This story is a sequel to Lovie Dovie: Make a Wish
Oliver Howard Scatch is a man who some would say is pretty kind in general, but he has one flaw: He's paranoid and obsessed with his masculinity. Despite his rather shy personality, he tends to avoid anything he thinks would affect his appearance as a 'man', such as pink colors, not working out, and ignoring his car.
Yet, he's not too happy with his life the way it is. It's unfortunate that a strange drawing in his yard not only drags him to a new world but as a vehemently pink dragoness whose body is more delicate in shape than the rest and centralized around cute hearts. Now he needs to try and return home to his own body while being part of a group of dragons whose importance is severely underestimated among the dragon community.
man, this guy has some serious isusses.
like really, he needs to see a psychologist.
the way he's portrayed makes it seem like he was tortured as a child by some figure of femininity, i'll be frank
I like the concept for the fic but the main character is striking me as a trauma victim in need of serious help,
and this is acomedy, not something serious.my advice would be tone him down a bit, make him seem more believable, like somebody you could see walking down the street one day, not a psych-ward patient.
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I thought I removed that tag. Looks like my navigator lagged. Lemme remove that.I lied. I actually don't know if I should keep it or remove it.
What do you mean by 'more believable'?
i NEED FUCKING MORE.... of this hilarity. I wanna see him freakout..... ahh I love HiE! Yasss!
Big Dragonness is big.... fuck your cliffhanger.
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8073481 Right now he seems more like a spongebob character, not so much like an actual person. the "running in circles" bit was just too out there, i'd tone it down to just an internal freak-out, especially if you're actually going for somebody with deeply seated issues.
And in my personal experience, somebody with that kind of problem is more likely to crawl up into a ball than run around in circles.
I'll keep an eye on this fic, since I probably got the wrong first impression from the now nonexistent comedy tag.
8075080 Mmmm, I like to diversify things. I don't like keeping them 'realistic'. That's boring and limits one's options when writing characters. I want this character to be unique and have his own unique way of displaying said problems.
8075466 now what about Cutiemark Crusaders 10k The fourth deity?
8075515 I'll get on it. The chapter is already open.
8075519 Good.
8076058 Why do you keep behaving like someone giving me orders? Watch yourself, Chaz. I don't appreciate that kind of behavior.
8076084 Ok sorry I will behave.
8076100 Thank you.
8076714 You're Welcome.
8076730 Lovie Dovies R00L, Cutiemark Crusaders DR00L
Oliver Howard Scatch is related to Vinyl Scratch, right?
8079196 No. How dare you rhyme in my house.
I'm liking this so far. Especially that the protagonist (unlikeable as "he" is) is getting teased by her teachers, hitting her where it hurts the most, her pride in her (former) masculinity. She really gave that away rather quickly.
I need more Scarlet in my life.
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I am not a Potato. Don' disgrace me, ye grot.
8083100 Whatever you say, Gourdflare.
8085637 Shoulda been tree-fitty.
Will Lovey ever learn to walk or is she going to be a big, blubbering baby dragon her entire life?! Find out next time on Dragons Without Balls Z!!
8087381 *nuclear slaps you*
8087384 AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!
Ach.... this armor design is FABULOUS, i'm using it~
I loved this chapter... for obvious reasons, my Princess is there, I am there, ME ME ME!!! War is coming.
Just my two OCs' fighting in the background, you know, no big deal. c:
For such a short chapter, I couldn't seem to take my eyes off it, I was completely enveloped in the words.
8115823 m8
8116032 m9
8073431 I agree, He sounds like a psycho
I may not be a woman but he's turning out to be quite a sexist
Is he assuming that all females wear high heels? He sounds more like some little kid than an actual grown man
Sexist Asshat!
8157452 That's the idea. Won't be like that forever, though.
hello 8157786 You got my attention
8167080 What's with the custom warframe symbol? Oh no! *runs away*
8167223 Wait do not runs away I just want to be friends
8167994 *throws cat at you*
8168007 Cats, i love cats especially with quechu. just kidding
8168044 Quechu?
8168137 sorry I meant ketchup
8168159 Oh. Ew.
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just kidding
8168182 >:C
8168228 I'm sorry if the joke was not to your liking
8168335 I'm just eching about.
8168345 I am confused what eching means
My English is not complete
8168431 It's not an english word. It's a sound that Jontron from youtube has been attached with. He often does 'ech' and 'ach' noises.