

“This is not math, lunch, or nap time, Ms. Dash,” he said grumpily causing some of her classmates to snicker at her misfortune. “This is Biology.”

“Hehehe,” Rainbow Dash laughed nervously before lowering her head shamefully, “sorry Professor.”

BRRRRINNNGG

The school bell had finally rung. Chairs shuffled and creaked as the students left as quickly as they could, with the exception of Sunset and the five other girls who felt somewhat responsible for Rainbow Dash’s predicament.

Wiping the cake from his mouth, he said in no uncertain terms, “Detention. After school. Two weeks. Monday.”

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“My designs. Ruined,” wailed Rarity as she tried to salvage the pages from her sketchbook. “I’ll have to start all over again. All. Over. Again.”

“Shoot, and I just finished the invitations to the Apples on the east coast,” groaned Applejack. “Now I have to go to the store and get some more.”

“Yeah, thanks a lot, Pinkie,” Rainbow Dash grumbled as she slammed her locker door. “I’ve got soccer finals in a month. Just why the heck did you have to make a cake in class?”

“It wasn’t me,” Pinkie Pie mumbled as she took a bite of another cupcake, “Fluttershy’s rabbit surprised everyone and knocked over my triple layered chocolate cake. I was going to share that with everyone after school.”

“Instead, you had to share it with everyone in class,” screamed Rarity.

“In my defence, it was a good cake.”

“It wasn’t Angel’s fault,” Fluttershy said whilst hugging the oblivious bunny. “He got spooked, that’s all, the poor thing. Someone should have turned off their phone during class. It’s against the rules and really inconsiderate to have them on,” she said in a chastising tone.

“So is having a pet on school grounds,” Rainbow Dash retorted, causing Fluttershy to blush in response.

“Whose phone was it anyway?” asked Twilight as she gave Spike an apologetic dog biscuit.

“It wasn’t a phone,” peeped Sunset sheepishly. “It was my journal. Sorry everyone.”

“Couldn’t Pon-Twi have waited till after class,” grumbled Rainbow Dash.

“Pon-Twi?” asked Applejack.

“Yeah, it’s my nickname for her. That way we don’t get the two Twilight’s confused.”

“So what did Princess Twilight want?” asked Fluttershy.

Sunset shrugged her shoulders. “I don’t know. With everything that happened in class, I haven’t had a chance to read it yet.”

“Hey everyone, Sunset’s book is ringing again!” Pinkie Pie announced.

The others gathered around Sunset as she removed the offending, vibrating object out of her bag. She turned to the last entry eager to read her friend’s message.

“Wow, Twilight’s handwriting is really terrible,” Rainbow Dash remarked.

“My goodness, it's absolutely awful,” agreed Rarity. “Is that an ‘A’?”

“Something must be wrong,” said Sunset Shimmer as she began to worry. “She must be frazzled. Her writing is usually much neater than this.” Sunset squinted her eyes as she moved the book closer to her face hoping to bring the words into focus. Struggle as she might, however, it didn’t work and instead she became increasingly frustrated. She let out an exasperated groan. “I can barely read it.”

“Why not get Twilight to read it?” said Spike as he scratched his ear. “If anyone can read Twilight’s bad handwriting, it’d be Twilight.”

“Hey, my handwriting is not that bad!”

“Only when you’re writing to Timber,” snickered Spike earning an elbow jab from Twilight.

“That makes sense,” nodded Pinkie Pie in agreement. “Have Twilight read Twilight’s letter.”

“Fine,” grumbled Twilight. “Give it here, Sunset.”

“Sure, go ahead,” giggled Sunset as she passed the book over to Twilight. Twilight nudged her glasses into place, concentrating on the message written by her Princess counterpart. “So what does it say, Twilight?”

“She saying there’s a human in Equestria?”

“WHAT!” shouted the girls in unison.

“A human?” asked Pinkie Pie.

“In Equestria?” stammered Rarity.

“Did someone go through the portal?” wondered Sunset with great concern.

“Wait, there’s more... Can’t speak English … Language unknown … Uma san ... Hi … Ear …Sorry, this last one is a bit tricky. Chi … ku wait no cue ... gin?”

“I recognize a few of those words,” responded Sunset Shimmer. “I work at a sushi bar on the weekends. Those words are Japanese. “‘Hai’ mean ‘yes’ and and ‘Iya’ means ‘no.’

“What about that uma word or the other one … Chi-something or other?” asked Applejack

“Sorry but I don’t know what the others mean.”

“Chikyūjin. I am pretty sure that it is pronounced, Chi-kyū-jin,” muttered a voice out loud to herself, earning the attention of the six girls whose jaws dropped as they all stared at the most unlikely translator.

“Yes, now I know ‘Uma’ means ‘horse’ and if I am not mistaken ‘Chikyūjin’ should mean ‘earthling’. Hmmm … It’s rather interesting that she wrote ‘Chikyūjin’ as opposed to ‘Ningen’ which means ‘hum-’. Wait why are you all staring at me like that?”

“How in the heck did you know that?” asked Rainbow Dash dumbfounded.

“Wow that was amazing, Rarity,” said Fluttershy in awe. “I didn’t know you spoke Japanese.”

“I don’t,” stammered Rarity as her cheeks began to burn a light crimson red. “Ah - I mean, well yes, I am very interested in international fashion trends and Tokyo has some leading designers. So it’s a good idea to have a basic understanding of Japanese.”

“Really” questioned Rainbow Dash, raising an eyebrow in disbelief. “I didn’t think horses would be a fashion trend?”

“Is that what it was?” asked Pinkie Pie, a little disappointed. “See, I thought that it was because you were hiding some amazingly, deep, dark secret that would be awfully embarrassing to share that would make you feel like you’d lose your social standing among your peers. You know that sort of thing?”

“Why - of course not,” smiled Rarity.

“Are you sure there isn’t something you’d like to tell us?” said Applejack with an evil and almost knowing grin.

“Nope. I have nothing to tell,” dismissed Rarity, “Absolutely nothing at all.”

“Wait a minute,” squinted Pinkie Pie. “Let me see your sketchbook for a second.”

“You can’t!” shouted Rarity, grabbing her bag quickly and holding on to it tightly. “My book? Pinkie, you ruined it with your c-”

“Yoink,” smirked a Rainbow blur. “Here you go, Pinkie.”

“Thanks, Dashie! Now what do we have here?” laughed Pinkie Pie as she began to turn the pages of the incriminating sketchbook.

“No, wait, you can’t. Please stop,” protested Rarity as both Rainbow Dash and Applejack grabbed onto her shoulders, holding the poor girl at bay. “Stop it, Pinkie Pie. I beg of you, no.”

Fluttershy became flustered as Rarity struggled. “Pinkie Pie, I umm … really think you should give Rarity her boo-

“Ah ha! I knew it! These aren’t designs for next years ball formal! They’re cosplay designs for next month’s COMIC-CON!”

“No, it’s not like that! Sweetie Bell-”

“And look here! She is drawing her own doujinshi! It’s Rarity and some hot looking dude ... Who’s Spike-sama? He looks nothing like Spike.”

“So Rarity likes anime and manga?” chuckled Sunset over Pinke’s shoulder. “Who would have thought?”

“FINE! I ADMIT IT! I AM AN OTAKU!” wailed Rarity. “THERE! ARE YOU HAPPY NOW!”

“What’s an otaku?” asked Fluttershy.

“It means nerd or obsessed,” answered Sunset. “Now that word, I do know.”

“No way!” exclaimed Rainbow Dash. “Rarity is a nerd! What’s next! Fluttershy’s on the debate team?”

“The horror! The horror!” gasped Applejack in a mocking tone.

“Just ignore them,” chastised Fluttershy as Rainbow Dash and Applejack continued to roar with laughter, “they’re being a couple of old meanies”.

“Oh, Rarity, everyone has hobbies but it’s nothing to be ashamed about,” reassured Twilight.

“It just took us by surprise,” said Sunset, “That’s all.”

“It was just a joke,” said Rainbow as she wiped away a tear.

“Yeah,” giggled Pinkie Pike, as she continued browsing through the remaining pages. “It’s not like there is anything else in here that would further embarrass-.

But before Pinkie could proceed any further, Rarity pounced. “GIMME THAT!” she shouted, snatching the book back once more and holding onto it tightly. An awkward silence fell onto the group as Rarity’s face went beet red and glared dangerously at her friends.

“Listen Y'all,” began Applejack, “teasin’ Rarity has been fun and all, but shouldn’t we be getting back to the task at hand? You know, Twilight’s message?”

“Huh? Oh yes, of course,” Twilight pushed up her glasses again and continued to read, “please come back to Equestria … Need help … Bring translation book if possible.”

“Would there be one at the library, perhaps?” asked Fluttershy.

“Probably not,” Sunset said with a sigh. “They only teach Spanish, French and Mandarin at CHS.”

“Hey Rarity,” began Applejack. “You don’t suppose-”

“FORGET IT!” snapped Rarity. “You’ve already tainted my good name enough! Must you drag it down even further.”

“Come on, we already apologized,” said Rainbow Dash. “You’re a nerd, who cares.”

“Rainbow Dash,” chastised Fluttershy.

“That’s not helping,” agreed Applejack.

“Just hear me out first,” snapped Rainbow Dash. She walked over to Rarity until she was a few feet away. She rubbed her elbow awkwardly, feeling a bit embarrassed as she prepared to confess. “Listen, before Twilight came here from Crystal Prep, I always thought reading was a thing only dorks and nerds would do.”

Rarity turned away, not wanting to face Rainbow Dash, but she continued anyway. “Reading was never for the cool, athletic types like me but … but then I read a copy of Daring Do when I sprained my wrist. I never realised how much fun it was to read until then… and if it hadn’t been for all of you, I would never have accepted that part of myself ... so I understand … and like I said, it’s okay.”

“Awww,” gushed Pinkie Pie.

“You may have a nerdy side, but you’re still the same fashion queen we know and love … so I’ll say it again. Who cares if you’re a nerd. You’re still awesome and right now, Pon-Twi needs you.”

“That was mighty sweet of you,” chuckled Applejack before elbowing Rainbow Dash playfully in the side. “Who knew you had a mushy side?”

“Shut up,” said Rainbow Dash with a slight tinge of red on her cheeks.

Rarity was moved by Rainbow’s confession but her pride remained stubborn and refused to relent.

“Rarity, Rainbow Dash is right,” said Sunset Shimmer. “I know you’re embarrassed to admit you’re -” Rarity shot a dangerous glare at Sunset as though daring to complete that sentence “- your other hobbies but Princess Twilight really needs our help. If you have a spare translation book or an English-Japanese dictionary that she could use, I know she would really appreciate it.”

Rarity sighed her ego still a little bruised, “Fine, I have a couple of books at home. I can bring an older edition tomorrow.”

“From the sounds of it, Ah think Sunset is gonna need that book now, Rare,” said Applejack.

Sunset nodded. “I know this is a lot to ask but-”

“It’s fine, Darling. Just give me few minutes to freshen up, and I’ll ask dad if he can bring it here.”

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Back in Equestria, Princess Twilight was pacing up and down in front of a mirror whilst Spike was busy cleaning up the chaotic mess that was the castle library. Her plan had worked. Twilight had finally managed to unearth some very important information that could lead to the identity of the strange new pony.

Although she should feel some reprieve, she couldn’t help but worry as the discovery now lead to more questions than answers. A human in Equestria! What could all this mean? she thought to herself. Did he really come from the stars? Did a portal open up when the star fell in the Everfree Forest and he just came through by accident?

A very important guest would be arriving soon and one that would hopefully deliver Twilight with some more answers. She glanced out at an open window with eager frustration. Visiting hours at the hospital were nearly over as the sun began to set over the horizon. “Where is she?”

“Ah for Pete's sake Twilight! You need to relax,” said Spike with a broom in claw. “It’s only been an hour.”

“What are you talking about?” Twilight responded all too quickly. “Relaxed? Of course, I’m relaxed. Don’t I look relaxed? I’m so relaxed.”

Spike rolled his eyes. “Twilight, I’m sure she got your message.”

“But what if she didn’t! I mean so much has happened that I haven’t been able to write to her in so long. Maybe she lost the journal, or maybe *gasp* what if she doesn’t think we are friends anymore. What is she became evil again!”

“Becoming Evil? Twilight, that’s ridiculous. Sunset has friends of her own now, plus she adores you. Sunset becoming evil,” scoffed Spike as he shook his head.

But before she could retort, a sudden burst of purple energy emitted from Twilight’s journal. It travelled through the machine before powering the mirror and opening up the portal between two worlds. And for the briefest of seconds, Twilight’s guest had arrived launching into a pile of books that Spike had just finished organising.

“Oh, you have got to be kidding me,” Spike groaned.

“SUNSET!” shouted Twilight as she ran to the aid of her friend. "Sunset, oh my gosh, are you alright?"

“Twilight … is that you?” groaned the voice as she struggled to get up.

“Thank goodness you're here,” smiled Twilight before throwing her forearms around Sunset and squeezing her tightly. “I was worried you didn’t get my message.”

“Of course, Twilight,” replied Sunset who was still a feeling little groggy. “Why would you think I wasn’t coming?”

“Simple,” said Spike nonchalantly as he began to reorganise the book piles, “Twilight was worried that you lost the journal, or thought that you thought that she didn’t care about you anymore because she hadn’t written to you in a while and you’d became evil again- HEY” snapped Spike, as Twilight suddenly teleported and smacked the dragon’s head from behind.

“Evil huh?”

“Ahahahaha. Nevermind him,” interjected Twilight. “Spike’s just a little cranky from everything that has happened over the past couple of days. Nothing that a good nap couldn’t help but fix.”

“It’s fine, Twilight, I’m used to it,” said Sunset as she got up and attempted to stand on her two legs. “Anyway, I have something for you.”

“Do you have any of those awesome biscuits?” asked Spike hopefully. “You know the one that Fluttershy makes.”

“Sorry Spike. Fluttershy did make you a batch but the other Spike ate them.”

“Wait, other Spike?”

“She means the Spike from the human world” snapped Twilight, before turning to Sunset. “Sorry but we’re on a tight schedule. Sunset, do you know what language he speaks?

“We think so,” said Sunset. “Your writing was pretty messy but the other Twilight was able to decipher what you wrote.”

“Other Twilight?” asked Spike.

“Umm… yeah her counterpart,” explained Sunset. “To make things easier, we’ll just call my Twilight, ‘Sci-Twi’. Anyway, getting off track. Rarity believes your mysterious pony is speaking Japanese.”

“Can you speak the language at all?” asked Twilight hopefully. “Japanese, I mean?”

“I know a couple of words, but Rarity knows a lot more than I do. I didn’t think it would be a good idea to bring her here but she did have something that should be able to help.” Sunset turned to the bag on her back. She opened the flap and attempted to grab the book but was magnificently failing to do so. “Now if only I can get this book. Out. Of. My. Bag,” she grunted.

“Ahem, Sunset” coughed Twilight as she pointed to her horn.

“Oh yeah, magic,” chuckled Sunset sheepishly before using her magic to retrieve the book and hand it over to Twilight. “Here you go, Twilight.”

Twilight eagerly took the book, and without further hesitation, began to speed read through its pages as alien characters appeared alongside familiar words. “This is amazing, I’ve never seen anything like this. I wonder if there are any examples of these types of ruins here in our world.”

“Umm... Twilight,” interrupted Sunset, breaking Twilight’s train of thought. “Will this do?”

“Yes, this should be enough. More references books and different points of view would be preferable but this is a great start.”

Sunset was beaming a large smile. She always looked up to Princess Twilight, and was so happy to be able to help. She enjoyed being back in Equestria with her first friend. If only she could stay for a bit longer and be apart of Twilight’s latest adventure. “So, I don’t have to go home right away … maybe I could-”

“Sweet Celestia, Twilight,” shouted Spike as he pointed to a nearby clock. “We better be going. Visiting hours are nearly over.”

“What! Oh no, I completely forgot,” said Twilight. “I’m sorry, Sunset, but we have to go. The others will be waiting. Come on, Spike.”

“Wait-” and with that Twilight disappeared out the door, with Spike following close behind her. The dejected mare dropped her forearm and slumped. “Great! Left behind … again. Guess I better get back home.”

“Hey,” shouted Spike, snapping Sunset out of a stupor. “You coming or not?”

Sunset’s ear perked up. “Huh? Yes, of course.”

Author's Note:

Alright everypony, it's guess that meta reference! Today's one is from the 1980's. Take a crack if you think you can get it. If not take the day off.

Also the video clip is from MLP:EQ Mirror Magic. Enjoy!

Edit: Sorry I forgot to mention that dear "Spike-sama" is none other than Spike Spiegel from Cowboy Bebop, an anime from 1998. Anyway thanks for reading

Comments

[LavendarRegards]

This is another good chapter. I love the concept of Rarity the closet Otaku.

Although I cannot imagine Fluttershy overcoming her social phobia enough to join the debate club, I suspect she would do pretty well in it if she could overcome her phobia (she at least feels strongly enough about Animals to have a strong opinion).

[HB_DS2013]

I didn’t think Rarity would be the closet Otaku of all people, but I DID expect her to be a closet cosplayer, though. I doubt that liking a book series makes a pony become a nerd, so I doubt that Rainbow Dash is a nerd. She’s still the designated dumbass jock, though.

On the other hand, I can totally see Twilight and Fluttershy being otaku, mainly because of that one nightmare night episode for the latter and the former prolly has hobbies to do other than science and engineering, I think. I still think it’s pretty cool that Sci-Twi in one universe is pretty much the mother of energy weapons.

[Jet Storm]

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Originally, I had written such that Sci-Twi would be the "translator" as such, but my proofreader challenged me to do something else, hence forth why we have something different here. I agree that Rarity definitely would have fit the "closet" cosplayer but because she is a talented designer, I thought she'd easily have the ability to expand her "Otaku" nature, in drawing comics as well. Also, the costumes that some anime writers create would be very outlandish and unique that I think would appeal to Rarity.

With RD, I think in her mind, liking books still equates to being an "egg-head" and being the "proud athlete" would have been beneath her. Though, by sharing this, I had hoped to humanise RD a bit, and let Rarity open up a bit more.

The main point of the chapter in that section, was that your friends would embrace your secret hobbies and likes, no matter how embarrassing you may think they may be, because they don't fit your normal style. In a way, it's a message to myself to embrace my own closet brony.

[HB_DS2013]

8730996 That particular passage is pretty much a shoutout to pretty much anyone with secret hobbies. I don’t really have an uber-dramatic origin story about how I got into ponies, but here i am anyway.

[1337sp33k]

Update when? Seriously, After staying up to 6:00? in the morning going through manga and such online, I found this, gave it a read, got to the latest chapter, found out more than an hour have passed, and I am still craving more. Its 7:30 A.M.! Worth it!

The quality and effort put into this actually trumps Equestria Girls: Battle of the Gods by a huge margin, something that I am truly grateful for since that story desperately needs a beta reader An interesting idea yes, but there are a lot of mistakes and rushed/awkward scene-scripting that made me question why am I still reading it when I should wait until the author got some proofreading done. I plan to go back after... a month, and see if it got edited.

As for this story, there is plenty of character internal thoughts that are solid and not out of character, and the suspense from the mysteries and dilemmas you created just makes this extremely addicting. There is very few glaring mistakes if any at all, and I believe people are able to read it as a novel. This definitely earns my approval!

Hey, it's me Goku! Looks like I don't need to talk to myself anymore! Twilight seems to have finally found a way for us to chat things out right too! Maybe I can figure out how to get my body back and fast! I'm getting really hungry and it's hard to eat anything at all with these strange hooves! Next on Dragon Ball Super! " Greetings are made! Conversing with the strange pony at last!!" Don't Miss it!

[Jet Storm]

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Thanks for the feedback. I've been a bit slack in progressing on this story. I've had a terrible bout of writer's block. But after such a ringing endorsement, it certainly has got my muse roused.

Having said that however, the next chapter won't be released soon, unfortunately. The reason is because I am engaging an artist to work on a couple of scenes, which also means further reworking on some previous chapters. I'm also planning to release three chapters side by side as a couple of things need to be fleshed out a bit.

[Dani Cash]

Vale mucho la pena tu historia bro espero que la continues

[Jet Storm]

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Gracias 

[Miles Skywalker]

This is really good so far, but why is Goku speaking in Japanese? All I can hear when reading Goku's lines is Masako Nozawa's voice droning on and on and it is so annoying

[crazybee]

I really do hope this gets picked up again, loving the concept of the language barrier.

[Natt]

Aww :( that was getting really interesting